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1、考点40读后续写05对话模式突破（原卷版）【命题解读】“对话”何时用？如何写？写多少？写哪里？看完本节的讲解，会有一个比较明晰的答案。【思维导图】对话”注意事项译练习对话标签的三个位置模拟演练“对话模式突破对话“四大误区”1）“对话”注意事项3)对话描写不宜过长，侧重口语化词汇，避开生僻词汇;对话优化技巧对话描写必须为推动故事情节服务，是情节发展的一个环节，每段出现一两句即可;2)对话描写必须反映人物的心理与情感，刻画人物的性格;4)5)对话描写要尽可能结合动作描写，明确对谁说，具有画面感;对话描写中要学会使用几个感叹词，表示说话人的喜、怒、哀、乐等情绪;对话标签的三个位置她说，“我想和你一起
2、去，但我还没有完成家庭作业。”这句话用英语，从句式结构的角度来看，怎么表达 呢？特别是对话标签she said的位置变化。11.对话标签在前】She saidJI would like to go with you, but I havent finished my homework.【2.对话标签在后】“I would like to go with you, but I havent finished my homework.She said.这两句是最常见的形式，大家写出来，应该问题不大。我们来看第三种形式。【3.对话标签在句子中间】“I would like to go with yo
3、ujshe said, “but I havent finished my homework.”注意：对话标签在后或者在句子中间时（第2,3种情况），如果主语是名词，则可以倒装。而代词不可以倒 装，said she是错误的。“I would like to go with you, but I havent finished my homework.said Emily （或者 Emily said.）“I would like to go with yousaid Emily/ Emily said, “but I haven 9t finished my homework.”对话”大误区”
4、1.废话连篇，对情节发展和刻画人物性格没有帮助。“Hey, how are you?” “Im fine, how are you?”“How is the weather? Terrific! Nice day for a walk, isnt it?”这样的对话在现实生活中很真实，但是小说毕竟是艺术加工，无助情节推动的，不能刻画人物性格的日常 寒暄和偏离文章主线的对话绝对不用。12.追求花哨，过度使用对话标签】“That is fantastic news,“ he said happily.此句中完全没有必要加上一个happily来表达说的方式，因为句中的fantastic 一词足以说明
5、说话人了表情, 过度强调会让读者的注意力集中在“说话的方式”而不是“说话的内容:建议改为：“That is fantastic news! he said/screamed/exclaimed. 一个感叹号和一个 fantastic 已经足以让读 者想象当时的情景。适当的“艺术留白”也是需要的，这样会留给读者想象的空间。还有一种避免过度的dialogue tags的方法是运用“动作描写*尤其是表情上动作来取而代之。如： Her eyes reflected the candlelight as she smiled at her son. Everyone is unique. Just fo
6、llow your heart and be yourself!”当她对儿子微笑时，她的眼睛反射着烛光。“每个人都是独一无二的。只要跟随你的心，做你自 己！ ”13用词不当，错误使用对话标签】“1 cant believe it, Emma gasped, （gasp 意思为喘气）Thats funny, Henry chuckled, （chuckled,意思为轻笑）评析：以上两句话也是在大量的学生习作中发现的。这里把动作描写和动作标签混淆了，试想谁能gasp （喘息）、chuckle （轻笑）出一句话？除非他或她有特异功能。纠正方法如下：“1 cant believe it,“ Emma
7、said with a gasp.（对话标签Emma said+ w汕 介词短语）Emma gasped. HI cant believe it.”（动作描写+句号）nI cant believe it.1 Emma gasped.（对话句+动作描写,注意对话句式句号）Thats funny! Henry chuckled.（感叹句结束+动作描写）“Thats funny, Henry said, chuckling.（Question tag+分词做伴随状况）请特别关注以上对话的标点符号。【4对话标签多此一举：对话对象十分明确，仍使用对话标签】“I told you already/71 s
8、aid, glaring.评析：此句貌似豪华，其实对话中的主语“I”已经清晰地说明了说话者，完全没有必要用对话标签“Isaid”来 说明说话对象。纠正方法：加上一点动作描写就可以避免这种错误，并且提升语言的生动性。I glared at him. “I told you already.”让你的对话标签不平庸四个小技巧在对话标签中加入语气，嗓音，情感让你的描写更生动传神。【第一种：加语气】“I would love to/9 said Emily in a pleasant tone.“我很乐意这样做，“艾米丽用一种愉快的语气说。 这里用到了“in a pleasant tone. ，即“用一
9、种愉快的语气”，基本结构为：in a/an+形容词+tone 如：in a pleasant愉悦的/firm坚定的/rude粗鲁的/sad悲伤的tone 也可以用in a tone of +名词的搭配如：in a tone of surprise用一种惊讶的语气in a tone of curiosity用一种好奇的语气in a tone of impatience用一种不耐烦的语气in a tone of command用一种命令的语气第二种：加嗓音】“I didnt mean to, she murmured in a low voice.我不是故意的,“她低声说。这里用到了“ in a
10、low voice，即“小声地说道或者“用一种声音”，基本结构是：in a/an+形容词+voice如：in a high /low / sweet/loud/soft /weak voice 用一个高/低/甜/响亮/软/弱的声音【第三种：加情感】dont think Im right for the part JI replied with embarrassment.“我.我认为我不适合这个角色，“我尴尬 地回答。这里用到了“ w汕embarrassment，即“（伴随着）难堪“，基本结构是：with+情感名词。如with excitement （伴随着）激动。【加副词】“我再也不会那样做
11、了，我回答。如何丰富这句话里的对话标签呢？“I will never do that again J I answered firmly.加上了 副词 firmly （坚定地）这句话也可以这么写：可将副词提到句首。Firmly, I answered, I will never do that again.”产.检啷【模拟题1 （2022重庆市育才中学一模）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Chris Dykstra hadnt expected what began as a casual walk around the neighborhood wi
