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1、优点英语新高考英语高效写作教程 读后续写细细 节节 描描 写写 之之 动动 作作 描描 写写读读 后后 续续 写写微技能训练01动作描写的三种方法动作描写的三种方法Contents02动作描写语料积累动作描写语料积累动作描写人物动作是人物内心的外在表现。在读后续写中，人物动作可以展现人物的内心活动，表现人物的性格特征，塑造人物形象并推动情节发展。但学生在答题过程中往往不会根据文章主题和故事发展的需要，生动、细致地描写主要人物的动作，从而造成文章情节失真、内容平淡、人物苍白和语言空洞。01动作描写的三种方法动作描写的三种方法1.描写精准化精准化即用一系列小动作而不用大动作，或者用含义比较明确的动
2、词，而不用抽象的动词来描述，以使描写更加具体生动。例：The little boy said sorry to his mother.小男孩对他妈妈说对不起。The little boy hung his head and mumbled an apology to his mother.小男孩垂着头，咕哝着向他妈妈道歉。分析：第一句中“said sorry to”不带任何感情色彩，而第二句中使用了具体化的动词“mumbled（咕哝）”，从而使一个不愿意道歉，但又不得不道歉的小男孩的形象栩栩如生地呈现在读者脑海中。1.描写精准化除了精准选用表示动作的词语，还要给动词加上适当的修饰成分。适当的修
3、饰语能细致地表达出动作的时间、幅度、速度、力度等，使人物形象更具活力，能更好地表现人物的鲜明个性与思想感情。动作描写中最常见的修饰成分就是状语，可使用副词、介词短语等。例：The wolf also noticed them and turned its head back,howling at Paul and Becky.狼也注意到他们，回头朝保罗和贝基嚷叫。At the same time,the wolf also noticed them and fiercely turned its head back,howling loudly at Paul and Becky.与此同时，狼
4、也注意到了他们，恶狠狠地转过头，对保罗和贝基大声嚷叫。分析：第二句中加上“at the same time（与此同时）”“fiercely（凶狠地）”“loudly（大声地）”这1个介词短语和2个副词，把这两个人遇到狼的危险情况生动地描写了出来。2.动作过程化记叙文中有不少动作描写是一连串动作过程的展示。尤其在展示人物个性时，如果我们一笔带过，就很难突出人物形象，也很难给人以深刻的印象，而通过细节描写展现出动作的过程，表现力便会大增。例：Lisa went to catch the butterfly.丽萨去捉蝴蝶。Lisa crept along the path,bent over swi
5、ftly and cupped her hands around the butterfly gently.丽萨沿着小路蹑手蹑脚地走着，迅速弯下腰，用手轻轻地捕捉蝴蝶。分析：第一句在描写丽萨捕捉蝴蝶的动作时，没有细节的动作描写，因此显得很平淡。而第二句运用了“creep（蹑手蹑脚地走）”“bend（弯腰）”“cup（使成杯型）”3个连贯的动词，生动具体地描述了丽萨小心翼翼捕捉蝴蝶的微妙过程，具有极强的画面感。因此，在续写过程中，在必要的地方恰当地使用一连串的动词来表现过程，能为文章增添不少色彩。3.语言修辞化除了在动词上作调整，还可以利用恰当的修辞手法来帮助描写动作。比喻、拟人、夸张等修辞手法
6、都能让动作描写变得更有表现力。例：My stomach was aching for not eating on time.我因不按时吃饭而胃痛。My stomach was punishing me for not eating on time.我的胃在惩罚我没有按时吃饭。分析：第二句使用了拟人，不说“疼痛”，而说“惩罚了我”，更加生动有趣。动作描写语料积累动作描写语料积累021.1.描写与描写与“头头”有关的动作有关的动作高分词块：高分词块：shake ones head shake ones head 摇头摇头nod ones head nod ones head 点头点头stick o
7、nes head out stick ones head out 探头探头tilt ones head tilt ones head 歪着脑袋歪着脑袋lift/raise ones head lift/raise ones head 抬头抬头turn/twist ones head turn/twist ones head 转头转头throw ones head back throw ones head back 后仰后仰clear ones head clear ones head 清醒头脑清醒头脑scratch ones head scratch ones head 挠了挠头挠了挠头one
8、s head spins ones head spins 天旋地转天旋地转duck ones head duck ones head 缩头缩头stroke ones head stroke ones head 摸了摸头摸了摸头rest ones head on/against rest ones head on/against 把头靠在把头靠在 drop/lower/bend/bow/hang ones head drop/lower/bend/bow/hang ones head 低头低头1.1.描写与描写与“头头”有关的动作有关的动作精彩好句：精彩好句：His head dropped d
9、own.他耷拉着脑袋。They nodded their heads in agreement.他们点头同意。She buried her head in the pillow.她用枕头捂住脑袋。Frightened,Tom trembled from head to toe.汤姆害怕得浑身颤抖。She flung back her head proudly.她骄傲地扬起头。同步练习同步练习根据提示，将下面的语篇补充完整。根据提示，将下面的语篇补充完整。Steven walked slowly to the bus,1.(低着头),tears in his eyes.His friend Jo
