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1、高分作文训练语言篇一、句式要丰富多变。反复表达一个类似的意思时，应尝试用不同的句式来表达。如表达建议时，可以使用You should do sth.You could do sth.Why not do sth?What about doing sth?If I were you,I would do.,Youd better do sth.Try to do sth.这些句式可使文章变得丰富多彩。二、描写要生动、形象例如：The Chinese Pavilion-The Crown of the East-is based on the spirit of Chinese culture.J
2、ust like its name,it looks like a big crown.在介绍中国馆时，作者用了简单的一句话“它看上就些一个大的王冠，正如它的名字一样。”便把中国馆的造型形象地勾勒了出来。三、长短句结合，语言要紧凑。适当用一些并列句和复合句，避免因短句过多而显得意思分散，语言不紧凑。如中学阶段要求掌握的宾语从句、定语从句、状语从句等。但不要为了故意些长久而整篇堆砌复杂句式，而应长短句结合，急求自然。例1：I feel proud of myself.可以改为I feel proud of myself for what Ive done.例2：I hear that the W
3、orld Expo is very wonderful.I really want to visit it.可以改为：The World Expo is so wonderful that I really want to visit it.或 The World Expo is such a fantastic party that I cant miss it.四、积累高级词汇和复杂的句式结构备用。非谓语结构，包括现在分词短语，过去分词短语和不定式都是让文章更出彩的句式和结构。例1：When I saw the progress she made,I felt really proud o
4、f myself.改为：Seeing the progress she made,I felt really proud of myself.（用现在分词表示时间，语言简洁、精炼）例2：I decide to work hard from now on,because I dont want to let my parents down.改为:In order not to let my parents down,I decide to work hard from(更加醒目、有力）结构篇采用“三段式写作法”。第一段：引出话题或亮明观点（略）：一两句即可。第二段：围绕主题或者作者的观点展开（详
5、）：即对所陈述的内容，发表评论。第三段：总结全文（略）：一般是再次强调文章的中心思想，首位呼应。或是对前两段的论证得出结论，写出你的建议、希望和祝愿，两句话即可。好处：（1）帮助学生在写作过程中理清思路，将信息点写全。（2）方便老师阅卷，给阅卷老师留下好印象。提示：“三段式写作法”只是一种概括的说法，并非一定限制写成三段，可以根据需要将文章分成四段、五段均可，但要注意句子间和段落间的衔接。要使文章连贯流畅，还少不了连接词或者过度语的使用。范文 Cooking is fun Why is cooking fun?Here are two reasons.First,it is a good wa
6、y to show my love to my parents.Both my parents are very busy.So When I come back home early,Ill cook for them.After they return，we sit together and enjoy the meal.I can see them smile happily.Second,it is a kind of creation.I always try to cook different dishes.When my new dish is praised by others
7、,I feel proud.l like cooking.It brings me a lot of fun.立意篇文章尽力做到构思、立意或新颖独到或深刻精辟。有时简单的一个词或者一句话便可把整篇文章的主题升华，令人印象深刻。例1：一位学生在如何更好地利用我们的业余时间时这样写道：To solve this problem,here are my suggestions.First of all,its necessay for us to make a plan of what I can do and then try to follow it.we really should stop
8、watching stupid TV programs and read more books.Besides,why not do some sports to make ourselves stronger?Another choice is to help our parents with the housework to improve our basic life skills.对于这个问题，大部分学生想到的都是看书、做运动等，但是这个学生却另辟蹊径，提出我们应该利用业余时间帮助父母做家务，这样不但分担了父母的负担，而且还锻炼了自己的生活技能，让人眼前一亮。作文常用连接词语转折：bu
9、t,yet,however,though,although,时间，顺序：first,second,next,and,then,after that,finally.firstly,secondly,finally(last but not least)at the same time,from now on,in the end,at last递进：besides,also,in addition,also,not only.but also,whats more解释：1.in other words 2.or 3.That is to say.因果：because,because of,th
10、erefore,so,as a result,thus例举：such as,like,for example,and so on,肯定：of course,certainly,对照：1.instead 2.instead of 3.On the contrary.总结：1.Generally speaking.2.To tell you the truth.3 Believe it or not.4.All in all.5 In a word.6.On the whole.7.For these reasons.8.That is why.9.As we all know.=As is kn
11、own to us转换话题：1.In my opinion.2.In fact.3.By the way.4.I am afraid.2011年河南中考刘伟，无臂钢琴演奏者。他十岁时在一次意外中失去双臂，但他从没有放弃成为一名钢琴家的梦想。经过刻苦用脚练习弹琴，他最终在“中国达人秀”的舞台上实现了自己的梦想。请根据以上内容写一篇英文短文。要求：1.简要描述刘伟的经历；2.谈谈从他的经历中得到的启示；3.词数80词左右。错误分析（1）内容只有经历描述，没有感悟或启示；有经历描述，但感悟或启示太少，只有一两句，不全面。有经历描述和启示，但启示不合情理，如认为Liu是个幸运的男孩儿，或庆幸自己是个幸
12、运的人，身体健康，或者作为一个健康的人我们要去帮助别人，不应该打电子游戏等。经历描述不完整。（2）结构层次直接就说启示，然后再去描述经历；经历和启示混淆在一起，结构混乱，层次不清。（3）语言表达时态经历用一般现在时，感悟或启示用一般过去时；过去完成时或现在完成时代替过去时；同一层次的内容前后时态不一致。介词play the piano by feet/footby Chinas Got Talentby an accident人称第二人称；前后不一致。Dont give up.Believe myself I can do it.表达方式come true/finish/come up/put
13、 up/get up ones dream;achieve ones dream by hard working/He was hard work/after a long time hard working;at ten years old从句（连词）He didnt give up his dream that becoming/to be a piano player;AlthoughbutWhatever it happened,we shouldnt give up;Liu Wei told us what should we do;He took part in the China
