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1、高考读后续写素材积累：动作与神态描写1 Nana collapsing suddenly,her body tightening,becoming rigid（僵硬的）,her eyesrolling back,her arms and legs shaking as if something were throttling（压制）her fromthe inside,the froth（泡沫）at the corners of her mouth,white,sometimes pink withblood.描述可怜的Nana发病时的状态：her body-tightening,becomi
2、ng rigid（僵 硬 的）；her eyes-rolling back；her arms and legs-shaking；the froth（泡沫）at the corners of her mouth-white,sometimes pinkwith blood.作者从N an a身 体 的 各 个 部 位 进 行 描 述，给人以真实感，人物造型栩栩如生，使文章生动形象。2 When Mariam spoke,his attention never wavered 动 摇.He noddedslowly and smiled with a look of gratitude,as if
3、 he had been granted a coveted 渴望的 privilege.It was easy to tell Mullah Faizullah things that Mariam didnt dare tellNana.本句描述了师生的关系和谐，其中在描述老师倾听M ariam 讲话时的神态特别形象：nodded slowly and smiled with a look of gratitude描写动作时，为了让动作更丰满，更灵动，可以适当运用副词，介词短语等来补充说明。比如本句中：nodded slowly；根 据 情 景 我 们 还 可 以 用 noddingqui
4、ckly 等 等。再比如，在表达微笑的时候，本句中smiled with a look of gratitude=smilegratefully；根据情景，还可以有smile broadly,开怀地笑。smile charmingly迷人地笑.smile cunningly 狡猾地笑。smile pleasantly 令人愉快地笑 smile faintly 微微-笑；等等。3 Is that what you want?”Mullah Faizullah said,looking at her with his soft,wateryeyes,his hands behind his sto
5、oping back,the shadow of his turban falling on a patchof bristling buttercups.对老师讲话时的神态描写：眼睛 looking at her with his soft,watery eyes手：his hands behind his stooping back4 When she laughed,she covered her mouth with a fist to hide the bad tooth.娜娜笑的时候的神态描写：covered her mouth with a fist to hide the ba
6、dto o th.用 拳 头 盖 住 她 的 嘴 巴 以 掩 饰 她 糟 糕 的 牙 齿，体 现 了 她 爱 美，又 不 太 自 信 的 神 态。5 She waited until her legs were stiff（坚硬的）.This time,she did not go back to thekolba.She rolled up the legs of her trousers to the knees,crossed the stream,and,forthe first time in her life,headed down the hill for Herat 赫拉特（阿
7、富汗西北部城市）用动作表达她内心的挣扎与果敢：waited until her legs were stiff（坚硬的）rolled up the legs of her trouserscrossed the streamheaded down6 Finally,on Thursdays,all she could do was sit against a wall,eyes glued to thestream,and wait.If Jalil was running late,a terrible dread filled her bit by bit.Herknees would w
8、eaken,and she would have to go somewhere and lie down.等候父亲的神态描写：eyes glued to the stream体现了她的渴望;a terrible dreadfilled her bit by bit;Her knees would weaken;.go somewhere and lie down 用具体的身体反应与动作表达她的恐惧与焦虑。7 A look of confusion crossed the girls face.Then,a flash of recognition.Therewas a faint smile
9、 on her lips now,and an air of eagerness about her,of anticipation.“Wait here,the girl said quickly.神态的细微变化：先是 A look of confusion crossed the girls face然后 a flash of recognition.之后是 a faint smile再是 an air of eagerness最后是 the girl said quickly.一连串的神态变化，细微的表情特写，最后辅以动作。就像是看电影，有木有？8 She swung her feet
10、over the side of the bed and huiTied over.She kissed his hand asalways and he her brow.She pulled him up a chair.一 连 串 的 动 作 描 写：swung-hurried over-kissed-he herbrow(kiss)-pulled him u p这 一 连 串 的 动 作 将 玛 丽 亚 姆 对 父 亲 到 来的 热 情 与 爱 表 达 出 来 了。9 JaliPs eyes lifted slowly,met Mariams,lingered for a moment
