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1、托福作文写作范文详解Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.1 .题目翻译：学习历史对于我们今天没有价值，同意不否?2 .审题关键词:Past; Value; Present.论证分析:正：学习过去的历史，能够更好的在现在避免错误。比如说学习世界大 战的历史 正：学习过去的知识和文化，能够更好地通行发明和创造 正：学习过
2、去的人物，能够更好地帮助我们自己成为一个对社会有用的范文：People often say Those who dont understand history will repeat the mistakes of the pas t.H I totally disagree. I dont see any evidence that people have made smart decisions based on their knowledge of the past To me, the present is what is important, not the past. I thin
3、k that people, the weather, and politics determine what happens, not the past此段结构本段第一句话引用了一句古话告诉了我们本文需要讨论的论题。后面作 者用I totally disagree抛出了其不众7T同的观点，并点明了自己的立 场和本文主旨，即作者认为历史对我们现在指导意义不大。此段功能本段是文章的首段，引出了要讨论的话题，点明了作者的立场，引入下 文讨论。People can change. We cant assume that people will continue to hate one another
4、 just because they have had hated one another for years. Look at Turkey and Greece. When Turkey had an earthquake, Greece sent aid. When Greece had an earthquake, Turkey sent aid. Now, these two countries are cooperating and looking forward to improved relations. No doubt, if we looked at the past,
5、we could have thought this was a lost cause. But people change.此段结构本段是一个总分总的结构。首先第一句话即点明了主旨，人是在变的。 第二句话对主旨通行了简要分析。后面是补充的Turkey and Greece 的一个例子，生动具体，帮助论证了这个观点。此段功能本段是文章的第二段，也就是正文第一段，写了支持作者立场的第一个 分论点。The weather can change. Farmers think that they can plant certain crops because these crops have alwa
6、ys grown well in their fields before. But the weather can change. There can be a long drought. The crops that have always worked well will die. A drought-resistant crop needs to be tried. If we looked only at the past, we would not have changed our crop and we would have lost our farm when blight or
7、 brought occurred.此段结构 本段是一个总分的结构。首先第一句话即点明了主旨，天气也是可能会 变的。后面并了 farmer和crop的例子来证明观点。最后告诉我们， 如果我们另是向过去看，那么我们将会面临失败。此段功能本段是文章的第三段，也就是正文第二段，写了支持作者立场的第二个 分论点。Politics also changes. According to my way of thinking, politicians must be responsive to changes in the people. If politicians looked only at the
8、past, they would always say the same thing. People change. On the whole, people today care about human rights. They warn all people to have the equal rights. If we looked at the past in the United States, we would see a lot of discrimination against races, women, and sexual orientation. Now, that is
9、 changing. Politicians change, too.此段结构本段是一个总分的结构。首先第一句话即点明了主旨，天气也是可能会 变的。后面井了 farmer和crop的例子来证明整个观点。最后告诉 我们，如果我们另是向过去看，那么我们将会面临失败。此段功能 本段是文章的第四段，也就是正文第三段，写了支持作者立场的第三个 分论点。As a rule what is important today is to follow the mood of the moment. We shouldnt constantlygaze vainly into the past. It doesn
10、t do us any good to think about the past. People, the weather, and politics can change in any direction. The direction of this change, in my opinion, can not be predicted by studying the past.此段结构本段第一句话承接上文，后面都是对文章速行的升华分析。最后一句话 帮助作者重申了论点，即我们必须向前看，而不是向历史看。此段功能本段是文章的尾段，承接了上文，总结了观点，并帮助作者重申论点。满分因素剖析：一、语
11、言表达 这篇文章的在语言方面非常下功夫，可以看出作者扎实的语言功底。在 句子方面，作者熟练运用定语从句，宾语从句，主语从句，表语从句, 状语从句等多种复合句式，可谓是从句的“百科全书。在用词方面，作 者熟练使用各种连词，副词，还有一些英语写作中会用到的高级词汇, 使文章逻辑通畅，态度清晰，让人眼前一亮。1.1 totally disagree. I dont see any evidence that people have made smart decisions based on their knowledge of the past.此句中，that引导同位语从句，做名词evidence
12、的同位语，起到解 释说明的作用。动词词组base on的意思是依靠，以.为基础，同样 的用法还有on the basis ofo在此句中，作者用到了 base on的过 去分词形式based on ,这个非谓语动词短语在英语阅读写作中常常出 现在decision, idea, knowledge, opinion等词的后面，后面接着解 释的内容。2. The direction of this change, in my opinion, can not be predicted by studying the past.此句中，in myopinion在句中做插入语，表示我认为。插入语结构
13、在托福和GRE作文以及阅读中有着很广泛的应用，一方面可以解释句 子中提到的概念，另一方面是扩充了句子的内容，是句子更加饱满。插 入语可以出现在文中的很多地方，中间需用逗号隔开，当去掉插入语时, 前后还可以成为完整的句子。3. We shouldnt constantly gaze vainly into the past. 此句中，用到两个高级词汇gaze和vainlyo动词gaze的意思是 凝视，gaze into的意思是向看，这个单词开同于一般用到的see , watch ,这种看带有一种认真而仔绅的态度，用在此处很形象。副词 vainly的意思的徒劳的，同样的表达还有介词短语in vain。二、逻辑结构本文使用正正正的大正支持形式，结构简单，逻辑清晰。文章中每一段 都是总分（总）的结构，段内脉络清晰，每一段展开都非常充分，并补 充了适当的生活中的例子用以佐证观点。