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1、托福作文写作范文详解Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.1 .题目翻译:一些成年的年轻人想要尽早地离开父母自己独立,还有一
2、些年轻人偏爰 和家人一起生活更长时间。你觉得那种情况更好?请用具体原因和事例 支持自己的观点。2 .审题关键词:young adults , independence , soon z longer time.论证分析:反:在这个竞争日益激烈的社会背景下,年轻人需要在各方面做好充分 准备才适合离开父母,独立生活反:父母长辈可以传授很多生活经验,年轻人从他们那里学习这些经验 可能比自己摸索减少在现实中碰壁的可能正:年轻人在父母身边生活太长时间容易形成依赖,不利于独立自主品 质的形成,难以适应现今社会范文Every young adult will grow and live apart from
3、 their parents to form their own families. The ages for those young adults to be independent depends on each person. Some people may have to live longer with their parents and some others may not. This essay will discuss the issue of independent life and living with their families for a longer time.
4、此段结构首段,首句写了年轻人都想长大并且离开父母自己生活。之后点明了年 轻人独立的时间各不相同。并进行了具体解释。最后一句点明了本文所 讨论的主题:讨论独立生活和与父母一起生活更长时间的关系。此段功能文章首段给出了背景信息,人们渴望独立但具体时间不尽相同。引出了 文章主题,为表明自己观点做好了铺垫。Most young adults prefer to have a separate or independent life from their parents or families as soon as possible. This is because they have a strong
5、 urge for freedom in doing what they desire.But in fact many of them fail. This should not be surprising since often they are actually not ready mentally although they are physically ready. It is widely understood that to live independently requires a lot of energy and is not easy at all. In this tw
6、enty first century, people may need more and此段结构第二段首先讨论了第一种观点,即年轻人希望立刻开始自己生活。并在 第二句给出了原因。之后用一个转折说明了这种情况并非事实。然后给 出了自己的解释,即他们做好了身体准备却没有做好心理准备。之后继 续进行说明:因为竞争激烈所以需要更长的准备时间。并运用了 21世 纪的人们以及当今的大学毕业生的实例来证明自己观点。最后一句总结, 这些人无法独立生活。此段功能本段用了分总的结构。从背景写起,通过转折提出了自己的观点。并通 过具体事例加以证明。最后进行总结,即这些年轻人不能独立生活。So living inde
7、pendently at an early age is not suitable for all young adults, some young adults may need to take more time to prepare themselves before going out to struggle. Young adults need to be ready to support themselves. Taking time to get more education and living with their families for a longer time may
8、 lead them to a better independent life because they will be well prepared for the hard-life outside. Still, living with their families for *too* long will not be a good idea because they could get used to it and tend to be less independent此段结构第三段首先总结重申了上一段的观点,即太早独立生活不适合所有的年 轻人。之后给出了解决方案,即需要准备好养活自己。
9、然后说明了具体 方法和原因,即和家人多生活一段时间。最后一句进行补充,说明尽管 如此也不能和家人一起生活太久,因为有可能适得其反。此段功能第三段承接上一段的观点,是第二段问题的解决方案,不应太早独立生 活,应该和家人多生活一段时间。并用演绎推理的方法进行了证明。The time to live independently depends on the person himself. He or she must decide whether they are ready to leave their parents to have an independent life or not. The
10、 decision will vary from one person to another. A person should judge that he is capable of fulfilling his needs without being dependent on his parents; this indicates that he is ready for his independent life. Otherwise he might need to stay longer with his parents.此段结构 最后一段对上文的中心观点进行了总结和重申。首句提出了文章
11、的总观 点,即人们独立生活的时间取决于他们自己。之后进行了具体阐释。此段功能文章总结段,总结重申中心观点,并简要解释原因。满分要素剖析语言表达本文用词简单,但句式结构丰富,尤其是在第二段和第三段中,作者运 用了多种正式的句式结构,让句子之间联系紧密,通顺流畅,体现出了 作者逻辑性强,注重思辨的整体特点。This should not be surprising since often they are actually not ready mentally although they are physically ready.本句包含了 since引导的时间状语从句。在从句当中又包含一个alt
12、hough引导的 让步状语从句。但mentally ready和physically ready之间存在着 并列的关系。整个句子看起来逻辑清晰,结构精致,体现出作者的语言 功力。It is widely understood that to live independently requires a lot of energy and is not easy at all.本句首先使用了逻辑主语的形式,to do之后才是句子的实际主语,避免了 句子主语过长的情况。并且用了被动语态的形式,使句子显得更正式。Taking time to get more education and living
13、with their families for a longer time may lead them to a better independent life because they will be well prepared for the hard-life outside.本句 用了动名词和并列结构作为主语,很好地注意到了句式的准确性。逻辑结构本文不是严格意义上的总分总结构,而是采用了层层深入的分析模式, 先问题后解决,最后点明观点。开头段首先交待背景,引出讨论的主题, 即人们渴望独立但具体时间不尽相同。之后从现状入手,说明年轻人渴 望独立但不能如愿,从而自然引出这种情况出现的原因,并通过具体事 例进行证明。下面针对这种问题提出了解决方案,即先和家人一起住一 段时间来进行准备。并通过加以证明。完成了对主题的分析。最后总结 重申自己的观点,即人们独立生活的时间取决于他们自己。文章逻辑清 晰,体现出了一定的思辨精神。