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1、 读后续写高分技巧:故事开头六大技巧一个好的故事开头就好比是一个带着香味十足的诱饵,诱使读者上钩并且饶有趣味地看完。而一个拙劣的故事开头,定会让读者大倒胃口,恹恹欲睡。俗话说:“well begun is half done!”(好的开头就成功了一半)。可见,写好一个好故事的好开头是多么的重要。那么到底在时间紧迫的考场上如何写出靓丽的开头呢?技巧1:副词开头我们先来看两个例句:1.Carefully,he stepped over all the broken glass. 他小心翼翼地踩过所有碎玻璃。2.Joyfully,he skipped up the street. 他很高兴地跳过了街
2、道。这里的carefully和joyfully把后面的两个动作“step踩”和“skip跳”描写的更加细致和生动。我们来看2016年高考真题。故事大致是这样的:夫妻旅游途中吵架,妻子独自离开,迷路在树林里,直升飞机来了几次救援但没有看见她,她感到很失望。第一段开头的提示句是:But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.意思是:没有直升机来了,天又黑了。同学们,可以想一想,我们该怎么接下来写开头呢?我们来看看下面的写法:3.Immediately, an absolute darkness ruled the forest
3、. 立刻,一片黑暗笼罩着森林。这里就用了:时间副词immediately衔接 + 环境描写,烘托了森林里迷路的紧张气氛。技巧2:形容词短语开头我们先看两个例句:1.Curious to know what was inside, he tiptoed into the dark cave.他好奇地想知道里面是什么,踮着脚尖走进了黑暗的洞穴。这里的“Curious to know what was inside, 很想知道里面有什么东西”就是形容词短语,表明他进洞穴的原因。相当于:He was curious to know what was inside, and he tiptoed int
4、o the dark cave.2.Unable to say a word, he was rooted to the spot.一句话也说不出来,他就楞在了原地。这里的“unable to say a word”也是一个形容词短语,表现了“楞在原地”这个动作伴随动作:说不出一个字。我们来看2018年高考真题,讲的是爸爸带儿子去朋友家农场游玩而迷路的故事。第一段开头给的提示句是:Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.突然,一只小兔子跳到了我的马前。怎么接下来写开头呢?我们可以这么写:3.Afraid that I m
5、ight hurt the lovely small creature, I automatically let out a cry to stop my horse. 我害怕我会伤害这个可爱的小生物,我自动发出一声喊叫来阻止我的马。这里用情绪形容词+从句的形式,很好体现了后一个动作“喊叫cry”的原因。我们来看这篇文章的第二段开头,文章给的提示句是:We had no idea where we were and it got dark.我们不知道自己在哪里,天变黑了。怎么接下来写开头呢?我们可以这么写:4.Exhausted and hungry, I wondered if we cou
6、ld find our way back. 我又累又饿,想知道我们能不能找到回去的路。这里用情绪形容词+从句的形式,很好体现了后一个动作伴随的情况:又累又饿!技巧3:非谓语开头先看这个例句:1.Lookingaround him cautiously, he slipped into the room and softly closed the door.他小心翼翼地环顾四周,溜进了房间,轻轻地关上门。这里的“Lookingaround him cautiously”意思是:小心翼翼地环顾四周,是一个非谓语动词短语。我们来看2016年高考真题第一段开头,刚才提到过,讲了妻子在森林里迷路的故事。
7、文章给的提示句是:But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.但是没有直升机来了,天又黑了。刚才我们用副词开头写了一个句子。现在我们用非谓语开头,怎么写呢?我们可以这么写:2.Feeling disappointed,Janehad to stay alone for another night.简感到失望,不得不再呆一夜。本句中的开头,用了doing的形式,即feeling disappointed感到失望。我们再来看2016年10月高考真题第二段开头,文章给的提示句是:It was daybreak when Jan
8、e woke up.简醒来的时候天已经亮了。怎么接下来写开头呢?我们可以这么写:3. Feeling refreshed,she continued to walk along thestreamto find the way out.她感到神清气爽,继续沿着小溪散步,寻找出去的路。这里用feeling refreshed的形式,很好体现了后一个动作“walk”的伴随状态。技巧4:对话或独白开头先看一个例句:1.“Lets see who gets there first!”Rachel shouted, as she pedaled fast and zoomed past Jenny.“让
9、我们看看谁先到那里去!”瑞秋一边叫着,一边飞快地蹬着车从珍妮身边冲过去。类似的写法,我们来看2017年高考真题,文章主要讲的是作者和朋友一起骑车游玩,途中遇狼的故事。第一段开头文章给的提示句是:The car abruptly stopped in front of him.汽车突然停在他面前。怎么接下来写开头呢?我们可以这么写:2.Get into the car.Paul shouted at Mac. “上车!” 保罗对麦克喊道。技巧5:背景描写我们来看2017年高考真题,文章讲了作者与健忘的妈妈一块去旅游的故事。第二段开头的提示语是这样的:We drove through severa
