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1、应用文写作练习之回信 讲义假定你是李华，你的朋友Paul邀请你下个星期天去他们学校参加文化交流活动并介绍中国传统音乐，但是你的爷爷生病住院，不得不谢绝他的邀请。请根据下面的要点给Paul用英语写一封词数为100左右的回信。要点如下：1.谢绝Paul 的邀请并说明你的理由；2.推荐你的同学Anna参加。注意：1.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；2.信的开头和结尾已写好，但不计入总词数。Dear Paul，Thank you very much for your invitation._ _Sorry again for any inconvenience and hope you can suc
2、ceed in holding the activity.Yours，Li Hua写作具体要求（一）内容要点1.谢绝Paul的邀请；2.交代不能参加的原因；3.推荐同学Anna代替自己参加；4.介绍Anna的长处，说明能够参加的理由。（二）应用词汇和语法结构的情况1. 使用与主题相关的词汇；2. 能够使用恰当的语法结构。（三）上下文的连贯性按照内容要点展开写作，使用恰当的连接词或表达法使文章内容连贯。 参考范文Dear Paul，Thank you very much for your invitation. Id love to accept it and take this opportu
3、nity to introduce traditional Chinese music to your friends， but Im sorry to inform you that I wont be able to make it. My grandpa is seriously ill in hospital and I should stay with him and look after him. As for the introduction speech， I strongly recommend my friend Anna， who is the most suitable
4、 person to take my place next Sunday. She began to learn music at an early age and has a broad knowledge of traditional Chinese music. With her active personality and perfect spoken English， she will make your activity a success.Sorry again for the inconvenience and wish you great success in the act
5、ivity.Yours，Li Hua 习作点评学生习作1Dear Paul，Thank you very much for your invitation. Im grateful that you remember Im fond of traditional music and invited me to take part in the cultural communication activity. However， my grandfather was badly ill in hospital and I have to visit him and help look after
6、him next Sunday. Im sorry I cant come.But I think my classmate Anna is able to replace me to join in the activity. She also loves traditional culture and has some understandings on classical Chinese music. Besides， Anna is an active and easy-going girl. You can give her an opportunity to show hersel
7、f and introduce traditional Chinese music to the students of your school. She will not only talk about her points in Chinese culture， but also take some results we discussed at ordinary time. Anna is suitable to take part in the activity.Sorry again for any inconvenience and hope you can succeed in
8、holding the activity.Yours，Li Hua点评1首先，该生习作覆盖了所有内容要点，文章的衔接与语言表达也比较通顺流畅，但是文章的出彩点太少，语言表达太简单化。综观全文，文章的句型以简单句为主，缺乏句型的多样性。在词汇使用上，文章还基本停留在初中层面，缺乏亮点词。在文章结构上，考生将文章分成三段：第一段谢绝Paul 的邀请，并说明了由于爷爷生病要照顾而不能赴约的理由；第二段推荐同学Anna，罗列了她的一些强项，比较详细；第三段结尾部分用礼貌的语言再次致歉和祝愿。该作文建议给9分。学生习作2Dear Paul，Thank you very much for your inv
9、itation.Having heard the news that your school is hosting a conference about culture next Sunday， my enthusiasm gradually increases. I extraordinarily appreciate your invitation for my speech about traditional music which Ive been always obsessed in. Id like to do so and sure will I spare no time to
10、 do it at other time， this time， however， because of my grandfathers illness， I cant make it work， for its my responsibility to look after him for his great devotion towards me back in those days. Hear， Id like to express my sincere sorry about that.As someone puts， “Once a problem arises， a solutio
11、n comes behind.” I happened to have a close friend Anna， who is also fond of traditional music and is very tactful with her wonderful spoken English. As a point of mine， you may as well invite her to give the speech. I would send her telephone number to you， if you need.Sorry again for any inconveni
12、ence and hope you can succeed in holding the activity.Yours，Li Hua点评2首先，文章最大的亮点在于高级词句的使用。如：（一）“Having heard the news that your school is hosting a conference about culture next Sunday， my enthusiasm gradually increases.”该句在句首使用了非谓语动词，用作原因状語，该句式就比because引导原因状语从句更为精彩。（二）高级词汇的使用体现了词汇的丰富性，如：extraordinar
13、ily；enthusiasm；obsessed；tactful等。（三）句与句之间衔接得非常合乎逻辑，尽管看不到一个关联词。然而，文章的不足之处也很明显。如：conference用得不合场景；hear应该改成here等。因而本篇文章定在第五档，得14分比较合适。学生习作3Dear Paul，Thank you very much for your invitation. I am fond of music， especially graceful and pop music. So， I was really excited when receiving your invitation fo
14、r the activities of Chinese traditional music. I believe that I will enjoy myself and learn something new if I attend it. But unfortunately， I cant， for my grandpa is badly ill in hospital， my company is really needed for him now， and Im worried about him. So I dont think I will go to your school th
