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1、Continuation Writing-How to write a reasonable story 11.Acknowledgebasicrulesofcontinuationwriting2.Learntoexploreusefulinformationinreading3.Learntodevelopcoherentemotionandlogicalplotline4.LearntopolishandupgradesentencesLearning Objectives2什么是读后续写？什么是读后续写？提供一篇提供一篇350词左右的阅读材料（一般是记叙文，词左右的阅读材料（一般是记叙
2、文，且以事件发生的时间为序）。且以事件发生的时间为序）。根据该材料的内容情节等，续写两段，根据该材料的内容情节等，续写两段，150词左词左右右（每个段落都给出了第一句），每个段落都给出了第一句），将其发展为一将其发展为一篇逻辑合理情节完整的短文。篇逻辑合理情节完整的短文。3读后续写考查什么？读后续写考查什么？核心素养：核心素养：思维品质：思维品质：想象能力和想象能力和创新精神创新精神语言能力：语言能力：阅读和写作阅读和写作具体说来，四个方面：具体说来，四个方面：把握短文关键信息和语把握短文关键信息和语言特点的能力言特点的能力创造性思维能力创造性思维能力对语篇结构的把控能力对语篇结构的把控能力语
3、言运用的准确性和丰语言运用的准确性和丰富性富性4评分细则评分细则评分档次第一条第二条第三条第四条第五档（21-25分）与所给短文融合度高，与所提供的各段落开头语衔接合理。内容丰富。所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写的短文结构紧凑。第四档（16-20分）与所给短文融合度较高，与所提供的各段落开头语衔接较为合理。内容比较丰富。所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但不影响意义表达。比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写的短文结构紧凑。第三档（11-15分）与所给短文关系较为密切，与所提供的各段落开头语有一定
4、程度的衔接。写出了若干有关内容。应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求，虽有一些错误，但不影响意义表达。应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文内容连贯。第二档（6-10分）与所给短文有一定的关系，与所提供的各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接写出了一些有关内容。语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，有些语法结构和词汇方面的错误，影响了意义的表达。较少使用语句间的连接成分，全文内容缺少连贯性。第一档（1-5分）与所提供的短文和开头语的衔接较差。产出内容较少。语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误，严重影响了意义的表达。缺乏语句间的连接成分，全文内容连贯。与原文剧情融洽，与原文剧情融洽，逻辑且合理逻辑且
5、合理续写内容丰富有续写内容丰富有看点看点语法结构和词汇语法结构和词汇多样准确多样准确语句间衔接自然，语句间衔接自然，结构紧凑结构紧凑5解题思路解题思路读懂原文读懂原文情节情节回扣原文，回扣原文，结合段首结合段首句确定情句确定情节走向节走向组织细节组织细节拟写草稿拟写草稿丰富润色丰富润色细节细节671.Do bears attack people?2.Where did the event happen?3.How many people were mentioned in the event?Who were they?6.Would the two boys in danger?4.How
6、did Sam and David feel when they talked about the bear?5.What would the bear do when it sensed the presence of two boys?8Dobearsattackpeople?Theansweriscertainlypositive.SopeopleinasmallcityinColoradowereconcerned.Why?Lastweek,alargeblackbearattackedafamilyscoopandatethechickens.Itwasreportedbyaloca
7、lTVstation.Attheendofthenewsreport,apolicemanaskedlocalresidentstokeepwaste,petfoodandevenbirdseedinside,andtoreportanybearsightingsuntiltheanimalwasfound.Thepolicemanalsotoldpeopletoalwaysstayawayfromthebearwhentheysawit.Samisa12-year-oldboy.Earlierthisweek,hecametothatsmallcitytovisithisunclesfami
8、lywithhismother.Hisunclesson,David,wasveryexcitedaboutthebearthathadappearedinhisneighborsbackyard.“Sam,thereisabearinourcity,”soonafterSamarrived,Davidtoldhim.Samwascuriousaboutbearsandhehadalwaysdreamedofwatchingone.“Really?”heaskedexcitedly.“Yes.ItwentintoMrsBrownsbackyardlastweek.Itateallherchic
9、kens.ButithadrunawayandIdidntevenseeit,”saidDavid.Samlistenedwithhiseyeswideopen.“Woulditreturn?”heasked.“Veryprobably,”saidDavid,“itwouldreturnforfood.”Atlast,heaskedSam.“Doyouwanttoseethebear?”Samimmediatelynodded.Thenheasked,“Buthow?”9“Wecanputsomefoodinthebackyard.Whenthebearseesit,hewillcomeina