10、l states and saw lots of great sights along the way(我们开车穿过了几个州,沿途看到了很多好风景。)怎么接下来写开头呢?我们可以这么写:I looked out of the car window, winding rivers, lofty mountains, sunny beaches and deep valleys, holding me entirely in their fascination.我望着车窗外,蜿蜒的河流,高耸的山脉,阳光明媚的海滩和深邃的山谷,完全吸引了我的注意力。这里用“视觉+环境描写+拟人”的写作手法,也成功地
11、抓住了读者的注意力!技巧6:行为描写1.Furrystarted wagging his tail and running around in circleswhen he saw his master taking a leash out from the drawer. Furry was all ready for his evening walk.当他看到他的主人从抽屉里拿出一条皮带时,Furry开始摇,绕着圈跑。 Furry准备好了晚上的散步。一连串有关Furry的动作链,像放电影一样,印刻在读者的大脑中。为后面情节发展做好了铺垫。我们来看2017年高考真,仍然是作者与健忘妈妈一块去
12、旅游的故事。文章的第一段的提示句是:The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.(第二天,我们想起了我们带来的那个全新的帐篷。)怎么接下来写开头呢?我们可以这么写:2.Dadexchanged a glance with me. Why not camp to satisfyMom? 爸爸和我相互看了一眼。 为什么不露营来满足妈妈?这里就用到了动作描写+问句衔接。很好勾起了读者的兴趣。读后续写语句积累:情感描写1.Her eyestwinkled with merriment. 她高兴得双眸闪闪发亮。
13、2.Mackwent into rapturesandburst into laughter. 麦克欣喜若狂,大笑起来。3.A ripple of laughterwent through the crowd. 人群中传来一阵笑声4.Lilyslaughter lingeredin the room for a long time.丽丽的笑声萦绕在房间里久久不能散去。5. Her hands weretrembling with excitementas she opened the letter.当她打开信时,她的手激动得发抖。6. After heard thissatisfactoryo
14、utcome,Stevefelta sense of joyandhappiness surging throughhim.在听到这个令人满意的结果后,史蒂夫感到一种喜悦和幸福的感觉涌上心头。7.Overwhelmed withgaiety,hejumped up and ran excitedly around thetree.他欣喜若狂,跳起来并绕着那棵大树跑了几圈。8.In his excitementhe couldnt remember her name.他兴奋得甚至把他自己的名字都给忘了。9.Rosefeltblissfulas ifshewas in possession of
15、everything.罗丝感到很幸福,好像她拥有了全世界一样。10.She wascarried awayby pleasure. 她被快乐冲昏了头脑。11.I nodded, with abig smile spreading acrossmy cheek.我点点头,脸上露出灿烂的笑容。12.Shecouldntconceal the excitementand rushed hometo tell hermother the goodnews. 她掩饰不住兴奋,急忙回家告诉母亲这个好消息。13.She is alwaysready to helpothers in need and alw
16、ayswearsshining smile on her face,so many classmates are willing to make friends withher.她总是乐于助人并且脸上总是挂着灿烂的笑容,因此很多同学都愿意和她交朋友。14.Imoverthe moon. 我太开心了15.It is easy toinfer thathe isin rapturethroughhisbig smile.从他那灿烂的笑容很容易推断出他是兴高采烈的。16.He woke up that morning witha feeling of excitement. 他一起床就感到很兴奋。1
17、7.Herexcitement grewas the day of the wedding came nearer.随着结婚的日子越来越近,她越来越兴奋。18.I amoverflowing withhappiness. 我洋溢着幸福19.Every time we mentioned the funny incidents of the journey a pleasant smile wouldspread overMoms face.每次我们提到旅途中的趣事,妈妈的脸上就会浮现出愉快的笑容20.A sudden wave of joyswept over her. 一阵喜悦突然涌上她的心
18、头。21.She gazed up at him,glowing with happiness.她抬头看着他,脸上洋溢着幸福的光芒。22.The children werefilled with excitementat the thought of visiting Disneyland. 孩子们一想到要去迪斯尼乐园就兴奋不已。23.My heart isas sweet as honey. 我的心甜的像蜜一样。24.Pleasure welled upinside her heart. 她心中涌起喜悦。25.Amusementgleamed in his eyes. 他眼中流露出愉快的神情.26.She come up to me, with a smileshining like a diamond.她带着灿烂的笑容走到我面前。5