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1、2023年浅析雅思写作 第一篇：浅析雅思写作 雅思培训 :/ielts.longre 托福培训 :/toefl.longre 浅析雅思写作模板 朗阁海外考试探讨中心 雅思写作是中国考生的弱项。根据朗阁海外考试探讨中心多年悉心探讨和考察觉察，在雅思索生数量最浩大国家中，中国学生的雅思写作平均水平始终位于低级水平，甚至低于我们的邻国印度。由此可见，为了拿到通往志向国度去留学或移民的通行证，写作是有待宽阔考生加强的一个项目。基于这种状况，很多考生便将盼望寄予于甚至痴迷于模板，盼望事先背诵好一篇或者几篇“万精油性质的模板作文，他们认为这样既可以轻松解决写作考试时间不够的问题，又能拿到高分。 事实上，模
2、板的好处在于能够提高写作效率，省去很多构思和选词的时间。从应试者角度来讲，无疑是有大大关心的；但是，从考试组织者角度考虑，模板却是一种欺瞒，因为他不能表达考生真正写作水平。因此，考委会明确规定，严惩背诵模板的考生。这一点也适用于雅思索试的另一分项口语。于是，很多培训机构的老师们也起先反对运用写作模板，但这并未变更很多学生对于模板的青睐，因为对很多烤鸭们来说，尤其是基础薄弱的烤鸭们，离开模板，要完全依靠自己的英语实力去考场上硬拼，这又谈何简洁。 那么，原委我们是否应当摒弃模板呢？笔者的答案是否认的，因为存在即有理。模板既然有它独特的生命力，就是因为它有着独特的优势。大约在40分钟内写一篇250字
3、以上的争辩文，对很多考生而言是特殊具有挑战性的任务，特别是对于基础薄弱的学生。针对考生在构思和遣词造句方面的困难，模板成了应付考试的权宜之计。那么，要想到达运用模板和避开考官怀疑的双丰收结果，我们应当要正确选择模板，对其进行技术处理，这才是重中之重。要做到这些，首先，我们必需了解哪些状况是我们考官认为背诵的段落和句子。考官推断考生是否背诵，主要依靠一下几点证据： 一、考试中反复出现的雷同句式和段落 我在平常批阅学生作文时，经常会觉察不同学生都会写出类似的句子和表达，比方说，有一次，我看到“The issue ofhas aroused great concern among public.Sp
4、eaking for 雅思培训 :/ielts.longre 托福培训 :/toefl.longre myself,is oversimplistic. 这样的表达，不禁惊喜万分，觉得学生进步很大，但是，后来我觉察另外好些不同学生在写作练习中都是用了它，于是我便得出结论，这是他们背诵的句型和模板。后来我得知这些学生们是从一本知名雅思写作书籍中学习到的。事实上，考官在雅思阅卷的时候也是做出这样推断的。曾经有个考官告知我，他在批改试卷的时候有时会遇到一次考试中有好几篇文章里的若干表达很雷同，估计他们是来自同一个学校。 二、和雅思范文雷同 考官经常会拿相关题目的雅思范文来参考，假如觉察文章和范文的出
5、现多句或段落的大致相同就会认为有抄袭之嫌。推断一旦确立，该考生的分数就会降低。降低幅度视具体抄袭比例而定。 由此可见，正如我们经常说的，事物有好坏两方面，运用模板是有确定风险的，但是我们绝不能因噎废食，关键在于假如我们不让考官找到背诵的证据，就可以万事大吉了。朗阁海外考试探讨中心建议考生自创模板，这是一种比较平安的方法，可供大家参考。我曾经遇到一位考生，他把在网上听到的国外公开课里面的话：We live in a society where the dynamics betweenandshift quickly搬到写作中，作为开头引题句型。类似这样，来自自己收集的表达相对比较平安。 因此，运
6、用模板是要留意以下几点：1.为了不被考官觉察运用模板，要运用和考题不同的多篇范文作依托；2.参考模板范文时要留意句子之间和段落之间的连接要自然，避开出现不合乎规律的状况出现。考生在实际操作中可以根据自己驾驭的范文根据需要进行复制粘贴和改写，确定要留意句子间的连接自然，以保证全文的连贯和连接。 当然，需要慎重强调的是，模板仅是为了应试的权宜之计，要提高写作实力，还是需要日积月累，逐步提高。所以，假如不预备运用模板，或者有较长时间准备考试的烤鸭们，更好的一个选择是下苦功夫，提高写作实力。因为这是一个更加平安，更加万能，而且为你们以后出国打下坚实英语功底很好的方法。 其次篇：雅思写作 School
7、teachers used to be the source of information.However，some people argue that teachers are not as important as before because there is an increasing variety of information resources.What is your opinion?(08年4月24日考题)要对上面的句子进行重新描述，最简洁的就是用同义词替换，请看下表： Know: recognize comprehend grasp understand realize 3
8、.运用短语进行替换 Some say that building more roads will help reduce the traffic congestion in big cities.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.Do you support or oppose this statement? 在这一段话里，可以替换的短语如下所示: 英特网对我们的日常生活带来很大的影响。这句话我们可以写出不同的搭配。比方: 一、并列结构的运用 通过对官方范文的探讨觉察，考生在用并列结构提高句型档次的时候可以从以下几个层面入手： 1
9、.名词并列: n1，n2，n3， 这种并列又可以具体通过以下2种结构实现： a).A，B，C， and other Xs b).X，such Y as A，B，C， i.Reading，writing，listening and other academic subjects could be learned from books，or primarily from books.ii.Some knowledge，such academic subjects as reading，writing，listening，could be learned from books，or primaril