10、ndeatit.Butweshouldbecareful.Thebearmayattackusifheseesus.Soweshouldnevermakeanynoise.”Samnoddedagain,stillinexcitement.Laterthatday,theadultsallwentout,leavingthetwoboysaloneathome.Soontheystartedtotakeaction.Theyputsomeleftoversfromlunchinthebackyard.Thentheywaitedbehindthewindowofthekitchenandwai
11、tedcuriously.Butanhourpassedandtheydidntseeabear.Finally,theygotbored.Paragraph 1:Just then,they saw something big at the gate of the backyard.Paragraph 2:When the bear looked up,he saw Sam.10续写的两个段落的段首句（已给出）续写的两个段落的段首句（已给出）Paragraph 1:Just then,they saw something big at the gate of the backyard.Par
12、agraph 2:When the bear looked up,he saw Sam.11121.Do bears attack people?2.Where did the event happen?3.How many people were mentioned in the event?Who were they?6.Would the two boys in danger?4.How did Sam and David feel when they talked about the bear?5.What would the bear do when it sensed the pr
13、esence of two boys?13 Who attack?feel?WhereWhat did the bear do?danger?certainly positive(yes!)David,Sam,parents,Mrs Brown,policeman the bear would attack them.backyard of Davids familyexcited and eager to see the bearwould be in danger if nescesary help was absent Background InformationBackground I
14、nformation14Step 1 Step 1 精读文章精读文章Dobearsattackpeople?Theansweriscertainlypositive.SopeopleinasmallcityinColoradowereconcerned.Why?Lastweek,alargeblackbearattackedafamilyscoopandatethechickens.ItwasreportedbyalocalTVstation.Attheendofthenewsreport,apolicemanaskedlocalresidentstokeepwaste,petfoodande
15、venbirdseedinside,andtoreportanybearsightingsuntiltheanimalwasfound.Thepolicemanalsotoldpeopletoalwaysstayawayfromthebearwhentheysawit.Samisa12-year-oldboy.Earlierthisweek,hecametothatsmallcitytovisithisunclesfamilywithhismother.Hisunclesson,David,wasveryexcitedaboutthebearthathadappearedinhisneighb
16、orsbackyard.“Sam,thereisabearinourcity,”soonafterSamarrived,Davidtoldhim.Samwascuriousaboutbearsandhehadalwaysdreamedofwatchingone.“Really?”heaskedexcitedly.“Yes.ItwentintoMrsBrownsbackyardlastweek.Itateallherchickens.ButithadrunawayandIdidntevenseeit,”saidDavid.Samlistenedwithhiseyeswideopen.“Would
17、itreturn?”heasked.“Veryprobably,”saidDavid,“itwouldreturnforfood.”Atlast,heaskedSam,“Doyouwanttoseethebear?”Samimmediatelynodded.Thenheasked,“Buthow?”“Wecanputsomefoodinthebackyard.Whenthebearseesit,hewillcomeinandeatit.Butweshouldbecareful.Thebearmayattackusifheseesus.Soweshouldnevermakeanynoise.”S
18、amnoddedagain,stillinexcitement.Laterthatday,theadultsallwentout,leavingthetwoboysaloneathome.Soontheystartedtotakeaction.Theyputsomeleftoversfromlunchinthebackyard.Thentheywaitedbehindthewindowofthekitchenandwaitedcuriously.Butanhourpassedandtheydidntseeabear.Finally,theygotbored.出现熊袭击事件，警察警告出现熊袭击事
19、件，警察警告Sam和和David渴望亲渴望亲眼见到熊眼见到熊熊非常贪吃熊非常贪吃商量以食物为诱饵吸商量以食物为诱饵吸引熊引熊待大人出门时开始行动待大人出门时开始行动等待熊的出现时有点不等待熊的出现时有点不耐烦了耐烦了15Step 2 Step 2 理清思路理清思路两两“情情”相悦：相悦：coherent in emotion logical in plot 情感连贯情感连贯 情节合理情节合理 符合逻辑符合逻辑 符合常识符合常识回找伏笔：情感和情节回找伏笔：情感和情节角色调度：冲突和配合角色调度：冲突和配合16Step 2 Step 2 理清思路理清思路两两“情情”相悦：相悦：coherent
