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1、满分写作周周赢应用文写作/读后续写高中英语赢在微点高中英语满分写作周周赢Week 1建议信建议信&改变成长类读后续写改变成长类读后续写Wednesday考场作文研析Week 1配套使用满分微练第一部分 10分钟随堂微练1Week 1 建议信建议信&改变成长类读后续写改变成长类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第4页赢在字里行间读后续写满分技巧1定主旨明意图续写不走偏读后续写不是无视原文的独立创作,而应顺着原文作者的思路完成未完成的文本。续写前,应先认真阅读原文,理清原文的人物、故事情节发展线和情感发展线,把握其文本大意和叙事意图:记叙文类的文本大意,即主要人或物描述的主要事件和
2、结果;而叙事意图指故事主要内容传递给读者的信息,可以是情,也可以是理;准确理解原文,根据“谁、发生了什么”,快速理清原文对主要人或物的描写并整理相关事件,提炼原文大意和叙事意图;续写部分要在文本大意、叙事意图和主题上与原文保持一致。如2023年新高考卷读后续写部分的主题应与原文主题“坚持、改变、成长”一致。Week 1 建议信建议信&改变成长类读后续写改变成长类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第5页赢在字里行间好题探索阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。(2023新高考卷)When I was in middle school,my so
3、cial studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest,I said no without thinking.I did not love writing.My family came from Brazil,so English was only my second language.Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by
4、 acting out a play,where I played all the parts.No one laughed harder than he did.So,why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail?His reply:“Because I love your stories.If youre willing to apply yourself,I think you have a good shot at this.”Encouraged by his words,I agre
5、ed to give it a try.I chose Paul Reveres horse as my subject.Paul Revere was a silversmith(银匠)in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18,1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming.My story would come straight from the horses mouth.Not a brilliant idea,but funny,and unlik
6、ely to be anyone elses choice.Week 1 建议信建议信&改变成长类读后续写改变成长类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第6页赢在字里行间What did the horse think,as he sped through the night?Did he get tired?Have doubts?Did he want to quit?I sympathized immediately.I got tired.I had doubts.I wanted to quit.But,like Reveres horse,I kept going.I
7、 worked hard.I checked my spelling.I asked my older sister to correct my grammar.I checked out a halfdozen books on Paul Revere from the library.I even read a few of them.When I handed in the essay to my teacher,he read it,laughed out loud and said,“Great.Now,write it again.”I wrote it again,and aga
8、in and again.When I finally finished it,the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing.If I didnt win,I wouldnt care.注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。A few weeks later,when I almost forgot the contest,there came the news.I went to my teachers office after the award presentation.(请参
9、考附录一五)Week 1 建议信建议信&改变成长类读后续写改变成长类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第7页赢在字里行间主题链接主主题特点特点改改变变成成长长类类常常涉涉及及人人生生态态度度从从消消极极到到积积极极的的改改变变、不不健健康康的的生生活活方方式式的的改改变变、他他人人对对自自己态度看法的改变等己态度看法的改变等,在改变的同时完善自我在改变的同时完善自我,接受自我接受自我,实现成长。实现成长。三步法三步法第一步:情境描写+(消极)事件的发展高潮;第二步:改变/成长的因素+该过程中的情感变化;第三步:经历改变后的积极情绪+主旨升华句,呼应改变与成长。Week 1 建议
10、信建议信&改变成长类读后续写改变成长类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第8页赢在字里行间提分步骤1读原文理基本要素和2线CharacterI,my social studies teacherWhenWhenwhen I was in middle schoolWherein middle schoolWhat英语为第二语言的“我”在老师的鼓励下参加英语写作比赛,尽管“我”对自己充满怀疑而且不喜欢写作,但在老师的鼓励下,“我”没有退缩,努力坚持并参加了比赛。2情情线情节线:“我”的老师鼓励“我”参加比赛“我”不喜欢写作,所以拒绝参赛老师说喜欢“我”写的故事并鼓励“我”参赛“我
11、”答应参赛,选好作文主题“我”反复修改草稿完成参赛作文(续写)几周后有了消息;颁奖典礼后去老师办公室情感线:I:自我怀疑不自信坚持my teacher:有信心的激励人的Week 1 建议信建议信&改变成长类读后续写改变成长类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第9页赢在字里行间提分步骤2思续写情节“以旧带新”2原则(421原则4衔接、2情线、1主题;ARE原则action、response、emotion)两段首句两段首句定一框定一框衔接:开头句衔接首句中的“the news”可写消息是什么?获奖还是没获奖?过渡句:“我”得知这个消息后的感受如何?老师的心情和表现如何?衔接:尾句
12、衔接第二段首句中的“the award presentation”可写“我”是否参加颁奖典礼。二框二首二框二首1主主题衔接:开头句衔接首句中的“我来到老师的办公室”可写“我”到老师办公室做了什么?过渡句:老师是什么反应?老师说了什么?“我”是什么反应?“我”说了什么?“我”的感受。衔接:尾句衔接原文首句中的“I did not love writing.”可写“我”对写作由不喜欢转为喜爱或者呼应原文中老师的话“If youre willing to apply yourself,I think you have a good shot at this.”可写“我”的感受,从这次经历中意识到了“
