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1、读后续写-内容构思与语言优化内容如何构思续写的内容(logical plotting)*如何打磨续写的语言(vivid writing)211 如何构思续写的内容(Logical plotting)1.1.续写第一段的内容设计既要考虑与上文的融洽续写第一段的内容设计既要考虑与上文的融洽衔接，同时也要考虑本段和最后一段开头语的呼应衔接，同时也要考虑本段和最后一段开头语的呼应和衔接，而后者是容易忽视的部分。和衔接，而后者是容易忽视的部分。2.2.续写第二段是文章的结尾，要关注与文章开头续写第二段是文章的结尾，要关注与文章开头的遥相呼应，凸显主题，升华精神。的遥相呼应，凸显主题，升华精神。What
2、kind of ending would you prefer What kind of ending would you prefer for this story?for this story?A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day.*Sometimes,the general key word can guide us to imagine reasonably.surprising interesting One Sunday afternoon,they were driving
3、to One Sunday afternoon,they were driving to an event in their car but had to stop at the bank an event in their car but had to stop at the bank and use the ATM machineand use the ATM machine.Ashleigh,showing Ashleigh,showing her husband where to turn,gestured wildly with her husband where to turn,g
4、estured wildly with her left hand and felt the ring off.However,her left hand and felt the ring off.However,when searching the car carefully,they werent when searching the car carefully,they werent able to find it.They figured it fell out of the open able to find it.They figured it fell out of the o
5、pen drivers side window.drivers side window.Grade the story Grade the story The couple searched the parking lot and the car The couple searched the parking lot and the car for hours.Nothing.for hours.Nothing.Later,back at home,the Hannahs Later,back at home,the Hannahs searched through the car for h
6、ours.Nothing.Years searched through the car for hours.Nothing.Years later,Daniel bought his wife a much larger later,Daniel bought his wife a much larger engagement ring.Finally,this month Korey made engagement ring.Finally,this month Korey made contact with Daniel Hannah.They met,and as a contact w
7、ith Daniel Hannah.They met,and as a reward for returning the ring,she simply asked that reward for returning the ring,she simply asked that Daniel send her a photo of the moment he surprised Daniel send her a photo of the moment he surprised his wife with her lost engagement ring.On mothers his wife
8、 with her lost engagement ring.On mothers day,Ashleigh s son gave her the ring.It didnt fit and day,Ashleigh s son gave her the ring.It didnt fit and was much smaller than her replacement ring,but was much smaller than her replacement ring,but none of that mattered.none of that mattered.*How to poli
9、sh your story?（vivid writing）Ways to polish your story strategies3.proper conjunctions2.abundant sentence patterns*1.advanced words and phrases*Advanced words and phrases丰满人物内心（心情的表达）丰满人物内心（心情的表达）Rich adjectives and other useful expressions to portray the inner thoughts of the figures增加表达效果（动作的表达）增加
10、表达效果（动作的表达）Detailed verbs to make expressions powerful 丰富故事情节（细节和连贯）丰富故事情节（细节和连贯）Proper adverbs to enrich your story Lets compare！However,when searching the car carefully,they werent able to find it.They figured it fell out of the open drivers side window.However,However,to their great to their grea
11、t disappointment,disappointment,when when searching the car carefully,searching the car carefully,they were not able to find it.they were not able to find it.Feeling depressed,Feeling depressed,they they figured it figured it might have fallen might have fallen out of the open drivers side out of th
12、e open drivers side window.window.In conclusionIn conclusion，the description of inner thoughts can the description of inner thoughts can make our story make our story more logical,reasonable,more logical,reasonable,and and powerful.powerful.How to describe your inner feelings?1.Feeling happy/sad/ang
13、ry/guilty/depressed,1.Feeling happy/sad/angry/guilty/depressed,2.Driven by curiosity/a sense of regret/sympathy.2.Driven by curiosity/a sense of regret/sympathy.或或者是者是 Deeply touched/moved by Deeply touched/moved by3.,full of regret/anger/fear/gratitude/sadness3.,full of regret/anger/fear/gratitude/
14、sadness4.To ones disappointment/surprise/delight/relief/4.To ones disappointment/surprise/delight/relief/astonishment astonishment5.5.具体的动作描写具体的动作描写 stand frozen,jump with joy,stand frozen,jump with joy,tremble with anger,with tears filling/welling up ones tremble with anger,with tears filling/welli