20、in emotion logical in plot 情感连贯情感连贯 情节合理情节合理 符合逻辑符合逻辑 符合常识符合常识回找伏笔：情感和情节回找伏笔：情感和情节角色调度：冲突和配合角色调度：冲突和配合17Dobearsattackpeople?Theansweriscertainlypositive.SopeopleinasmallcityinColoradowereconcerned.Why?Lastweek,alargeblackbearattackedafamilyscoopandatethechickens.ItwasreportedbyalocalTVstation.Atthee
21、ndofthenewsreport,apolicemanaskedlocalresidentstokeepwaste,petfoodandevenbirdseedinside,andtoreportanybearsightingsuntiltheanimalwasfound.Thepolicemanalsotoldpeopletoalwaysstayawayfromthebearwhentheysawit.Samisa12-year-oldboy.Earlierthisweek,hecametothatsmallcitytovisithisunclesfamilywithhismother.H
22、isunclesson,David,wasveryexcitedaboutthebearthathadappearedinhisneighborsbackyard.“Sam,thereisabearinourcity,”soonafterSamarrived,Davidtoldhim.Samwascuriousaboutbearsandhehadalwaysdreamedofwatchingone.“Really?”heaskedexcitedly.“Yes.ItwentintoMrsBrownsbackyardlastweek.Itateallherchickens.Butithadruna
23、wayandIdidntevenseeit,”saidDavid.Samlistenedwithhiseyeswideopen.“Woulditreturn?”heasked.“Veryprobably,”saidDavid,“itwouldreturnforfood.”Atlast,heaskedSam,“Doyouwanttoseethebear?”Samimmediatelynodded.Thenheasked,“Buthow?”18“Wecanputsomefoodinthebackyard.Whenthebearseesit,hewillcomeinandeatit.Butwesho
24、uldbecareful.Thebearmayattackusifheseesus.Soweshouldnevermakeanynoise.”Samnoddedagain,stillinexcitement.Laterthatday,theadultsallwentout,leavingthetwoboysaloneathome.Soontheystartedtotakeaction.Theyputsomeleftoversfromlunchinthebackyard.Thentheywaitedbehindthewindowofthekitchenandwaitedcuriously.But
25、anhourpassedandtheydidntseeabear.Finally,theygotbored.Paragraph 1:Just then,they saw something big at the gate of the backyard.Paragraph 2:When the bear looked up,he saw Sam.19“Wecanputsomefoodinthebackyard.Whenthebearseesit,hewillcomeinandeatit.Butweshouldbecareful.Thebearmayattackusifheseesus.Sowe
26、shouldnevermakeanynoise.”Samnoddedagain,stillinexcitement.Laterthatday,theadultsallwentout,leavingthetwoboysaloneathome.Soontheystartedtotakeaction.Theyputsomeleftoversfromlunchinthebackyard.Thentheywaitedbehindthewindowofthekitchenandwaitedcuriously.Butanhourpassedandtheydidntseeabear.Finally,theyg
27、otbored.Paragraph 1:Just then,they saw something big at the gate of the backyard.Paragraph 2:When the bear looked up,he saw Sam.20development of emotion line development of emotion line 情感线情感线Sam and David felt _ to see the bear,and got _ when they cant so when they finally saw the bear,they ought t
28、o feel _so when the bear noticed them they ought to feel_but the bear would _ thembecause it was fierceexcited and eagerexcitedso frightened/scaredattack Para 1Para 2bored21excited and eagerboredexcited/Para 1scared/Para 222Sam感到害怕了？说好的兴奋呢？感到害怕了？说好的兴奋呢？23tip:coherent in emotion!development of plot l
29、ine development of plot line 情节线情节线Sam and David felt _ to see the bearWhat would the boys and the bear do when the bear came in?why would the bear looked up?what would happen between bear and two boys?will the boys die?but the bear would _ themonce they saw Sam and Davidexcited and eagerattack Para
30、 1Para 224“Wecanputsomefoodinthebackyard.Whenthebearseesit,hewillcomeinandeatit.Butweshouldbecareful.Thebearmayattackusifheseesus.Soweshouldnevermakeanynoise.”Samnoddedagain,stillinexcitement.Laterthatday,theadultsallwentout,leavingthetwoboysaloneathome.Soontheystartedtotakeaction.Theyputsomeleftove