12、th the family one night led to a journey of friendship.Chris Dykstra, a traffic manager in Shorewood, Illinois had noticed a few raccoons （浣熊）wandering around his garbage. However, he didnt think too much of it. One night when his wife Julie was taking their four children for a walk after dinner, th
13、ey tracked the raccoons back to their neighbors roof. A further investigation showed that the raccoons had chewed a hole in the neighbors roof and were living in her attic （阁楼）.The couple had lived in their current home for five years. Yet they had very little contact with the neighbor. They knew he
14、r first name was Dorene and that she liked to watch their children play in the backyard, and thats about it.Concerned fbr their neighbors well-being, Julie decided to knock on the door to make their neighbor aware of the raccoons living in the attic. Julie knocked on the door and rang the doorbell,
15、but no one answered. She decided to ask the local police department to do a wellness check on their neighbor.Two police officers and an animal control officer visited the neighbors home to conduct a wellness check.This time the neighbor - Miss Dorene Shock - opened the door. Miss Shock was surprised
16、 to see someone check in on her. The officers made her aware of the raccoons in her attic.Having been told the whole thing, Miss Shock welcomed Julie into her house. After touring the house, Julie learned that Miss Shock lived a poor life. Her home barely had any furniture, and she even didnt have a
17、 TV set. Besides, her house was in need of additional repairs and updates including new light bulbs.注意：L续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Chris and his wife knew this was an opportunity to help a neighbor in need.Several days later, Chris and his wife came across Miss Shock and had a chat with her.【模拟
18、题2 （2022.全国重庆南开中学模拟预测）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。It was six oclock when Breanna heard her mothers phone receive a text message as its at on the kitchen bench. “Mum, I bet its Dad!” Breanna said and jumped up from the sofa, books spilling out in front of her. She had been deciding which sto
19、ry her dad would read in one of his funny voices for the night. Breanna mum rubbed her temples （太阳穴）and sighed softly. Honey, would you mind seeing if thats Daddy? Ive got a bad headache but I want to start cooking a lovely meal for us to enjoy tonight.”“Sure, mum, Breanna skipped into the kitchen t
20、o check the phone. Her dad had been away for two whole nights working on a malfunction （故障）at his companys warehouse that was at risk of theft. Breanna felt sure hed been able to act like a superhero and save the day - but did it have to take so long? She picked up the phone and read the message, Ju
21、st leaving now cant wait to see you both. Breanna confirmed excitedly, Its from Daddy! Hes on his way home!”Her mother managed a weak smile as her daughter clapped her hands with joy. It had been four months since shed lost her job and with only one income to support the family. Her husband had take
22、n on as many shifts and extra duties as he could to make ends meet. Times were tough and he was working long hours, but it made the time Breanna spent with her daddy even more special. Oh, thafs wonderful news. Now lets see what I can find to eat J her mother rose painfully from the sofa and added.