14、s Got Talent,he achieved his dream;Most of his friends thought he will be sad.汉式表达法He didnt give up becoming piano player dream;He tells me we need a happy heart;He work hard with his feet play the piano.词汇He works real hard/he was hard in order to achieve his dream/a hard man;We will success one da
15、y/he was successed/I will be succeed/he was succeeded;I think we should be happy when we are difficult in life;Lius special experience give me some confident;He joined the Chinas Got Talent;I cant think that the person lost the arms;句式、句型和语态Practice play the piano;His dream was came true;I shouldnt
16、give up to do anything;Everyone should remember,never give up your dream;He never afraid difficult;He made his dream came true单词拼写、动词单三/过去式及名词复数变化形式Gived/losed/hurtedHe got seriously hurt and lost his arms at the age of ten,but he didnt lose hope.He tried his best to make his dream of being a pianis
17、t come true,so he practiced playing the piano with his feet.He got a chance of playing the piano on the stage of Chinas Got Talent,and his dream finally came true.Nothing is difficult if you put your heart into it.Liu Wei is an inspiration to us all.Ive learned a lot from him and I think we should b
18、e brave and positive no matter what happens in our lives.With our efforts,we are sure to succeed.1515分作文欣赏分作文欣赏 Reading is fun I like reading best because its fun and I can enjoy myself and learn a lot of things.When I was a child,my father bought me an interesting book named The World of Science.Fr
19、om this nice book,I have learned a lot of things about our world.Its fun,isnt it?And when I was 13,my uncle bought me a book named Harry Potter.It was very exciting.I read it more than 10 times.Most of my classmates love playing computer games or watching TV,but in my eyes,the most interesting thing
20、 is reading a great book.中考英语作文十大常见错误分析俗话说“千里之行始于足下”。英语作文能力的形成不是一日之功，必须从平时的课堂学习一点一滴抓起，持之以恒。一篇优秀的英语作文在内容和语言两方面应是一个统一体，任何一方面的欠缺都会直接影响到作文的质量。然而，很多考生在写作中或者由于粗心大意，或者由于基本功不扎实而经常出现名词不变复数、第三人称单数不加s，前后不一致，以及时态语态、句子完整性等方面的错误。1.审题不清依据作文的评分原则，若文章内容不切题，则不管语言如何规范、用词如何准确，都会被判为零分。例如:一篇以“我的健康饮食”为标题的文章学生如果写成了以某种菜的做法或
21、感谢妈妈为他每天做饭的文章,不管用词多么恰当,语言多么感人,都不能获得高分.所以写作文之前要先审题,最好列出提纲.做到要写什么一目了然.2.拼写错误 拼写是考生应该具备的最起码的基本功，但在考生的作文中却经常能发现很多拼写错误.有大量拼写错误存在的作文不仅体现出语言基本功差，同时也直接影响内容的表达，会降低作文的档次。常出现的拼写错误的单词很多同学都有共性,在平时的训练中可强调,尽量减少此类错误.3.名词单复数问题：单复数的错误产生原因有的是因为语法问题,例如临近原则问题,可数名词和不可数名词分不清.还有的是不认真马虎造成的.误 My father and my mother is all t
22、eacher.正 My father and my mother are both teachers.4.缺少动词在汉语中没有动词的句子是允许的，但英语中每个完整的句子都必须有动词来构成，如：“我累了。”这个句子没有动词作谓语，而用形容词，但英语形容词不能作谓语，一定要写成：Im tired.误 I happy I can come to Beijing Zoo.正 I am happy I can come to Beijing Zoo.误 The apples cheap.Ill take some.正 The apples are cheap.Ill take some.5.缺少介词、冠
23、词等 还有一些考生因为没有熟练掌握介词或者冠词的用法，不了解中英文语言习惯的不同，也会出现明显的错误，造成丢分现象。误 Because heavy rain we cant hold the sports meeting.正 Because of the heavy rain we cant hold the sports meeting.6.代词的误用 英语中代词的形式很多，包括主格、宾格、物主代词、反身代词等。而汉语中没有主格和宾格、形容词性物主代词和名次性物主代词之分；此外汉语中很多时候不用物主代词，而英语中物主代词是不可省略的，代词的误用是考生最容易发生的错误。误 I mother a
24、nd I went to the shop to buy a present for I father.正 My mother and I went to the shop to buy a present for my father.7.句子不完整 有的考生因为对句子结构认识模糊，所以出现只写半句的现象，这也是造成失分的原因之一。误 Many students have a hard time passing all the tests to get into college.For example,my friend in high school.(这段文章的第二句话没有动词，他不能独立构
25、成一个句子。这是一个非常常见的错误，修改的方法是将两个句子连接起来。)正 Many students have a hard time passing all the tests to get into college,for example,my friend in high school.8.前后不一致 所谓不一致，包括数的不一致、时态不一致及代词不一致、主谓不一致等.例1.When one have knowledge,he can do what he want to do.(人一旦有了知识，他就能想干什么就干什么.)剖析：one是单数第三人称，因而本句的have应改为has;同理，want应改为wants。本句是典型的主谓不一致.改为 When one has knowledge,he can do what he wants(to do)9.时态、人称和数的搭配错误 汉语动词无时态、人称和数的变化，而对英语来说，这些都至关重要。例：误 When I get to the station the train leave.正 When I got to the station the train had left.10.综合性错误：综合性错误是指单词的大小写以及形容词和副词的混淆、连词的误用等等。