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1、阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成 一篇完整的短文。A MOTHERS DAY SURPRISEThe twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mothers Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge.
2、They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and l
3、eft it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the
4、 bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.And then she.3 .升华:房间里充满爱,多么美好的惊喜啊！备词：房间：room充满：fill爱：love美好的惊喜：a beautiful surprise成句：基础版:A o
5、f lovethe room. It is a beautiful surprise.白银版：A.of love the whole room.美颜句：爱一直代代相传黄金版：Aof lovethe wholeroom.! Mom and dad was so delighted to find.考考你：As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.in the kitchen,dad thekids.WhenJeff their secret plan,a smileof understandi
6、ng dads face.,dad decided to.The kids cleared up the messy kitchen.Dad, was busy cooking a delicious sandwich and some porridge.Soon,the delicious smell of breakfast thekitchen.And dad asked the kids to their plan. （78 字）The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother .TheyHappy Mothe
7、rs Day ! A big surprise for you!nmom saw the breakfast,.She the perfect sandwich as well as theporridge, saying that. And then she.A of love the whole room.!Mom and dad was so delighted to find思维拓展AAs the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared., their father, as if. But so
8、on he realized their intention., he joined the twins in preparing the Mothers Day surprise. Though he had never been seen cooking, actually, he was expert in doing so. The twins their father with the breakfast, and it was apleasure to with their father., they could smell how good the dishes were.The
9、 twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. They said H叩py Mothers Day,with excitement. Their father laughed and told her the twins had prepared breakfastfor her. Then the twins whispered to her that they loved her so much and they were eager to see her smile every day.,her face
10、and his brightsmile the room. At that moment, they all sensed howbeautiful something living could be.!BAs the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.Dont panic!” he handed each one a wet towel, helping them clean the mess quickly. After that, Jeff theirplan,. However, Fath
11、er laughed, Sounds great! I can teach you to cook., Jenna and Jeff almost, joy in eyes.,the French toast and chicken porridge were ready., Father left the kitchen, promising to keep their secret.The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.Meeting theireyes, Mother feltuntil the
12、y presented the breakfast and said “Happy Mothers Day”. Mother gave them a tight hug, Unbelievable! You can cook! Its the biggest surprise I have received. They have known how to take care of others. Father sai herexcitement,Jenna and Jeff.They. It was a secret only shared between them.Then Jeff not
13、iced steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook t
14、he rest of the porridge. But Jeffs hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.续写评分标准研读：第五档2125.与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。1 .内容丰富切题。2 .所使用语法结构和词汇
15、丰富、准确，可能有些许错误但完全不 影响意义表达。3 .有效地使用了语句间的连接成分使所续写短文结构紧凑 第四档1620.与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理。1 .内容比较丰富,应用了 5个以上短文中标出的关键词语，.所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误,但不影 响意义表达2 .比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑通过对评分标准的解读，高分续写总结如下:L内容切题（【读】.语言高级【写】2 .逻辑连贯【写】那么多，我咋读？掐首尾.找人事！A MOTHER S DAY SURPRISEThe twins were filled with exci