23、注意：1 .续写词数应为150左右；2 .请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。“Great! Mums got a bad headache but Im going to help her cook dinner. See you soon!, Breanna sent her dad a quick reply.Another message from her father drew Breanna7s attention.【模拟题3 （2022.湖南.一模）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150 左右。When a tornado
24、hit a small town nearby, many families were left homeless. Afterward, all the local newspapers carried stories of the families who suffered the hardest to appeal to peoples attention and assistance.One Sunday, a particular picture especially touched me. A young woman stood in front of a mobile home,
25、 a depressed expression on her face. A young boy, seven or eight years old. stood at her side, eyes downcast. Hiding behind her skirt was a tiny girl who stared into the camera, wide eyes with confusion and fear. The article below gave clothing sizes closely matched ours. This would be a good opport
26、unity to teach my seven-year-old twins. Brad and Brett, and three-year-old Meghan to help those less fortunate than themselves.“We have so much. And these poor people now have nothing“ I said. Well share what we have with them,“ I brought three large boxes down from the room upstairs and placed them
27、 in the living room. Meghan watched seriously, as the boys and I filled one of the boxes with canned goods and foods. While I sorted through our clothes, I encouraged the boys to go through their toys and donate some of their less favorite things. The boys were pleased to join. Brad rose and went to
28、 his room fast. He came back bringing his action figures that he played with not so frequently. Brett also jumped up and ran to fetch some of his Matchbox cars and airplane models. Meghan watched quietly as the boys piled up abandoned toys.The boys placed the objects they had chosen to donate into o
29、ne of the boxes while I filled the third box with clothes. Meghan walked up with Lucy, her worn, faded, best-loved rag doll hugged tightly to her chest. Ill help you find something for the little girl, too. I said to the little Meghan.Para. 1:“Mommy, I will give Lucy to them,“ Meghan turned to me.Pa
30、ra. 2:Recognizing what little Meghans gesture meant, I removed my old jacket from the box of clothes.【模拟题4 （2022江苏模拟预测）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。For weeks, the troop had been busy preparing for its Parents Night program. Everything was in order. The walls were filled with displays, the sc
31、outs （童子军）were all enthusiastic. The tables were covered with good things to eat.Now it was time for Jimmie Davis to give his speech. This was the moment he had been looking forward to for several weeks. As he arose, he caught a glimpse of his mothers bright face and his fathers calm, confident expr
32、ession. Jimmie held his head high as he started his speech, his words bursting with pride and enthusiasm. He made sure the speech was lively and moving, conscious that his listeners were showing high praise to him by their careful attention.Then something happened. The world seemed to move slowly fr
33、om side to side before him. He felt his mind went blank and forgot what to say next. He slowed down, faltered （结巴），and finally stopped. His face turned red, and his hands sought each other wildly. In desperation, he looked toward his scout leader, begging for his help.Having heard that boyish but gr
34、eat speech practiced again and again, the boys scout leader supplied the missing words that allowed Jimmie to continue. But somehow it was different now. The wonderful speech had been messed up.Jimmie paused again, and once again the scout leader helped him. For the remaining two minutes, the speech
35、 seemed more like the scout leaders than Jimmies.After what seemed like ages, the speech was finally over. In the heart of Jimmie, who sat down knowing that he had failed, there was a great weight pressing down on him. Disappointment was clearly written on the face of his mother. A twitch （抽搐）of the
