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1、Continuation writingContinuation writing读后续写什么是读后续写?什么是读后续写?提供一篇350词左右的材料(一般是记叙文,且以事件发生的时间为序),短文中会将10个关键词画下划线。根据该材料的内容情节等将其发展为一篇150词左右的逻辑合理情节完整的短文。需要续写两个段落且要用到至少5个关键词,每个段落都给出了第一句。【2018浙江高考真题】It was summer,and mydadwanted to treat me to a vacation like never before.He decided totake me on a trip to t
2、he Wild West.We took a plane to Albuquerque,a big city in the state of NewMexico.We reachedAlbuquerque in the late afternoon.UnclePaul,my dadsfriend,pickedus up from the airport anddrove us up to his farm in Pecos.His wife Tina cookedus a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle.My
3、 dadand I spent the night in the guestroom of thefarm houselistening to the frogs and water rolling downtherivernearby.Very early in the morning,Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast.“The daystarts at dawn on my farm,”he said.After breakfast,I went to help Aunt Tinafeedthe chickens,while my dad we
4、nt with Uncle Paul to take thesheepout tograze(吃草).I was impressed to seemy dad and Uncle Paul riding horses.They lookedreally cool.In the afternoon,I asked UnclePaul if I could take a horse ride,and he said yes,as long asmy dad went with me.I wasnt going to take a horse ride by myself anyway.So,my
5、dad and I puton our new cowboy hats,got on our horses,and headed slowly towards the mountains.“Dont belatefor supper,”Uncle Paulcried,“and keep to thetrackso that you dontget lost!”“OK!”mydadcried back.After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out ofsight.It was so peacefulandquiet and the co
6、lors of the brownrocks,the deep green pinetrees,and the late afternoon sunmixed to create a magic scene.It looked like a beautifulwoven(编织的)blanket spread out uponthe ground just for us.【答题时需注意】1.所续写短文的词数应为l50左右;2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1Suddenly
7、alittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse._Paragraph2Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark._读后续写考查什么?读后续写考查什么?核心素养:语言能力:阅读和写作思维品质:想象能力和创新精神具体说来,应该是这四个方面把握短文关键信息和语言特点的能力语言运用的准确性和丰富性对语篇结构的把控能力创造新思维能力评评分分标标准准得分要素:与所给短文及段落开头与的衔接程度内容的丰富性和对所给关键词语的覆盖情况应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性上下文的连贯性扣分标准:总分25分,按五个档次给分根据内容及语言初步定档词数少于130的
8、,扣2分单词拼写及标点符号使用情况,视其对交际的影响程度酌情处理书写较差以至于影响交际,可酌情降低评分档次评分细则评分细则评分档次第一条第二条第三条第四条第五档(21-25分)与所给短文融合度高,与所提供的各段落开头语衔接合理。内容丰富,应用了五个以上短文中标出的关键词语。所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确,可能有些许错误,但完全不影响意义表达。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使所续写的短文结构紧凑。第四档(16-20分)与所给短文融合度较高,与所提供的 各段落开头语衔接较为合理。内容比较丰富,应用了五个以上短文中标出的关键词语。所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确,可能有些许错误,但不影响意义表达。
9、比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使所续写的短文结构紧凑。第三档(11-15分)与所给短文关系较为密切,与所提供的 各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。写出了若干有关内容,应用了四个以上短文中标出的关键词语。应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求,虽有一些错误,但不影响意义表达。应用简单的语句间连接成分,使全文内容连贯。第二档(6-10分)与所给短文有一定的关系,与所提供的各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接写出了一些有关内容,应用了3个以上短文中标出的关键词语语法结构单调,词汇项目有限,有些语法结构和词汇方面的错误,影响了意义的表达。较少使用语句间的连接成分,全文内容缺少连贯性。第一档(1-5分)与所提供的
10、短文和开头语的衔接较差。产出内容较少,很少使用短文中标出的关键词语。语法结构单调,词汇项目有限,有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误,严重影响了意义的表达。缺乏语句间的连接成分,全文内容连贯。与原文与原文剧情融洽,情融洽,逻辑合理合理续写内容丰富有写内容丰富有看点,用了关看点,用了关键词语法法结构和构和词汇多多样准确准确语句句间衔接自然,接自然,结构构紧凑凑解题思路解题思路搞清原文搞清原文剧情情回扣原文,回扣原文,结合段首合段首句确定句确定剧情走向情走向融入关融入关键词,想象,想象细节拟写写草稿草稿丰富丰富细节,润色色Step 1 精读文章,搞清思路It was summer,and mydadwa