10、hn 2.(点头)and smiled at him.Though he was in a bad mood,he 3.(转头)to hide it and managed a smile.When he got home,he 4.(埋头)under the quilt,pretending to be asleep.However,his mother stopped her housework,5.(抬头)with surprise in her eyes.Then Steven rose,sat close to his mother,6.(把头靠在)on her shoulder,a
11、nd could hardly resist weeping.with his head downwith his head downnodded his headnodded his head turned his headturned his headburied his headburied his headraising her headraising her headrested his headrested his head2.2.描写与描写与“眼睛眼睛”有关的动作有关的动作高分词块：高分词块：stare/gaze at 凝视peek/peep at 偷看glare at 怒视着k
12、eep an eye on 注视meet ones eyes 接触某人的目光turn ones eyes to/on 把目光转向stare into ones eyes 凝视glue ones eyes to/on紧盯着exchange a glance 交换眼色gape at 目瞪口呆地看着glance/glimpse at 看了一眼fix/focus ones eyes on 盯着narrow ones eyes 眯起眼睛catch/lose sight of 看见/看不见squeeze ones eyes shut 紧闭双眼peer over ones shoulder 回头看stare
13、 at sb.up and down 上下打量某人look straight at sb.直视着某人2.2.描写与描写与“眼睛眼睛”有关的动作有关的动作精彩好句：精彩好句：Tears blurred my eyes.泪水模糊了我的双眼。I stared blankly at the paper in front of me.我茫然地看着面前这张纸。She glanced at her watch and went to work hurriedly.她看了一眼表就匆忙去上班了。Hearing the good news,her eyes lit up with excitement.听到这个好
14、消息，她的眼睛兴奋得发亮。Jane glared at her husband crossly and flushed with anger.简怒视着她的丈夫，脸气得通红。同步练习同步练习根据提示，将下面的语篇补充完整。根据提示，将下面的语篇补充完整。Annes father 1.(眯起眼睛),wondering what had happened.Then,he 2.(把目光转向)the door when he heard the handle turning.Watching Anne coming in,her father 3.(上下打量),confused.Though her b
15、lue eyes were full of tears,she 4.(注视)her fathers expression.Anne 5.(直视着父亲)and told him the truth.When learning the truth,he 6.(紧闭双眼)and bit his lip,with tears running down his cheeks.narrowed his eyesnarrowed his eyesturned his eyes toturned his eyes tostared at her up and downstared at her up and
16、downkept an eye onkept an eye onlooked straight at her fatherlooked straight at her fathersqueezed his eyes shutsqueezed his eyes shut3.3.描写与描写与“耳鼻口耳鼻口”有关的动作有关的动作高分词块：高分词块：be all ears 洗耳恭听turn a deaf ear to 置若罔闻let out a cry 发出一声喊叫break into a smile 露出笑容lead by the nose 牵着鼻子走wrinkle ones nose 皱着鼻子dr
17、op ones voice 放低声音in a whisper 低声地，悄声地smile/grin from ear to ear 眉开眼笑follow ones nose 跟着感觉走catch ones breath 喘口气make ones mouth water 使人流口水精彩好句：精彩好句：She was all ears in class.她全神贯注地听课。He was grinning from ear to ear.他笑得合不拢嘴。At the sight of the dark figure,they let out a cry.一看到那个黑影，他们就大声叫了起来。My mout