36、 fathers face showed how painful he felt.The audience applauded in a perfunctory （敷衍的）way, feeling sorry for the boy who they thought had failed.But the scout leader was on his feet. His eyes twinkled. All the audience listened carefully. 注意：L续写词数应为150左右；2 ,请按如下格式在答题卡上的相应位置作答。Paragraph 1:The calm, s
37、ure voice of the scout leader echoed （回响）around the hall.Paragraph 2:Jimmie began to speak in a trembling but firm voice.【模拟题5 （2022.江苏.南京市第一中学一模）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Henry got on his bike and began to deliver copies of the March 8,1970,issue of The Gazette. Half an hour later,he thr
38、ew the last newspaper onto the porch （门廊）at 35 Oak Street and cycled to The Gazette offices.There must be something important for the editor in chief to meet with an 11 -year-old paperboy.No good way to deliver bad news/Mr. Trotta greeted him when Henry stepped in.Henrys smile faded.Were closing sho
39、p,Henry. Advertising is down.Television is how people get their news today. Local papers are the first to close.nMr.Trotta shrugged.Henry couldnt believe his ears, frozen to the spot.He thought of all hose people he had met on his route. They wouldnt get their neighborhood news anymore!You were grea
40、t,Henryalways dependableMr. Trotta said.Henry forced his head up to say good-bye.As he rode past the houses he knew so well he saw Mr.Grady on his porch,holding a broom （扫帚）.Henry led him to a chair and cleaned the porch.They sat for a while as Mr.Grady recalled how happy hed been moving his family
41、to 10 Oak. He sounded lonely.A week after his last deliveries, Henry wondered if his customers missed The Gazette as much as he did. He thought of a way to find out. He started out on his old route with a notebookHenry stopped at Mrs.Burkes. She opened the door, holding the two babies.She asked him
42、if he knew any neighbors with experience of looking after children.Mr. Simon was next door, carrying his violin out.Hey, Henry. My band is having a concert in the park this Friday. Tell all your friends/As Henry made more notes, an idea started forming in his head. Maybe he could create a newsy page
43、 （小 报）for the neighbors.注意：1 .续写词数应为150左右；2 .请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Neighbors cheered Henrys idea,ready to offer information.Henrys first Oak Street News then produced desired effects.【模拟题6 （2022.广东.汕头市聿怀中学模拟预测）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。On a bright, warm July afternoon, Mac Hollan, a primary school t
44、eacher, was cycling from his home to Alaska with his friends. One of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair, but they had encouraged Mac to carry on, and they would catch up with him soon. As Mac pedaled （骑行）along alone, he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at home. He hop
45、ed to show them this beautiful place someday.Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him. “Man, thafs a big dog!” he thought. But when he looked to the side, he saw instantly that it wasnt a dog at all, but a wolf, quickly catching up with him.Macs heart jumped. He found out his can of hear s
46、pray. With one hand on the bars, he fired the spray at the wolf. A bright red cloud enveloped the animal, and to Macs relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back of Macs bike, tearing open his tent bag. He fired at the wolf a second
47、 time, and again, it fell back only to quickly restart the chase （追赶）.Mac was pedaling hard now. He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to slow down. He saw a steep uphill climb before him. He knew that once he hit the hill, hed be easy caught up and the wolfs teeth would be tearing
48、 into his flesh.At this moment, Paul and Becky were driving their car on their way to Alaska. They didnt think much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road. A bit later, they spotted what they, too, assumed was a dog running alongside a man on a bike. As they got closer, they realized that the dog was a wolf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in front of it as the wolf was cat