10、y from books.iii.It is of great importance for people to read imaginative literature，such as poetry，novels or mythology.iv.It is of great importance for people to read novels and other types of imaginative literature such as poetry and mythology.2.名词性成分并列: n.+ what/how/whether/if 这种并列又可以具体通过以下2种结构实现
11、： a).what=something that b).how=the way/manner in which i.Most parents educate their children merely by instinct rather than proper pedagogy，and usually do not care about their relationship with children and how much neglect influences the future development of their children.ii.Most students are ea
12、ger to obtain knowledge，but they lack the sense of what is good，or what is necessary and how much a deficiency in the concept of viewing the situation as a whole would mislead them.iii.My fellow Americans，ask not what your country can do for you，ask what you can do for your country.My fellow citizen
13、 of the world，ask not what American will do for you，but what together we can do for the freedom of man.(John Kennedy)3.形容词成分并列: a).a1 and a2+n b).a1+yet/but+a2+n c).a1，a2+n+that d).a1，a2，so a3 that/as to i.a small town a small and peaceful town a good teacher a good and very impressive teacher a stu
14、pid decision a stupid and incorrigible decision ii.a simple yet effective method a direct and simple yet magically effective method an irrational yet understandable decision a fair and balance，yet undesirable decision an obvious yet not the most significant reason iii.Most students can hardly stand
15、for his typically dry and dull lectures that would normally continue at least several quarters without giving any essential information.iv.The impact that technology has had on our daily life and society in general，is undeniable.It will become even greater as computers get faster，smaller，smarter，and
16、 so inexpensive that virtually everyone will be able to own one.v.A class led by a lethargic teacher could be extremely dull，and so boring that drives everybody in the class into sleep.vi.Learning in essence is a process that is time-consuming，painstaking，and so hard that virtually only persistent f
17、ew can finally have a sense of real achievement.4.副词成分并列: a).ad1 and ad2+n b).ad1+yet/but+ad2+n c).ad1，ad2+prep d).ad1，ad2，so ad3 that/as to i.A conscientious teacher always prepares his lecture carefully，intelligently，and with the full consideration of all possible aspects concerning the subject.ii
18、.Apart from energizing the athletes, physical strength helps them plough into the games enthusiastically and with confidence and even act as a deterrent force to their rivals to some extent.5.动词并列: a).v1，v2+ing，v3+ing b).s1+v1+ing，s2+v2 i.An absent-minded teacher lacks drive to make class intensely
19、focused，often preparing nothing in advance，wandering among random topics，thus wasting and killing times of industrial students.ii.As a result of this, food dealers have made huge profit from it, thereby promoting the sector as well as creating more jobs.6.句子并列: a)., and therefore/thus/consequently b