11、,thendropped.He opened his mouth,but all that came forth was a single,pained groan.细腻的神态描写：父亲 Jalil 的 反 应：JaliTs eyes-lifted slowly-m et M ariams-lingered for a moment-dropped-opened his mouth-a single,painedg ro a n描 写 了 父 亲 对 女 儿 要 出 嫁 的 复 杂 心 情，这 些 动 作 描 写 表 现 了 人物的内心世界，以外显内。10 Their gazes met br
12、iefly in the glass and slid away.细腻的神态描写：陌生不自在的碰撞：met briefly-slid away11 He crossed and uncrossed his arms.他 手 臂 交 叉 在 胸 前，又 放 了 下 来。动作描写：将一组相对的词“交 叉cross”与 使不交叉，放 下uncross”放在一起表达，表达了人物的矛盾心理。12 Jalil looked down,and,like an overgrown child,dug at something with the toe ofhis shoe.Jalil,（玛 丽 亚 姆 的 父
13、 亲）朝 下 看，用 鞋 尖 磨 蹭 地 面 什 么 的dug atsomething with the toe of his shoe 0 本句用 了 比 喻 的 手 法，like anovergrown ch ild就 像 一，个 大 孩 子，形 象 地 描 写 了 父 亲 感 到 愧 疚 的 神 态。13 Alone in the house,Mariam paced restlessly,from the kitchen to the living room,up the steps to her room and down again.She ended up back in her
14、 room,doing herprayers or sitting on the bed,missing her mother,feeling nauseated and homesick.描 述Mariam 一 个 人 在 家 无 聊 的 场 景一、动 作 的 不 断 变 换：不 安 地 走 动 paced restlessly；ended up back 返 回；doing her prayers祈 祷or sitting on the b e d坐 在 床 上，同 时 想 念 母 亲 missing herm other.想家 feeling nauseated and homesick
15、.二、场 景 的 不 断 变 换from the kitchen to the living room 从厨房至I 客 厅，up the steps to herroom and down again去 楼 上 房 间 又 下 来 这 些 并 不 是 累 赘 的 文 字，这 些 文 字 让 读 者 更 加 了 解 玛 丽 亚 姆 在 家 无所 事 事 百 无 聊 赖 的 心 情。我 们 似 乎 看 到 了 玛 丽 亚 姆 在 陌 生 的 家 里孤 单 的 身 影。14 She pushed until somehow she was in the clear and then she ran
16、up the street.Itwasnt until shed reached the intersection that she realized shed run the wrong way.She turned around and ran back in the other direction,headed down,tripping onceand scraping her knee badly,then up again and running,bolting past the women.形 象 地 描 述M ariam慌 不 择 路 的 窘 态：逃 跑，方 向 错 了，返 回
17、 跑，又 摔 倒 受 伤 了。15 He gave her a wounded look.经 过 一 系 列 的 事 情，玛 丽 亚 姆 感 觉 父 亲 并 不 真 正 爱 她，内 心 极 度 受挫 极 为 伤 心。她 说 她 永 远 不 要 听 到 他 消 息。这 时，父 亲 伤 心 地 望 了她 一 眼。这 一 眼，体 现 了 父 亲 怎 样 复 杂 的 感 情 呢？16 Dont leave like this,he said in a thin voice.玛 丽 亚 姆 憎 恨 父 亲 将 她 嫁 出 去，拒 绝 与 父 亲 交 流。在 出 嫁 那 天 与 父亲 分 别 时，态 度
18、冷 漠，于 是 父 亲 软 弱 无 力 地 说：别 这 样 离 开 我。用“thin”这 个 词 来 表 达 他 内 心 的 那 种 伤 感，内 疚 与 心 虚。17Rasheed buried his face into her pillow,andMariam stared,wide-eyed,at the ceiling above hisshoulder,shivering,lips pursed,feeling the heat of his quick breathson her shoulder.描述玛丽亚姆与丈夫首次身体的接触，后面几句都是类似的。大家可以酌情处理。这类描述也可
19、以用在其他情景中，如某人很兴奋，很恐惧等。18 His hand was on her right breast now,squeezing it hard through the blouse,andshe could hear him breathing deeply through the nose.19.There was a moment of hesitation,and then his hand was on herneck,his thick fingers slowly pressing the knobs in the back of it.Histhumb slid d
20、own,and now it was stroking the hollow above hercollarbone,then the flesh beneath it.Mariam began shivering.Hishand crept lower still,lower,his fingernails catching in the cotton ofher blouse.20 Mariam closed her eyes,gritted her teeth（咬 紧 牙 关）.21.Mariam sat on his bed,embarrassed and confused.She c