18、h started watering when I smelled the food.闻到食物的香味，我开始流口水了。He straightened up and looked at me,open-mouthed.他直起身，目瞪口呆地看着我。3.3.描写与描写与“耳鼻口耳鼻口”有关的动作有关的动作同步练习同步练习翻译下列句子。翻译下列句子。1.我没想到他对朋友们的批评竟充耳不闻。2.她皱着鼻子，好像刚闻到臭味。3.“我们要去哪里？”他低声问道。4.厨房里的香味馋得我们直流口水。5.你应该自己做决定，而不是让别人牵着鼻子走。I didnt expect him to turn a deaf e
19、ar to his friends criticism.I didnt expect him to turn a deaf ear to his friends criticism.She wrinkled her nose as if she had just smelled a bad smell.She wrinkled her nose as if she had just smelled a bad smell.“Where are we going?”he asked in a whisper.“Where are we going?”he asked in a whisper.T
20、he smells from the kitchen made our mouths water.The smells from the kitchen made our mouths water.You You should should make make up up your your own own mind mind instead instead of of letting letting others others lead lead you by the nose.you by the nose.4.4.描写与描写与“手手”有关的动作有关的动作高分词块：高分词块：rub one
21、s hands 搓着手arm in arm 臂挽着臂spread ones hands 摊开双手take ones hand 牵某人的手hold ones hand 抓住某人的手fold ones arms 某人双臂交叉with open arms 双臂张开（欢迎）pull sb.into ones arms 拉某人入怀gather sb.in ones arms 把某人抱在怀中put/throw ones arms around sb.搂住某人keep sb.at arms length 同某人保持一定距离raise/hold up a finger to ones lips 把一根手指举到
22、某人唇边精彩好句：精彩好句：She tapped the boy on the shoulder.她拍了拍男孩的肩膀。He folded his arms across his chest.他双臂交叉放在胸前。She stroked my cheek gently with her hand.她用手轻轻地抚摸着我的脸颊。The nearer it got,the more wildly she waved the yellow blouse.离得越近，她越使劲地挥动那件黄色上衣。The man reached into his pocket and placed four coins in h
23、er hand.那人把手伸进口袋，掏出4枚硬币放在她的手里。4.4.描写与描写与“手手”有关的动作有关的动作同步练习同步练习根据提示，将下面的语篇补充完整。根据提示，将下面的语篇补充完整。As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared.He approached them and 1.(把他们拉入怀里).“Whats up?”he gently inquired.Jeff stammered out their failed plan,2.(使劲搓着双手).Hearing their plan,th
24、eir father 3.(温柔地抚摸着他们的头),comforting by saying“I will do you a favor.”He grabbed the handle of the pan and put a bar of butter to melt.Then he swiftly removed the burnt porridge away,poured another cup of rice,and started to cook it all over again.Soon came the delicious smell of French toast and ch
25、icken porridge.Before the twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up,they 4.(把一根手指举到他们唇边)to ask their father to keep a secret.Staring at the carefully prepared food,their mother 5.(把他们抱在怀里),tears running down her face.pulled them into his armspulled them into his armsrubbing his h
26、ands together fiercelyrubbing his hands together fiercelystroked their heads gentlystroked their heads gentlyraised a finger to their lipsraised a finger to their lips gathered them into her arms gathered them into her arms5.5.描写与描写与“腿脚腿脚”有关的动作有关的动作高分词块：高分词块：feel ones way 摸索着前进fight ones way 奋勇前进sha