20、).not only/simply/merelybut also/as well/even c).neithernor d).not thatbut that e).that引导的宾语从句 f).that引导的定语从句 g).that引导的主语从句 i.Books keep records of thoughts and ideas, and are therefore the major source from which people obtain knowledge.ii.Chinese children unfortunately have few rights to make the
21、ir own decisions, and consequently often have to do things that they do not enjoy doing at all.iii.Modern vehicles have extended the range of peoples activity, and thus made much more goods available to local markets.iv.Computers have not only brought convenience, but they have also made people lear
22、n more.v.Not that emails or telephones have made people less personal, but that people themselves have become less personal.One of several possible reasons is that people usually lack of adequate communicating skills.vi.However, sports salaries are not determined by considering the contribution to s
23、ociety a person makes, or the level of responsibility he or she holds.二、从句的运用 从句的运用是提高写作得分最有效的一种手段，雅思写作中主要涉及的从句主要是名词性从句，状语从句和定语从句，朗阁海外考试探讨中心建议考生既可以单独运用这些从句来组织句子，还可以接受从句套从句的方式来提高句型的困难度。7.从句套从句: i.Those who feel that sports stars salaries are justified might argue that the number of professionals with
24、 real talent is very few, and the money is the recognition of the skills and dedication a person needs to be successful.宾语从句+定语从句+表语从句 ii.This has been driven by technological and scientific breakthroughs that are changing the whole way we view the world on an almost daily basis.定语从句+状语从句 iii.The re
25、asons for this trend may involve the recognition that a young adult who passes directly from school to university is rather restricted in terms of general knowledge and experience of the world.宾语从句+定语从句 iv.But overall, I think that this is less likely today, when academic qualifications are essentia
26、l for getting a reasonable career.宾语从句+非限制性定语从句 v.Unfortunately, it is not always the case that new things are promoted because they have good impacts for the majority of people.名词性从句+状语从句 三、倒装句的运用 倒装句的运用主要包括否认词位于句首时的倒装，比较句中第2个句子的倒装和虚拟语气条件句中的倒装。 i.Not only should the parent spent more time with thei
27、r children, they should also try to communicate with their children more often.ii.Only in this way can this issue be effectively solved.iii.Nor a bad environment will make people healthier.iv.Only in very few regions do the residents have enough water for their daily needs.第一，定语从句。 这应当算是写作中最常用的一种句型之
28、一。适当地运用定语从句可以给你的文章增色不少。例如，下面的这两个句子用上定语从句立即就变成了一个秀丽的困难句。Bad books contain evil much description thoughts.In them, there might be , and sex.about violence, superstition Bad books, in which there might be much description about violence, superstition, and sex, contain evil thoughts.其次，状语从句。 在写作当中运用的最多的