15、ng up ones eyes,with ones eyes wide open eyes,with ones eyes wide open 等等Lets have a try!1.Later,back at home,the Hannahs searched through the 1.Later,back at home,the Hannahs searched through the car for hours.Nothing.car for hours.Nothing.Later,back at home,Later,back at home,with the last ray of
16、hopewith the last ray of hope,the,the Hannahs searched the car for hours once again.Nothing.Hannahs searched the car for hours once again.Nothing.They They stared at stared at the car,the car,trembling with rage and depress.trembling with rage and depress.2.Ashleighs son gave her the ring.It didnt f
17、it.2.Ashleighs son gave her the ring.It didnt fit.Ashleighs son gave her the ring.Ashleighs son gave her the ring.The momentThe moment the lost ring the lost ring came into her sightcame into her sight,a rush of excitement swept over hera rush of excitement swept over her.Ashleigh was too astonished
18、 to say a word,Ashleigh was too astonished to say a word,with her eyes with her eyes wide openwide open./She was speechless./She was speechless in surprisein surprise.增加表达效果（动作）增加表达效果（动作）Brainstorming:tell saysaywhisper murmur speaktalk cry out shout respond reply explain scream roar announce declar
19、e yell call out The government _ a state of emergency.“Get out of my class!”The teacher _.He _ something in his sleep.Seeing the film star,the fans _ with excitement.Asked why he was late,Alex _ that his car had broken down.增加表达效果（增加表达效果（动作）作）declared roared murmured screamed explained Lets have a t
20、ry!1.Ashleigh,showing her husband where to turn,gestured wildly with her left hand.In order toIn order to show her husband where to turn,show her husband where to turn,Ashleigh Ashleigh,gesturing wildly with,gesturing wildly with her left hand.her left hand.Lets have a try!2.*Finally,this month Kore
21、y made contact with 2.*Finally,this month Korey made contact with Danil Hannah.They met,and as a reward for Danil Hannah.They met,and as a reward for returning the ring,she simply asked that Daniel send returning the ring,she simply asked that Daniel send her a photo of the moment he surprised his w
22、ife with her a photo of the moment he surprised his wife with her lost engagement ring.her lost engagement ring.*Finally,this month Korey made contact with Daniel*Finally,this month Korey made contact with Daniel Hannah,to whom sheHannah,to whom she the whole thing.the whole thing.Hannah,Hannah,deep
23、ly touched bydeeply touched by what Korey did,what Korey did,with gratitudewith gratitude.And he.And he promisedpromised to give it to his wife to give it to his wife as a gift for the coming Mothers Day.as a gift for the coming Mothers Day.What you are supposed to bear in mind:只要是记叙文，难以逃脱的动作描写肯定有，除
24、了熟知各种说的表达方式外，请记住各种看，和各种走Eg:see,Eg:see,watch,observe,peep,stare at,glare at,watch,observe,peep,stare at,glare at,glance at,catch sight of,lose sight of,glance at,catch sight of,lose sight of,etcetcEg:walk,run,Eg:walk,run,wander,dash,pace back and forth,wander,dash,pace back and forth,step into,make o
25、nes way to,dance out,step into,make ones way to,dance out,etcetcLets have a try!3.*On Mothers Day,Ashleighs son gave her the 3.*On Mothers Day,Ashleighs son gave her the ring.It didnt fit and was much smaller than her ring.It didnt fit and was much smaller than her replacement ring,but none of that
26、mattered.replacement ring,but none of that mattered.*On Mothers Day,the moment Ashleighs son*On Mothers Day,the moment Ashleighs son presented the lost ring to his mother,she recognized presented the lost ring to his mother,she recognized it it at the first sightat the first sight and and danced dan
27、ced forward to catch it as forward to catch it as if a kid had got treasure.if a kid had got treasure.“It was never lost,never.”,she“It was never lost,never.”,she murmuredmurmured to herself.to herself.Memories came flooding back and Memories came flooding back and joyful tears rolled joyful tears r
28、olled down her cheeksdown her cheeks.*Ashleigh,showing her husband where to turn,*Ashleigh,showing her husband where to turn,gestured wildly with her left hand and felt gestured wildly with her left hand and felt the ring off.the ring off.In order toIn order to show her husband where to turn,show he
29、r husband where to turn,Ashleigh Ashleigh,gesturing wildly with,gesturing wildly with her left hand.+her left hand.+she felt the ring off when she stretched back she felt the ring off when she stretched back her arm.her arm.丰富故事情节（细节丰富故事情节（细节+连贯）连贯）*Finally,this month Korey made contact with*Finally