15、at day. Im genuinely sorry for that.But dont worry， there is a girl who is a fan of Chinese traditional music， her name is Anna. For her， this activity is like the heaven. Although I cant join in it in person， I can look through the pictures she takes and listen to her talking about the things and d
16、etails of the activity. I believe I will enjoy it.Sorry again for any inconvenience and hope you can succeed in holding the activity.Yours，Li Hua点评3该作文最大的特色就是语言断句特别得当，特别是第一段；用词的地道性是该文的第二大特点，比如，“my company is really needed for him now.”中的company使用自然，增添了文章的色彩。然而，最大的句式错误也是在该句中。由于主语I与主语company是不同的，因此前后两
17、句话之间应该加上连词，可以改成“But unfortunately， I cant， for my grandpa is badly ill in hospital， so my company is really needed for him now.”。总体而言，此文在用词的丰富性上还有所欠缺；某些语言表达偏向口语化。建议给1213分。学生习作4Dear Paul，Thank you very much for your invitation. Its my honor to take part in the activity that will be held in your schoo
18、l. Id like to join in the discussion， which is about culture and traditional music， but Im sorry I cant go， for my grandfather has been ill. What a pity！However， my classmate， Anna， who is fond of traditional culture， will be free net Sunday. I told her about your invitation. She was too excited to
19、say a word after hearing that. She expressed that she would appreciate it greatly if you allowed her to come. Therefore， I hope that you can take her into consideration. Im sure she wont let you down when it comes to her， Ill tell you that she has been crazy about everything to do with traditional c
20、ulture since she was young. As a result， she is good in this way. And at school， she always communicates with others， so she is good at expressing as well. In short， for me， she is the best choice who I can introduce to you.Sorry again for any inconvenience and hope you can succeed in holding the ac
21、tivity.Yours，Li Hua点评4首先，文章最大的亮点在于句式的多样性与长句的写作。在首段，作者恰到好处地使用了“Its my honor to.”的礼貌句式，并且使用了一句层次丰富的长句：“Id like to， which， but， for.”。这两句话在开头段就先声夺人，展现出作者扎实的英语表达技能。除了句式，在词汇上，作者也使用了不少精彩词汇，例如appreciate， tooto， let sb down等等。总体来说，这篇文章是语言精彩、要点完善的一篇佳作。故建议给13分。学生习作5Dear Paul，Thank you very much for your invit
22、ation. Id like to visit your school and attend the culture communicate activity to introduce traditional Chinese music， for I really like your school and want to form a close friendship with you. However， Im afraid that I cannot come to attend， for my grandpa is ill in hospital so that I am concerne
23、d about him and need to take care of him.There is another choice for you that my friend， Anna， who is also interested in traditional Chinese music， can visit your school for me. She knows well about Chinese culture， Im sure you can learn a lot about our culture for shes willing to communicate with y
24、ou. I hope youll have a great time with her.Sorry again for any inconvenience and I hope you can succeed in holding the activity.Yours，Li Hua点评5该作文在语言丰富性，尤其是句式丰富性方面做得十分突出。在首段中，作者就使用了一句长句：“Id like to visit your school and attend the culture communicate activity to introduce traditional Chinese music，
25、 for I really like your school and want to form a close friendship with you.”该句中，作者巧用连词for，使句子长度、句子意思丰富度都加强了。在第二段首句中，作者将定语从句和there be句型结合到一起，构成了长句。建议给11分。学生习作6Dear Paul，Thank you very much for your invitation. The activity sounds great. But Im afraid I cant attend to. My grandfather is ill and I hav
26、e to take care of him in the hospital. Ill stay in the hospital on Sunday， so I have no time to join in your activity.Even though， you can invite my classmate Anna instead. She is interested in Chinese culture and she is best at Chinese traditional music. I think she will make a wonderful speech abo
27、ut that. Besides， she likes joining in all kinds of clubs and activities. I promise that she will accept your invitation. If you want to invite her， Ill give you her phone numbers.Sorry again for any inconvenience and I hope you can succeed in holding the activity.Yours，Li Hua点评6该作文的写信目的一目了然：由于爷爷住院，李华没有时间去参加活动，而后推荐Anna参加这次活动，并介绍中国传统音乐。在阐述Anna的时候，谈到了Anna对中国传统音乐有浓厚兴趣以及积极参加各类活动，具有实战经验，基本达到了写作的目的。语言上attend用法有误，因为attend的搭配是attend a meeting； attend a conference； attend church； attend school； attend a course； attend a wedding； attend a funeral等；而attend to 这个短语的意思是“照顾”，意思不对。建议给12分。学科网（北京）股份有限公司