11、nted to treat me to a vacation like never before.He decided totake me on a trip to the Wild West.We took a plane to Albuquerque,a big city in the state of NewMexico.We reachedAlbuquerque in the late afternoon.UnclePaul,my dadsfriend,pickedus up from the airport anddrove us up to his farm in Pecos.Hi
12、s wife Tina cookedus a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle.My dadand I spent the night in the guestroom of thefarm houselistening to the frogs and water rolling downtherivernearby.Very early in the morning,Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast.“The daystarts at dawn on my fa
13、rm,”he said.After breakfast,I went to help Aunt Tinafeedthe chickens,while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take thesheepout tograze(吃草).I was impressed to seemy dad and Uncle Paul riding horses.They lookedreally cool.In the afternoon,I asked UnclePaul if I could take a horse ride,and he said yes,as l
14、ong asmy dad went with me.I wasnt going to take a horse ride by myself anyway.So,my dad and I puton our new cowboy hats,got on our horses,and headed slowly towards the mountains.“Dont belatefor supper,”Uncle Paulcried,“and keep to thetrackso that you dontget lost!”“OK!”mydadcried back.After a while
15、Uncle Paul and his farm house were out ofsight.It was so peacefulandquiet and the colors of the brownrocks,the deep green pinetrees,and the late afternoon sunmixed to create a magic scene.It looked like a beautifulwoven(编织的)blanket spread out uponthe ground just for us.暑假父父亲亲带我去西部叔叔叔叔的农场度假我们在农场农场听着蛙
16、鸣和河水河水声入睡早上我帮忙喂喂鸡,父亲和叔叔骑马放羊羊我很羡慕,于是和父亲去骑马他们叮嘱晚餐别迟迟到到,沿着路路走能不迷路迷路我们骑马就走走远远了,风景很美feedthe chickensRiversheeptrackUnclePaul,farm houseDont be late for supper!My dad剧情需要前后照情需要前后照应形成形成闭环,否,否则很很难用上关用上关键词。可遵循可遵循时间顺序,地点序,地点顺序,序,逻辑顺序等序等设计剧情。情。不建不建议的的剧情:情:追兔子迷路,追兔子迷路,进入迷入迷宫发现宝藏(扯太宝藏(扯太远了回不来)了回不来)追兔子迷路,森林里乱追兔子迷
17、路,森林里乱窜结果碰到了家或熟人或救援果碰到了家或熟人或救援队,安全返回(安全返回(强行行结尾,无尾,无逻辑)追兔子迷路,晚上点燃火柴,追兔子迷路,晚上点燃火柴,烛光中看到了温暖的家光中看到了温暖的家(悲(悲剧结尾)尾)Step 2 回扣原文,设计剧情Suddenly a little rabbitjumped out in front ofmyhorse._Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark._Step 3 Step 3 拟写草稿,用上关键词拟写草稿,用上关键词怎样让记叙文生动起来呢?动作描写2-5个环境描写1-2个对话1-2个表情或心理1-2个已给提示词汇
18、:dad,Uncle Paul,farm house,river,feed,sheep,late,track,get lost,sight话题激活词汇:情感:panic,relief,nervous,worried动作:run,cry,think to oneself环境:scenery,mountain,range,valley,river,lake,forest,sun,set,wind,blowSuddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.(已给出)Dad and I found it was so cute that
19、we decided to run after it.After a while,we were completely lost in the forest.There was nothing left in our sight but the trees.“We may not be able to make it back to the farm house in time for supper.”I thought to myself.After a series of useless attempts to find a way out,we felt hungry and tired
20、.动作一动作三+心情对话(内心独白)动作二环境描写We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark.We got stuck in the forest.And an unexpected shower added to the difficulty of us in finding a way home,for all the tracks we had made disappeared because of the rain.I was almost breaking down when my father said,“Dont wo
21、rry,my son.I remember there is a river near the farm house.Find the river and we will be back home.”Finally,we found the river and got back to the house along it.Needless to say,we ate a late dinner.动作一环境对话,转折(高潮)动作(结局)怎样提高与原文的融合度呢?1.人物性格和关系保持一致。2.语言风格保持一致(如景物描写,对话)。3.剧情发展符合逻辑,符合常识,且在前文能找到铺垫。Step 4 润色,标出关键词润色包括连接词的使用、句型和词汇的升级替换标出关键词(下划线,题型要求。在使用关键词语时根据时态和语态的需要,可以改变动词的形式,可以改变名词的单复数,但不要改变关键词语在原文中的含义和词性。)Thank you!Bye!