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1、续写题目Many years earlier, my mother knew that she could not send me to college and pay for it. She worked in a retail store and made just enough to pay the bills and take care of the other children at home. If I wanted to go to college, it was up to me to find out how to get there. I found that I qual
2、ified for some grants because of the size of our family, my moms income and my SAT scores. There was enough to cover school and books, but not enough for room and board. I accepted a job as part of a work-study program. While not attractive, it was one I could do. I washed dishes in the school cafet
3、eria.Just when I thought I was going to drop out of my college career, an angel appeared. Well, one of those that are on earth, without wings. “I heard that you need some help,” he said. “What do you mean?” I asked, trying to figure out which area of my life he meant. Financially, to stay in school.
4、” “Well, I make it okay. I just have trouble working all these hours and finding time to study.” “Well, I think I have a way to help you out.”He went on to explain that his grandparents needed help on the weekends. All that was required of me was cooking meals and helping them get in and out of bed
5、in the morning and evening. The job paid four hundred dollars a month, twice the money I was making washing dishes. Now I would have time to study. I went to meet his grandparents and accepted the job.My first discovery was his grandmothers great love of music. She spent hours playing her old, off-k
6、ey piano. One day, she told me I didnt have enough fun in my life and took it upon herself to teach me the art. Grandma was impressed with my ability and encouraged me to continue. Weekends in their house became more than just books and cooking, they were filled with the wonderful sounds of the out-
7、of-tune piano and two very out-of-tune singers.Paragraph 1When Christmas break came, Grandma got a chest cold, and I was afraid to leave her.Paragraph 2The envelope was from grandma who had just passed away.续写尝试Paragraph 1When Christmas break came, Grandma got a chest cold, and I was afraid to leave
8、 her.So, I decided to pay her a visit. The “angel” answered the door and led me to her bedroom where a small gaunt figure with furrowed brows lay quietly on the bed. My heart twitched. Hearing us, Grandma opened her eyes. “Honey, happy holidays! Have you packed?”, she smiled weakly. I came closer an
9、d held her hand, “I want to be with you, Grandma.” She patted my hand gently, “Dont worry dear. Your family must miss you. Go. I promise Ill see you soon.” She lied. When I received that soul-crushing phone call, suddenly, the world seemed to have lost its color until a letter found our door.Paragra
10、ph 2The envelope was from grandma who had just passed away.In it, she told me how proud she was of me and how much she loved me. Her words were like a warm embrace that enveloped me in love and comfort. As I read the letter, I could hear the sound of the old piano in the background. It was out of tu
11、ne, but it didnt matter for it was a reminder of all the wonderful times we had spent together. In a split second, I thought I saw, through my blurry eyes, Grandma sitting at the piano, her fingers moving gracefully over the keys. Then, she looked up at me and smiled. At that moment I knew, in her o
12、wn way, Grandmahad kept her promise.续写精析“The “angel” answered the door and led me to her bedroom where a small gaunt figure with furrowed brows lay quietly on the bed.”Angel应门，呼应原文称呼，衔接上句逻辑，然后紧接着把主角引到grandma的房间中。关系副词where引导的定语从句说明房间内的情况。a small gaunt figure with furrowed brows lay quietly on the bed
13、.这句话用了4处细节体现出grandma此刻的状态。small & gaunt ，病痛折磨下的祖母显得，身材弱小而面容瘦削。gaunt：牛津 very thin, usually because of illness.With furrowed brows 眉头紧锁，暗示grandma胸痛的严重，无时不刻都在疼着，所以眉关难以抚平。Lay quietly 祖母很喜欢弹钢琴，但此刻她却安静地躺在床上，进一步让读者感知grandma的状态。My heart twitched.twitch：牛津 if a part of your body twitches, or if you twitch it
14、, it makes a sudden quick movement, sometimes one that you cannot control 痉挛；抽搐；抽动进入房间，看到病卧的祖母，身形消瘦，眉头紧锁，主角的心不由自主地抽动，“祖孙”感情之深，一词足矣。Hearing us, Grandma opened her eyes. “Honey, happy holidays! Have you packed?”, she smiled weakly.Grandma这个人物我是偏爱的。正如原文中所塑造，我希望续写中能体现出她坚毅、善良、理解和睿智。尽管续写第二段提示，grandma已然离主角
15、远去，但我希望她生前身后，都能像一束温暖的光一样。所以，我的第一段，grandma听到动静醒过来，看到主角，虚弱的微笑着。虽然自己已经病重，但言语中则是对后辈的关切，“节日快乐孩子，东西收拾好了吗？”I came closer and held her hand, “I want to be with you, Grandma.”人物互动，视角流转自然。我看到grandma的情况，听到她的关心，上前握住了她的手。这个握手的动作，手的温度，温暖的是彼此的心。She patted my hand gently, “Dont worry dear. Your family must miss you
16、. Go. I promise Ill see you soon.”先握手，才能后拍手。逻辑完美，且动作进一步丰满人物形象。“别担心孩子，你的家人肯定很想你。回吧，我保证我们很快就能见面。”Grandma知道孩子心理纠结，故而温和地解开心结。grandma知道自己时日无多，但依然承诺与孩子他日相逢，给孩子希望。这是何等的爱，何等的情。She lied.一句话，两个词，读者已心领神会。至深的情感，至诚的触动，至简的表达。“她说谎了。”当一个人离开，很多时候，我们不会去思考这整件事的影响，不会听别人说，“节哀顺变”，而是紧紧揪住他没有说完的那句话，没有看成的那场电影，没能成行的那个旅程。自然也包括她没有信守的那个承诺。这一刻，爱以一种矛盾的方式体现。嘴上全是数落，却心如刀割。When I received that soul-crushing phone call, suddenly, the world seemed to have lost its color until a letter found our door.最后一句衔接第二段，须交待出信的来处。“我接到那通把我心脏绞碎的电话时，一瞬间，世界似乎失去了光彩，直到那封信找到我家门前。”那通电话，一封信。这件最伤心的事不需要宣诸于口，但主角的反应已经告知了一切。学科网（北京）股份有限公司