21、upped her face with herhands and closed her eyes.She breathed and breathed until she felt calmer.神态描写：困扰与尴尬。作者是这样描述的：双手捧住脸，闭上眼睛cupped herface with her hands and closed her eyes.然后她不断地呼吸直到感觉平静些Shebreathed and breathed until she felt calmero这种具体的神态与动作描写把她的尴尬与困惑形象地表达出来了。22 Hunger made him curt,imtable,
22、impatient.饥饿带来的反应。简单粗暴，易怒,没有耐心：curt,irritable,impatient.23 Meanwhile,a change had come over Rasheed ever since the day at the bathhouse.Most nights when he came home,he hardly talked anymore.He ate,smoked,went tobed,sometimes came back in the middle of the night for a brief and,of late,quiterough se
23、ssion of coupling.玛丽亚姆丈夫Rasheed在她流产后，对她的态度发生了极大变化。回家后，很少讲话。他就是吃饭，抽烟。上床睡觉，或者午夜回家一会儿。动作描写很简单ate,smoked,went to bed,但我们能深刻体会到这种压抑的生活氛围，以及玛丽亚姆在这种环境下生存，该多么不易。24 Occasionally,he took her around town on Fridays,like he used to,but on thesidewalks he walked quickly and always a few steps ahead of her,withou
24、t speaking,unmindful of Mariam who almost had to run to keep up with him.He wasnt so readywith a laugh on these outings anymore.He didnt buy her sweets or gifts,didnt stopand name places to her as he used to.Her questions seemed to irritate him.丈夫Rasheed在她流产后的又一表现：带她上街少了 Occasionally,he took herarou
25、nd tow n。即使在街上，走路很快，不顾玛丽亚姆能否跟上。事实上，玛丽亚姆跟不上,要跑着才能跟上他 walked quickly and always a few steps ahead of her,without speaking,unmindful of Mariam who almost had to run to 而且不讲话，不买礼物给她了，也不停下来介绍地名给她didnt buy her sweets or gifts,didnt stopand name places to her as he used t o,玛丽亚姆如果问问题，似乎也会激怒他irritate him0足见
26、他的不耐烦，以及对玛丽亚姆的嫌弃。他对玛丽亚姆已经没有爱了。25 He didnt look at her when he said this.These days,he never did anymore,andMariam wasnt ever sure if she was being spoken to.丈 夫 Rasheed对玛丽亚姆的冷漠的态度：说话不看她，而且有一段时间了，Hedidn9t look at her when he said this.These days,he never did anymore,这相当于冷暴力。26 It wasnt easy toleratin
27、g him talking this way to her,to bear his scorn,his ridicule,his insults,his walking past her like she was nothing but a house cat.可 怜 的Mariam要容忍丈夫对她的冷漠与侮辱：bear his scorn,his ridicule,hisinsults；这里多个h is的重复，是修辞中的平行对照手法，形式整齐匀称，音律节奏铿锵，富有感染力。在灿烂千阳中，类似的句子表达有很多。在这里，我们可以感受到她丈夫对待她就像房子里的一只猫，不把她当人看待，让我们对玛丽亚姆
28、的命运产生深深的同情。27 He put it in his mouth,chewed once,then twice,before grimacing（做鬼脸）andspitting it out on the sofrah.描写玛丽亚姆丈夫吃饭的时候吃到沙粒时的反应：前面咀嚼一次两次，然后是他做鬼脸吐出那口饭。是一个特写的镜头。为之后他大发雷霆，毒打玛丽亚姆做铺垫。28 His powerful hands clasped her jaw.He shoved two fingers into her mouth andpried it open,then forced the cold,h
29、ard pebbles into it.Mariam struggled against him,mumbling,but he kept pushing the pebbles in,his upper lip curled in a sneer.丈 夫 对Mariam的残忍行为：盛行将沙砾塞到施嘴巴里forced the cold,hardpebbles；kept pushing the pebbles in.,不顾玛丽亚姆的反抗与痛苦。具体的事件描写，揭示现实的残酷。29 Tears were leaking out of the comers of her eyes.流眼泪的表达：眼泪
30、从她的眼角流出来leaking out of the comers of her eyes。30.A few moments later,he pushed back the blanket and left the room,leaving herwith the impression of his head on her pillow,leaving her to wait out the pain downbelow,to look at the frozen stars in the sky and a cloud that draped the face of themoon like a wedding veil.玛丽亚姆的丈夫是很自私的，其实从头到尾没有真正爱过他。她只是他泄欲的工具。这段话出现在玛丽亚姆刚与丈夫结婚的时候。