29、是以下五种状语从句，即缘由状语从句，让步状语从句，条件状语从句，时间状语从句和目的状语从句。 1.缘由状语从句：常由because, as, since和for引导 Eg: Nonetheless demerits.尽管如此，我还是赞成太空探险，因为它的好处远远大于坏处。 2.让步状语从句：常由although, though, even though/ if, as long as和notwithstanding引导 Eg: Although this view is wildly held, this is little evidence be obtained at any age an
30、d at any place.尽管这一观点被广泛接受，很少有证据说明教化能够在任何地点、任何年龄进行。3.条件状语从句：常由if, on the condition that和providing that引导 Eg: If you want to achieve something or intend to fulfill one of your ambitions, you must work hard, make efforts and get prepared.假如你要取得成就或要实现你的雄心壮志，你必需努力工作、艰苦奋斗、准备好条件。4.时间状语从句：常由when和while引导 Eg
31、: When it comes to education, the majority of people believe that education is a lifetime study.说到教化，大部分人认为其是一个终生的学习。5.目的状语从句: 常由so that和in order that引导 Eg: Millions of people have to spend more time and energy on studying new skills andtechnology 保持优势。 so that they can keep a favorable position in
32、job market.成千上万的人们不得不花费更多的精力和时间学习新的技术和学问，使得他们在就业市场能 that education can , I am still in favor of space travel, for its merits far outweigh 第三，宾语从句。Eg: Some people claim that government should be mainly responsible for the environmental pollution.一些人认为政府应对环境污染负主要责任。 Eg: Many experts point out that, al
33、ong with the development of modern society, it is aninevitable result and there is no way to avoid it.许多专家指出这是现代社会进展必定的结果，无法避开。第四，同位语从句。Eg: It is an undeniable increasingly serious.环境污染变得越来越严峻是不行否认的事实。 Eg: No one can deny the basic fact that it is impossible for average workers to master those high-
34、technology skills easily.没有人能否认这一基本事实：对于一般工人来讲，轻松驾驭这些技术是不行能的。第五，主语从句。 Eg: What has caught our attention is /It is noticeable that the environment in .fact that environmental pollution becomes both the rural and urban areas is deteriorating 值得留意的是农村和城市的生态环境都在不断恶化。 Eg: It is universally acknowledged t
35、hat environmental pollution becomes one of the most serious problems in China or even the world as a whole.众所周知，环境污染问题是中国乃至世界面临的最为严峻的问题之一。第六，强调句: It is 被强调的内容 that Eg: It is cars and factories that release environment.汽车和工厂排放大量的废气，使得环境被污染。第七，倒装句。 Eg: Only if the government will take some appropriate
36、 this intractable problem be tackled.只有政府实行适当的措施，这个麻烦的问题才能被解决。第八，被动语态。 Eg: Every means should be tried to protect the environment on which people live.人们应全力以赴来爱惜我们赖以生存的环境。 measures, will a great deal of gases, polluting the 第九，分词结构：包括如今分词和过去分词。 Eg: Tourism, which is a rising industry, has become the
37、 major source of economy, playing crucial role in many Asian countries.旅游业是一个新兴的行业，它成为经济的主要来源, 在很多东南亚国家起着尤为重要的作用。 Eg: To be more specific , government should stage some relevant .laws or regulations to severely punish the factory producing a great number of pollutants and the people littering or spi
38、tting deliberately 人进行严惩。第十，插入语。 一种独立成分,与句子的其它成分一般没有语法上的关系,大都是对一句话作一些附加说明或说明。它通常由一个词、一个短语或一个句子构成,位置较为灵敏,可置于句首、句中或句末,一般用逗号或破折号与句子隔开。Eg: Computer, an indispensable conveniences.电脑，我们生活中必不行少的一部分，给我们带来了极大的便利。 Eg: College students, lacking social experience, are easily cheated.高校生，没有社会阅历，简洁上当受骗。 part in