16、tement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mothers Day.How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge（粥）. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff kne
17、w exactly what to do.想到母亲节的惊喜，双胞胎很兴奋。他们计划把早餐送到妈妈床上。他们打算做法吐司和鸡肉粥。Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid （盖 子）starting to shake. The next minute,the porridge boiled over and put out the fire.Jenna panicked.Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm andturned off the gas quickly. But the stove w
18、as a mess now.Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.然后Jeff注意到. 接着粥.一把火浇灭了。Jernia惊慌失措.Jeff保持冷静，关了煤气，但是炉子一团槽。然后她闻到了烧焦的味道，面包变黑了。故事我咋编？编转折，加升华!Para. 1: As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared.双胞胎失望地看着周围，他们的爸爸
19、来了。1 .衔接上文:看着厨房里的一切，爸爸非常惊讶。2 .转折:Jeff告诉爸爸计划，爸爸笑了,决定帮我们。3 .衔接下文:我们清理了厨房，重新做好了早餐。Para.2:The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.双胞胎带着早餐上楼，叫醒了妈妈。L衔接上文:孩子们说:母亲节快乐，妈妈看到早餐，感动流泪。2 .妈妈品尝早餐,夸赞并拥抱孩子们。3 .升华:房间里充满爱,多么美好的惊喜啊! 150字，我咋凑？亮眼词+美颜句!Para.l:As the twins looked around them in di
20、sappointment, their father appeared.双胞胎失望地看着周围，他们的爸爸来了。1 .衔接上文:看到厨房里的一切，爸爸非常惊讶。备词：看到：see厨房：kitchen一切:everything非常惊讶：very surprised成句：基础版：(see) everything in the kitchen,Seeing;Dad was very surprised亮眼词：杂乱亮眼词:惊讶mess;astonished白银版：the mess in the kitchen,.Seeing;dad was quite astonished美颜句：惊讶地盯着某人star
21、e at sb in astonishment黄金版：the mess in the kitchen,.Seeing;dad stared at the kids in astonishment构思:越具体，越高级!【尾段】The next minute,the porridge boiled over and put out the fire; the stove was a mess now.; Then she caught the smell of burning; The piece of bread in the pan had turned black.钻石版：Seeing in
22、 the kitchen, dad stared atthe kids in astonishment.the burnt （烤焦的）bread and the spilled（洒了 的）porridge.转折:Jeff告诉爸爸计划，爸爸笑了，决定帮我们。备词：告诉：tell sb sth计划：plan决定帮助：decide tohelp 微笑：smile成句：基础版:When Jeff,dad.亮眼词：结巴地说亮眼词：不假思索stammer out sth;without a second thought白银版：When Jeff theirplan,dadsmiled., dad deci
23、ded to help them.美颜句：脸上闪过一丝微笑黄金版：When Jefftheir secret plan, a smile ofunderstanding dads face., dad decided to.衔接下文:我们清理了厨房，重新做好了早餐。备词：清理：clean/clean up做早餐：make breakfast重新：again成句：基础版：We cleaned up the kitchen,made breakfast for mom again.构思：越具体，越高级！孩子和爸爸分头行动：孩子们清理了厨房的杂乱，同时爸爸在做三 明治和煮粥。白银版：The kids
24、 cleaned up the messy kitchen dadwas cooking a sandwich and some porridge.亮眼词：同时亮眼词：忙于做黄金版：The kids cleaned up the messy kitchen. Dad, cooking a delicious sandwich and some porridge.构思：越连贯，越高级！钻石版：The kids cleaned up the messy kitchen. Dad,.cooking a delicious sandwich and some porridge.Soon,the del
25、icious smell of breakfast the kitchen.And dad asked the kids to their plan.Para.2:The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.双胞胎带着早餐上楼，叫醒了妈妈。L衔接上文:孩子们说:母亲节快乐，妈妈看到早餐，感动流泪。备词：母亲节：Mothers Day感动到流泪：be moved to tears成句：基础版：They said. When mom saw the breakfast,she美颜句：眼睛睁大美颜句：喜悦地眨眼白
26、银版：They said Happy Mothers Day! A big surprise for you!When mom saw the breakfast,. 亮眼词：喊美颜句：当看到.那一刻黄金版：TheyHappy Mothers Day! A big surprise for you!”.mom saw the breakfast,her.yelled;the moment;eyes widened up and twinkled with joy美颜句：每个毛孔都在兴奋着钻石版：TheyHappy Mothers Day ! A big surprise for you!”mo
27、m saw the breakfast,.2.妈妈品尝早餐,夸赞并拥抱孩子们。备词：品尝：taste夸赞:praise拥抱：hug sb./ give sb a hug成句：基础版:Shethe breakfast,the kids and.美颜句:是曾经过的最好的It was the best.sb had ever done练1:是我曾经遇到过的最好的人练2:是我曾经收到过的最好的礼物白银版：Shethe breakfast and, sayingthat.亮眼词：拥抱亮眼词：小天使黄金版:Shethe perfect sandwich as well as theporridge, saying that.