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1、书面表达2021/8/9 星期一1n n按照以下要点写一篇英语短文n n1、独立完成：自行安排、自己解决问题。n n2、合作完成：一起讨论、互相学习。n n3、我喜欢的方式及理由。n n注意：词数：100-120审题审题2021/8/9 星期一2n n There are basically two ways to get work done.One is to work individually.In this way,people can decide for themselves and how to do it.Whats more,they will be able to learn
2、 how to solve problems on their own.(33 words)自行安排、自己解决问题自行安排、自己解决问题加工、添加信息范文分析范文分析2021/8/9 星期一3n n People may also choose to work in a team,where they can learn from each other and help each other.Besides,they may work out better ways to get work done by discussion.(33 words)一起讨论、互相学习一起讨论、互相学习可以考虑调
3、可以考虑调整信息整信息2021/8/9 星期一4n n Personally,I prefer to work in a tea,which offers me a chance to learn how to get along with others and to share my experiences with them.As the work can be divided among several people,it can be done efficiently.Teamwork is always important.(46 words)开放的思维；巧妙的因果关系表述开放的思维
4、；巧妙的因果关系表述有跟没一样吗？2021/8/9 星期一5n nIndividuals together make a difference.Individuals together make a difference.（林静）（林静）n nWorking together,individuals make a difference.(Working together,individuals make a difference.(王丽芬王丽芬)n nWorking in a team can improve my social skills Working in a team can imp
5、rove my social skills very muchvery much.（陈敏）（陈敏）n nWe can be more sociable.We can be more sociable.（封雅虹）（封雅虹）n nExchanging ideas inspires members to come up with new Exchanging ideas inspires members to come up with new and better approaches to solving the problem.and better approaches to solving t
6、he problem.（余雪芳）（余雪芳）n nWhen discussing with others,we When discussing with others,we cant help wastingcant help wasting time by time by sayingsaying something unnecessary,which may lead to the failure something unnecessary,which may lead to the failure in finishing the work in time.in finishing the
7、 work in time.（陈荣高）（陈荣高）好句赏析好句赏析一句话表述一个核心意思2021/8/9 星期一6n nIn my opinion,working in a team is the better of the two.As we know,human beings are social animals.We are connected to others whatever we do.Also,working with other people can gain experience.Whats more,they may also pick out our mistakes s
8、o that we can get them corrected in time.You see,we live together,and we shall work together.好段赏析好段赏析1有什么问题?指代清楚吗?2021/8/9 星期一7n nIn my opinion,I prefer the second one.With the help of our workmates,we can solve most of the problems that cant be solved ourselves.Besides,working in a team can improve
9、 the friendship among every members in the team.The most important is that it makes me know how to share my ideas with each other.好段赏析好段赏析22021/8/9 星期一8n nWorking in a team,you can do the things together with your friends.You can discuss the questions together.Everyone makes a difference.Everything
10、will be easier.And during the time,you can learn good things from each other.Whats more,it can make your friendship better.Youll be happy.The life will be more wonderful.1、句子之间结构松散,层次不够明确问题分析问题分析2021/8/9 星期一92、句子缺乏变化、句子缺乏变化n nWorking out questions and planning something by yourself are called workin
11、g individually.Discussing together and learning from each other are called working in a team.（修改）n nWorking out questions and planning something by yourself are called working individually.Working in a team is another way of working,which means discussing together and learning from each other.2021/8
12、/9 星期一103、句子拖沓、句子拖沓n nAs we know,we are all a part of our class or company,when we work in a team,we may make the class or the company better,and we will get more ways to get our work done so that we can choose the best way to get our work done.（修改）n nAs we know,we are all a part of our class or com
13、pany,and when we work in a team,we may make the class or the company better.Also we will get more ways to get our work done so that we can choose the best way to get our work done.一句话表述一个核心意思2021/8/9 星期一11n nIn my opinion,I like working in a team better.Not only because it can succeed more easily an
14、d help develop our skills but also can n nThough thinking independently can develop our ability of thinking better,I think that team work is more useful and important today.Because it is a world with fast pace nowadays,collecting information and sharing information with your fellow really increase y
15、our working rate and make sure that your work is more possible to be perfect.4、逻辑错误(主谓；句子之间)2021/8/9 星期一12清楚的逻辑关系才能准确表达思清楚的逻辑关系才能准确表达思想想n nAs a result of not being able to concentrate my mind when being surrounded by others,working in a team is not so reasonable for me.n nBut working in team is also
16、 a good way,it can help you learn from each other.Discussing with your team member is also very helpful.n nAs a member of a class or a company or the society,you are not alone,you dont have the ability to overcome every difficult facing you.?2021/8/9 星期一13n nThe other is working in a team,however,it
17、s quite different from the first one.(修改)n nThe other is working in a team,which is quite different from the first one.n nOne is working individually,the other is working in a team.(修改)n nOne is working individually,and the other is working in a team.连（接）词误用或缺连词5、其他问题?2021/8/9 星期一14n nEvery student
18、will go to the society,and working in a team can improve your ability of communicating with others.Whats more,you may feel happier with many friends around you.n n n nComparing the two way,Id prefer the second.In my opinion,firstly,n nIn my opinion,though sometimes I prefer to work alone,I think wor
19、king in a team is the better way.人称混乱话语重复?2021/8/9 星期一15n nWe cant plan everything very well without other peoples help.n nThe more people your team has,the more ideas you will have.n nThough they are opposite opinions on finishing working,they have different characteristics and different advantages.观点太过绝对指代不明确2021/8/9 星期一16课堂小结课堂小结n n语言能力语言能力和和思维能力思维能力同步发展。同步发展。n n用对、用好词；写好句。用对、用好词；写好句。n n逻辑思维逻辑思维(避免前言不答后语避免前言不答后语)n n创新思维。（创新思维。（think differently and reasonably）2021/8/9 星期一172021/8/9 星期一18