30、,this month Korey made contact with Daniel Hannah.Daniel Hannah.*this month Korey made contact this month Korey made contact with Daniel Hannah./with Daniel Hannah./FinallyFinally,this month,this month Korey Korey made contact with Daniel made contact with Daniel Hannah.Hannah.丰富故事情节（细节丰富故事情节（细节+连贯）
31、连贯）One Sunday afternoon,they were driving to an One Sunday afternoon,they were driving to an event in their car but had to stop at the bank and event in their car but had to stop at the bank and use the ATM machineuse the ATM machine.In order toIn order to show her show her husband where to turn,Ash
32、leigh husband where to turn,Ashleigh,gesturing wildly with her left hand.gesturing wildly with her left hand.she felt the ring off when she stretched she felt the ring off when she stretched back her arm.back her arm.However,However,to their great to their great disappointment,disappointment,afteraf
33、ter searching the car carefully,searching the car carefully,they were not able to find it.they were not able to find it.Feeling depressed,Feeling depressed,they figured it they figured it might have fallen might have fallen out of the open out of the open drivers side window.So out of the car driver
34、s side window.So out of the car the the Hannahs.Hannahs.The couple searched the parking lot and the car for hours.Nothing.Later,back at home,with the last ray of hope,the Hannahs searched the car for hours once again.Nothing.They stared at the car,trembling with rage and depress.Years later,Daniel b
35、ought his wife a much larger engagement ring.Fortunately,this month Korey made contact with Daniel Hannah,to whom she the whole thing.Hannah,deeply touched by what Korey did,with gratitude.And he promised to give it to his wife as a gift for the coming Mothers Day.On Mothers Day,the moment Ashleighs
36、 son presented the lost ring to his mother,she recognized it at the first sight and danced forward to catch it as if a kid had got treasure.“It was never lost,never.”,she murmured to herself.Memories came flooding back and joyful tears rolled down her cheeks.Time passed quickly that year,and before
37、we Time passed quickly that year,and before we all know it,it was the last day of school.all know it,it was the last day of school.Our school Our school had a very special tradition on the last day.All the had a very special tradition on the last day.All the teachers filled the sidewalk,waving goodb
38、ye to the teachers filled the sidewalk,waving goodbye to the kids as the buses pulled out with their horns kids as the buses pulled out with their horns honking.But on that particular day,Steven honking.But on that particular day,Steven walkedwalked slowly to the bus,his head down,tears in his eyes.
39、slowly to the bus,his head down,tears in his eyes.He boarded the bus reluctantly,and then He boarded the bus reluctantly,and then ran ran back back off the bus to hug Mr.Rowe.“I dont want to leave off the bus to hug Mr.Rowe.“I dont want to leave you”,he sobbed.With red-rimmed eyes,Mr.Rowe you”,he so
40、bbed.With red-rimmed eyes,Mr.Rowe comforted him,“I will miss you,too.”comforted him,“I will miss you,too.”Grade the story Grade the story Many years later,Mr.Rowe and I were Many years later,Mr.Rowe and I were surprised when a handsome young man walked surprised when a handsome young man walked into
41、 our classroom,dressed in the Marine Corps into our classroom,dressed in the Marine Corps uniform.uniform.The young man stood tall and proud.It The young man stood tall and proud.It was Stevenwas Steven！Mr.Rowe and I Mr.Rowe and I couldnt believe couldnt believe our eyes.our eyes.He saluted and hugg
42、ed Mr.Rowe He saluted and hugged Mr.Rowe tightly!“I have come back to school today just to tightly!“I have come back to school today just to say thanks to you!”.say thanks to you!”.?It is my hope that every It is my hope that every teacher is blessed with such an experience of a teacher is blessed with such an experience of a former student coming back simply to say former student coming back simply to say THANKS.THANKS.?Practice makes perfect!Practice makes perfect!You do,you get!You do,you get!Wish you a pleasant journey Wish you a pleasant journey of learning English!of learning English!