39、our life, has brought us great 具体来说，政府应当出台相关法律法规对制造大量污染物的工厂及有意乱扔垃圾随地吐痰的 第三篇：雅思写作 翻开剑桥系列教材后面考官所给的范文评析，大家会觉察考官的评分标准一般都从如下四个方面绽开：内容(content)、组织结构(organization)、词汇(vocabulary)和句式(sentence structure)。同时，据笔者的长期视察，高分雅思作文无一例外地在这四方面有好的演绎才能获得考官亲睐。“好的作文大都是相像的，而不幸的作文却各有各的不幸。下面，笔者将从以上四方面一一阐述烤鸭们写作时存在的盲点所在并提出相应的建议
40、。 一、内容(content)：切中主题，自圆其说 盲点1：无话可说 这类考生在看到题目时，最初的感觉是脑袋中一片空白。雅思作文题材广泛，包括科技、教化、健康、环保、犯罪、文化传统、时尚、体育运动、动物爱惜等。而且由于文化差异以及学习工作的缘由，日常生活中考生极少接触到这类话题，更不用说对它有什么想法了。 盲点1击破：四多原则 多看范文；多关注时事，视察生活；多与人沟通；多记录自己的想法。比较极端的做法是花三天三夜沉醉在范文书当中，分领域熟识雅思索题及其观点。当感觉自己脑袋中涌现出多数ideas时，关上书，写出自己能够想出来的各个领域的观点，假如某个领 域发生短路，翻开书重新阅读，直至能够写出
41、来为止。 盲点2：千言万语 这类考生往往见多识广，看到话题时感到倚马千言。可是由于词汇量和规律方面有所欠缺。往往面临“满腹的心里话不知怎么说的尴尬。 盲点2击破：词以类记原则 此类考生要分领域积累雅思写作词汇，如在写肥胖问题时，考生需要积累(obese, overweight, coronary heart disease, stroke, heredity, inheritance, junk food, carnivorous, excessive drinking and smoking, couch potato, diabetes, a balanced diet, vegetari
42、an等。) 盲点3：独树一帜 这类考生认为论点或论据越新颖越好，力求别出心裁。 盲点3击破：自圆其说原则 雅思索试终归是语言实力测试，词汇、语法和句式才是测试重点。况且，考官阅卷数载，见多识广，你的观点很有可能已经无法构成他的兴奋点，所以我们讲究论点论据 言之有理，能够自圆其说即可。 盲点4：真情流露 这类考生和“千言万语型考生神似，唯一的不同便是他们英文表达畅通无阻，写作时有“黄河之水，延绵不绝之势。但兴奋之时，有些忘乎所以，与主题渐行渐远。 盲点4击破：切中主题原则 这类考生必需建立自己的一套规律框架，并严格执行。如在写argumentation类题型时，全文四段：“第一段为背景介绍和提出
43、论点段；其次段为己方观点论证段；第三段为让步段；第四段总结段。切忌任何与主题无关或相悖的鸡肋出现。 二、组织结构(organization)：起承转合，行云流水 盲点1：天马行空 这类考生和“千言万语型考生神似，写作时缺乏自己的一套写作框架。有时，尽管有全文框架，段落框架又缺失，通常表现为主体段内部的分论点或分论据存在规律上的重复或冲突。 盲点1击破：起承转合原则 除了段落之间应存在“第一段(起)为背景介绍和提出论点段；其次段(承)为己方观点论证段；第三段(转)为让步段；第四段(合)总结段。的规律框架之外，段落内部每一句也需要有这样的规律框架来约束，如让步段中：“some people may
44、 argue that (起);because they maintain that 。(承);However ,they are oversimplifying the situation, in fact .。(转);Therefore , I believe 。(合) 盲点2：单句游离 这类烤鸭写出来的句子与句子之间没有连接词，有时就算有，规律连词也运用错误。或者是标点不留意。最常见运用错误诸如on the other hand。它连接的是转折，却多数次被误会成递进。 盲点2击破：行云流水原则 考生应精确记忆并正确运用各种规律关系词，力求做到行云流水，常见的规律连词有： 因果关系： 因：
45、As since due to owning to 果：hence thus therefore as a consequence as a result 表目的：thereby 举例关系：Take for example, For instance, To illustrate, As an apt illustration ,对比关系：While ,whilst, whereas, by contrast。 让步关系：despite ,in spite of , not with standing , nonetheless, even though,Provided that , if
46、三、词汇(vocabulary)：同义改写，百花齐放 盲点1 ： 遭受生词 大部分考生苦恼的地方莫过于此，写作过程中多数次由于生词的关系而短路。 盲点1击破：同义改写原则 其实考生对不相识的词完全可以paraphrase，如望子成龙，望女成凤完全可以写成：All parents expect their children to have a promising further。 留意：对于各个领域内的专知名词我们激励大家履行词以类记原则，终归只有语言水平较高的烤鸭才可能做到用简洁的词汇说明难词。如有同学在说明寄生虫(parasite)在他笔下成了 something that is very
47、tiny and lives on my skin and sucks my blood without doing any work！这样的paraphrase 只能让考官啼笑皆非。 盲点2：同义重现 如在discuss the advantages and disadvantages of the internet时，有考生作文中曾出现了不下10次的advantages and disadvantages。这会让考官出现极严峻的审美疲乏，分数自然不高。 盲点2击破： 百花齐放原则 其实考生在平常的习作中应留意近义词、反义词、衍生词的积累，并不断练习。如上面的advantages的同义词为benefits gains merits pros等；disadvantages的同义词有downsides ,weakness, drawbacks cons等。 盲点3：大词连篇 很多考生认为大词生僻词汇