13、只要努力,一切皆有可能”。1主题:Believe in yourself!Apply yourself!Hard work eventually paid off!情感情感线I:吃惊骄傲感激自信my teacher:高兴骄傲Week 1 建议信建议信&改变成长类读后续写改变成长类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第10页赢在字里行间提分步骤3思伏笔添细节原续更融洽捕捉原文所设伏笔,充盈过渡句细节并合理衔接,以使续写段落在逻辑和内容上更符合原文基调。原文伏笔点原文伏笔点过渡句中可与伏笔渡句中可与伏笔衔接的接的细节Para.1English was only my second l
14、anguage.续写第一段可添加情节叙述“我”是唯一一个母语不是英语的获奖者。Para.1No one laughed harder than he did.Para.5he read it,laughed out loud and said老师高兴时的大笑续写第一段可添加神态细节:描写老师得知“我”获奖后高兴地大笑的情节。Para.2why did he suddenly force me to do somethingPara.2Encouraged by his words,I agreed to give it a try.老师的鼓励续写第二段可添加细节:描写“我”感激老师激励自己参加
15、写作比赛和对自己不断的鼓励。Para.5the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing续写第二段可添加语言细节:“我”告诉老师自己爱上了写作。必要物品必要物品:原文中的作者参赛作品中的原文中的作者参赛作品中的“马马”续写第一段可添加“我”脑海中浮现出努力创作马的形象的情节。Week 1 建议信建议信&改变成长类读后续写改变成长类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第11页赢在字里行间提分步骤4沿原文特点写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道)原文长短句交替使用,恰到好处地推动了情节的发展,如作者在描写自己的努
16、力过程时,使用了一系列的排比短句,淋漓尽致地描写了作者纠结、怀疑、想放弃又坚持下去的写稿过程(原文);时间状语从句+动作链(原文)描写老师的动作;利用一般疑问句和特殊疑问句(原文)描写内心活动。无灵主语句(原文)和叠字(原文)使描写更活泼生动。在叙述事情发展时,利用了状语从句、定语从句和比较级句式(原文)等。续写时应学会借鉴和仿效,这样才能与原文语言风格保持一致。Week 1 建议信建议信&改变成长类读后续写改变成长类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第12页赢在字里行间仿效临摹满分手写体Handwriting also counts!Week 1 建议信建议信&改变成长类读后
17、续写改变成长类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第13页赢在字里行间Week 1 建议信建议信&改变成长类读后续写改变成长类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第14页赢在字里行间Version Version 2 2 A few weeks later,when I almost forgot the contest,there came the news.I still remember it was a Monday morning in spring,when my teacher called me to his office,telling me th
18、at I had taken first place in the writing contest,and that I was the only winner whose native language wasnt English.Dominated by an overwhelming sense of excitement and pride at his words,I simply stood there dumbfounded,and my feet,as if rooted to the spot,couldnt move a bit.The next day,I was pre
19、sented with my award and a certificate at the ceremony.I went to my teachers office after the award presentation.As I showed him my award and certificate,I could see the pride in his eyes.He congratulated me and gave me a warm hug.It was at that moment that a warm surge of streams washed through my
20、body.The image of the horse emerged in my mind,encouraging me to continue writing.Indeed,I got a taste of victory and learned to pursue my dream with perseverance,whatever difficulties might arise.Week 1 建议信建议信&改变成长类读后续写改变成长类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第15页赢在字里行间相关素材微补充相关素材微补充课件独有Week 1 建议信建议信&改变成长类读后续
21、写改变成长类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第16页赢在字里行间得知比赛的好消息的描写1.My heart raced as my teacher handed me a letter.I held my breath as I read the words:“Congratulations!You have won first place in the writing contest!”当我的老师递给我一封信时,我的心跳加速。当我读到字里行间的话语时,我屏住呼吸:“恭喜你!你在写作比赛中获得了第一名!”2.I couldnt believe my eyes.I read t
22、he letter again and again,trying to make sure that I wasnt dreaming.我简直不敢相信自己的眼睛。我一遍遍地读这封信,试图确定自己没有在做梦。3.My heart was pounding with excitement as I realized that my hard work and dedication had paid off.当我意识到自己的努力和投入得到了回报时,我的心激动得怦怦跳。Week 1 建议信建议信&改变成长类读后续写改变成长类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第17页赢在字里行间颁奖时场
23、景的描写4.As I stood on the stage waiting to receive my award,I felt a mix of nervousness,excitement,and gratitude all at once.当我站在舞台上等待领奖时,我顿时感到紧张、兴奋且感激。5.Holding the award high,I was filled with a deep sense of appreciation for all the hard work and dedication that had led me to this moment.高举着奖杯,我深深地感激带来这一刻的所有辛勤付出。来到老师办公室的场景描写6.Handing him the certificate and trophy,I murmured,“I owe this glory to you.”我把证书和奖杯递给他,低声说:“这荣誉是您给我的。”