31、rsfromlunchinthebackyard.Thentheywaitedbehindthewindowofthekitchenandwaitedcuriously.Butanhourpassedandtheydidntseeabear.Finally,theygotbored.Paragraph 1:Just then,they saw something big at the gate of the backyard.Paragraph 2:When the bear looked up,he saw Sam.25如果没发现，如何和第二段开头看见衔接？如果没发现，如何和第二段开头看见衔
32、接？26tip:logical between Para1 and Para2!第一段就已经深情对视了？第一段就已经深情对视了？27tip:logical in plot!剧情神反转剧情神反转 28Dobearsattackpeople?Theansweriscertainlypositive.SopeopleinasmallcityinColoradowereconcerned.Why?Lastweek,alargeblackbearattackedafamilyscoopandatethechickens.ItwasreportedbyalocalTVstation.Attheendoft
33、henewsreport,apolicemanaskedlocalresidentstokeepwaste,petfoodandevenbirdseedinside,andtoreportanybearsightingsuntiltheanimalwasfound.Thepolicemanalsotoldpeopletoalwaysstayawayfromthebearwhentheysawit.Samisa12-year-oldboy.Earlierthisweek,hecametothatsmallcitytovisithisunclesfamilywithhismother.Hisunc
34、lesson,David,wasveryexcitedaboutthebearthathadappearedinhisneighborsbackyard.“Sam,thereisabearinourcity,”soonafterSamarrived,Davidtoldhim.Samwascuriousaboutbearsandhehadalwaysdreamedofwatchingone.“Really?”heaskedexcitedly.“Yes.ItwentintoMrsBrownsbackyardlastweek.Itateallherchickens.Butithadrunawayan
35、dIdidntevenseeit,”saidDavid.Samlistenedwithhiseyeswideopen.“Woulditreturn?”heasked.“Veryprobably,”saidDavid,“itwouldreturnforfood.”Atlast,heaskedSam,“Doyouwanttoseethebear?”Samimmediatelynodded.Thenheasked,“Buthow?”29熊壮怂人胆？熊被人喊跑了？熊壮怂人胆？熊被人喊跑了？30tip:common sense史上最佛系的熊史上最佛系的熊 31在熊的注视下表演装死？在熊的注视下表演装死？
36、32熊和孩子们分享食物？画面美好得不忍直视。熊和孩子们分享食物？画面美好得不忍直视。33脑洞开得有点大！脑洞开得有点大！34tip:logical ending is appreciated!人与动物和谐相处？大圆满结局人与动物和谐相处？大圆满结局?35Step 2 Step 2 理清思路理清思路两两“情情”相悦：相悦：coherent in emotion logical in plot 情感连贯情感连贯 情节合理情节合理 符合逻辑符合逻辑 符合常识符合常识回找伏笔：情感和情节回找伏笔：情感和情节角色调度：冲突和配合角色调度：冲突和配合36Dobearsattackpeople?Theans
37、weriscertainlypositive.SopeopleinasmallcityinColoradowereconcerned.Why?Lastweek,alargeblackbearattackedafamilyscoopandatethechickens.ItwasreportedbyalocalTVstation.Attheendofthenewsreport,apolicemanaskedlocalresidentstokeepwaste,petfoodandevenbirdseedinside,andtoreportanybearsightingsuntiltheanimalw
38、asfound.Thepolicemanalsotoldpeopletoalwaysstayawayfromthebearwhentheysawit.Samisa12-year-oldboy.Earlierthisweek,hecametothatsmallcitytovisithisunclesfamilywithhismother.Hisunclesson,David,wasveryexcitedaboutthebearthathadappearedinhisneighborsbackyard.“Sam,thereisabearinourcity,”soonafterSamarrived,
39、Davidtoldhim.Samwascuriousaboutbearsandhehadalwaysdreamedofwatchingone.“Really?”heaskedexcitedly.“Yes.ItwentintoMrsBrownsbackyardlastweek.Itateallherchickens.ButithadrunawayandIdidntevenseeit,”saidDavid.Samlistenedwithhiseyeswideopen.“Woulditreturn?”heasked.“Veryprobably,”saidDavid,“itwouldreturnfor
40、food.”Atlast,heaskedSam,“Doyouwanttoseethebear?”Samimmediatelynodded.Thenheasked,“Buthow?”37“Wecanputsomefoodinthebackyard.Whenthebearseesit,hewillcomeinandeatit.Butweshouldbecareful.Thebearmayattackusifheseesus.Soweshouldnevermakeanynoise.”Samnoddedagain,stillinexcitement.Laterthatday,theadultsallw
