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1、-A* b *Hdi哄后敌耳际题阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。The Turning PointI used to be a cold-hearted individual who lived in nothing but a world of my own. Unexpectedly, there was a time in my life when everything changed. Sunshine suddenly arose from my heart, opening its door to a new world where I w
2、as the key in helping those in need of a hand.I was a freshman in high school when I stepped in our local nursing home, complaining about having to volunteer there on weekends because my mom had asked me to. Anyway, when I pulled into the parking lot, I realized how different the place was. It was n
3、ice and clean with elders everywhere. As I checked in at the front desk for my first service hours, I received a stream of greetings from the surrounding people. It felt as good as breathing in love, which filled me with sudden warmth.Shelby, the lady in charge of community service, assigned me to w
4、atch for the elder in room 111. My job was to help with anything she needed. At first I thought this was the beginning of a nightmare, but it turned out to be something completely different.After listening to Shelbys instructions, I walked toward my destination and knocked softly at the door, asking
5、 if I could come in. A voice came from inside answering yes. I stepped inside and introduced myself, with an explanation of why I was there. Meanwhile, I took a look around. The white walls were almost covered in picture frames. I could tell from the pictures she must have been a teacher before. Whi
6、le I was looking around, she introduced herself as Marie Brown, going to be 80 in two months. Her face marked by wrinkles of wisdom could really tell me her life story.“So youve been here for a while?” I asked. For a minute it was all silent, and then she answered yes with a very sad voice, adding t
7、hat she had no family. Realizing I had asked the wrong question, I felt bad, for the first time, for hurting someones feelings, especially this lonely elders.注意：1 .续写词数应为150左右；.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph 1:Seeing my embarrassment, Marie smiled at me and signed to me to sit by her. Paragraph 2:Touch
8、ed by her stories, I determined to give Marie care, company and even surprises.写作思路分析本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者曾经是一个冷血的人，只活在自己的世界里。 有一次作者在妈妈的要求下周末去当地养老院做志愿者，认识了一个名叫Marie Brown 的老人，她没有家人。作者在和Marie相处的过程中，和她建立了友谊，改变了自己。由第一段首句内容“看到我的尴尬，Marie对我笑了笑，示意我坐在她旁边。以及 由第二段首句内容“被她的故事感动了，我决定照顾Marie,陪伴她，甚至给她惊喜。 可知，第一段可描写作者和Ma
9、rie相处的经过，以及Marie讲述自己的过去。第二段 可描写作者怎样陪伴Marie,怎样给Marie惊喜。Marie的心情，我的感悟。Para 1:Seeinq myMarie smiled at me and signed t。me to sit by her. Saying softly, Never mind, Ive been used to it,“ she patted me on the arm, attempting to cheer me up. Learning I was in high school, Marie was lost in thought and sta
10、rted to talk about her old days as a teacher, from which I could sense her deep love for her students. Then she showed the pictures hanging on the walls, excitedly sharing her stories concerning her students and proudly introducing what each of them was up to.Para 2:Touched by her stories, I determi
11、ned t。qive Marie care, compoay and ever? surprises. Id call on Marie, chatting with her and doing everything I could for her. On her 80th birthday, with the help of Shelby and other elders, I held a grand party and managed to invite some of her students to come. When I accompanied Marie into the par
12、ty, all present rose, clapping smilingly and wishing her happy birthday. The big surprise brought excited tears to her eyes, her wrinkled face glowing with happiness. Bathed in the heart-warming atmosphere, I felt so delighted to have lit up an old teacher/s life and made a difference to her.读后续写素材积
13、累与拓展一一极限运动Skiing通过课程中所学的续写技能请用45句话续写一个微场景描写“我在高 山滑雪时意外摔倒的场面。A blast of adrenaline（N.肾上腺素）charged（V.充电）throughout my body as I experienced the initial drop, （as 引导时间状语从句）翻译：在我经历第一个下落时，我的肾上腺素瞬间贯穿了我身体每一个角 落.（整体句式结构由as引导时间状语从句，这里用到了一个医学类词汇，一 般Ph川是很少在课堂上让学生使用医学类词汇的，因为以高考的情况而言，第 一必要性不大，其二，医学类词汇基本出现都是标注词.但
14、这个词真的很好用， 可以说背一个它，省了很多事.因为续写中基本情感都是起伏较大的，兴奋激动、 惊吓恐慌等，都可以用到：A blast of adrenaline charged throughout my body； 所以推荐给你）After overcompensating（V.过度补偿）from a nearly disastrous（Adj.糟糕 的）slip（N.滑倒），1 lost my balance , my knees buckling helplessly.（独立主格结 构）翻译：在差点摔倒之后，我失去了平衡感，我的膝盖开始不由自主地发软.My left hand plowe
15、d（V.耕地；犁地-深深扎进）forcefully into ice, cracking（V.僻啪作响）painfully at the wrist.（分词做状语）翻译：我的左手狠狠地扎进了雪地里，手腕因为剧烈冲撞发出了响亮的摩 擦声.（进一步对于动作进行刻画，通过“plow”一词，形象生动地体现出手与雪 之间的摩擦和状态、叠加副词forcefully”的修饰体现摔倒的不可控和严重、而 动词“cracked”是一个拟声词，该词的使用让人物在整体动作刻画上，拥有了 视觉和声感的双重冲击，更好体现出了摔倒的程度和人物状态.）For an eternity of 30 seconds, my bod
16、y somersaulted downward, moguls of ice toying with my head and further agonizing（V 折磨）my broken wrist.（独 立主格结构一一构建自身状态、叠加拟人修辞）（MFor an eternity of 30 seconds*是一种夸张的体现，通过eternity 无穷 无尽的一词，体现出30秒过程的痛苦与煎熬.将片刻瞬时，通过自身内心感 受放大至永恒的程度.而在续写中，适当地放出时间状语，也能更好地体现故 事清晰结构性；此外本句中通过somersault翻筋斗”toy with玩 弄 “agonize挣扎;折磨一系列得当的动词选取，进一步体现当下的险境及情况 的糟糕 例如toy with这个短语，玩弄的释义，更是运用拟人，体现作者在摔 倒后的崩溃）Confused and desperate , I detached my ski , stood up, and attempted climbing the mountain , however, I lost another 25 feet to the force of gravity.（形容词做状语+三谓语动词并列）翻译：在困惑和绝望中，我卸下了雪橇，站了起来，我试图爬上山，但由 于重力的作用，我又一次摔了下去近25英尺.