41、entout,leavingthetwoboysaloneathome.Soontheystartedtotakeaction.Theyputsomeleftoversfromlunchinthebackyard.Thentheywaitedbehindthewindowofthekitchenandwaitedcuriously.Butanhourpassedandtheydidntseeabear.Finally,theygotbored.Paragraph 1:Just then,they saw something big at the gate of the backyard.Par
42、agraph 2:When the bear looked up,he saw Sam.38before the bear came(Reading part)after the bear came(Para 1)after the bear saw the boys(Para 2)bearate all of her chicken David and Samexcited and eager to see the bear their parentswent out Mrs Brownate all of her chicken policeasked and warned might n
43、otice the bear finally saw itso excited might be attackedso frightened could ask the policecould come to their rescuecould come to their rescue39tip:add up some logical plots if necessary!ate the leafoverattack?caught?run away?Step 3 Step 3 拟写草稿拟写草稿怎样让记叙文生动起来？怎样让记叙文生动起来？动作描写动作描写3-5个个表情或心理表情或心理3-5个个对
44、话对话1-2个个环境描写环境描写1-2个个话题激活词汇：话题激活词汇：动作动作：step out,tighten,lose balance,shoot,apologize,forgive 情感情感：excitement,curious,frightened,scared,fierce,ashamed 环境：环境：scenery40对话太多！分段太多！禁用涂改液！对话太多！分段太多！禁用涂改液！41Step 4 Step 4 润色成篇润色成篇润色包括动作情感环境类的生动描写，丰富润色包括动作情感环境类的生动描写，丰富词汇和语法词汇和语法句型的打磨升级句型的打磨升级等等Tips:1.动作，情感，环
45、境类描写日常积累。动作，情感，环境类描写日常积累。2.丰富词汇和语法句型日常积累。丰富词汇和语法句型日常积累。（时态语态，定语从句，名词性从句，状语从句，非谓语动词，（时态语态，定语从句，名词性从句，状语从句，非谓语动词，倒装句式，强调句式，倒装句式，强调句式，It形式主语句，虚拟语气形式主语句，虚拟语气.）3.对话酌情使用，不要落入俗套。对话酌情使用，不要落入俗套。42Just then,they saw something big at the gate of the backyard.Uponseeing the bear coming in,the twoboys eyes twink
46、led with excitement.Helookedintothebackyard.Obviously,he saw the leftover.Hepushedopenthedoorandcamein.Helookedaround,andseeingnoonein the backyard,he then startedenjoying the food.So curious wasSam that he unconsciously steppedoutofthehouseinordertowatchthebearclosely.Itseemedasifthebearweresafeeno
47、ughtobeclosedto.连贯动作二连贯动作二/非谓非谓语做原因状语语做原因状语情感一情感一动作一动作一43动作三动作三/倒装倒装情感二情感二/虚拟语气虚拟语气 When the bear looked up,he saw Sam.Atthesightofthefiercebear,Sam felt so scared thathis throattightenedandhiskneesfeltweak.SowasDavid,whofrozewithterror,tooscaredtomoveaninch.Samlosthisbalance,staggered backandtopple
48、dover.Just at the moment,theirparents,together with the police,rushed in,shooting the bear.Soashamedweretheythattheycouldfeelthebloodrushtotheirface.They apologized to their parents,who forgave them finally,remindingthem to be always aware of suchdangerousanimalsasthebear.情感三情感三/结果状从结果状从情感四情感四动作四动作四
49、/连续动连续动作同做谓语作同做谓语动作五，转折动作五，转折（高潮）（高潮）/非谓语非谓语做伴随状语做伴随状语44情感五情感五/倒装倒装动作（结局）动作（结局）/定语从句定语从句+非谓非谓语做伴随状语语做伴随状语for your referencefor your referenceJust then,they saw something big at the gate of the backyard.Uponseeingthebearcomingin,thetwoboyseyestwinkledwithexcitement.Helookedintothebackyard.Obviously,h
50、esawtheleftover.Hepushedopenthedoorandcamein.Helookedaround,andseeingnooneinthebackyard,hethenstartedenjoyingthefood.SocuriouswasSamthatheunconsciouslysteppedoutofthehouseinordertowatchthebearclosely.Itseemedasifthebearweresafeenoughtobeclosedto.45for your referencefor your reference When the bear l