27、ky/trembling legs 颤抖的双腿cross ones legs 盘腿jump/leap to ones feet 跳起来drag ones feet 拖着脚步push ones way 挤出去wind ones way 蜿蜒前行elbow/force ones way 挤着向前走rise/get to ones feet 站起来tap/stamp ones feet 跺脚put ones feet up 跷起脚休息drag ones heavy legs 拖着沉重的双腿精彩好句：精彩好句：He paced up and down in the bedroom.他在卧室里来回踱步。
28、She slipped out of bed and tiptoed to the window.她悄悄地下了床，踮着脚走到窗前。She jumped to her feet when she heard this amazing news.当她听到这个惊人的消息时，她跳了起来。At the foot of the stairs Harry slid through the open door.下了楼梯，哈利从敞开的门里溜了出去。As soon as the teacher opened the door,I dashed into the classroom.老师一开门，我就冲进了教室。5.
29、5.描写与描写与“腿脚腿脚”有关的动作有关的动作同步练习同步练习根据提示，将下面的语篇补充完整。根据提示，将下面的语篇补充完整。Rocky Lyons was five years old when his mother Kelly was driving through rural Alabama.He was asleep on the front seat of their truck 1.(盘起双腿).Suddenly,the truck turned over into a valley.Rocky moved out from under Kelly,2.(溜)through th
30、e open window and tried to pull his mother out.But she didnt move.Rocky crawled back into the truck and managed to push Kelly out of the crashed truck.He then told her theyd climb up to the road and stop a car to get help.Hearing the encouragement from Rocky,Kelly picked up the hope and 3.(摸索着前进)in
31、the dark.It was midnight when they reached the road.Due to tiredness,Rocky fell down at the moment he stepped on the ground.However,he 4.(颤抖着站起来),yelling out aloud for help.Fortunately,a car stopped and the mother and son were rushed to the hospital.It took 8 hours to rebuild Kellys face.Rocky 5.(踱来
32、踱去),waiting worriedly outside the operation room.This 5-year-old boy just couldnt stop crying his heart out.No sooner had the doctor told Rocky his mother was fine than he 6.(冲进)the room.Until his mother was asleep,he tiptoed quietly out of the room.with his legs crossedwith his legs crossedslidslid
33、felt her wayfelt her wayrose to his feet on shaky legsrose to his feet on shaky legspaced up and downpaced up and downdashed intodashed into综合训练综合训练根据汉语意思，补全下列句子。根据汉语意思，补全下列句子。1.她耸耸肩，摊开双手，“我只能告诉你这么多了。”She shrugged and ,“Thats all I can tell you.”2.你不必考虑，凭直觉行事就行。You wont have to think,just .3.小女孩盯着橱窗
34、里的玩具看。The little girl the toys in the windows.4.她将头靠在他的肩膀上。She his shoulder.5.年轻人有时把父母的苦口婆心当作耳边风。Young people sometimes seem to the words of their anxious parents.spread her handsspread her handsfollow your nosefollow your nosestared atstared atrested her head onrested her head onturn a deaf ear tot
35、urn a deaf ear to综合训练综合训练根据汉语意思，补全下列句子。根据汉语意思，补全下列句子。6.几个学生举手回答问题。Several students to answer the question.7.他像是受到惊雷轰击一般，一下子就跳了起来。He ,completely thunderstruck.8.他双手抱头，苦恼不已。He ,greatly annoyed.9.由于大雾，我们看不见那条船了。We the boat in the fog.10.他把手伸进口袋，掏出一些零钱。He and pulled out some change.raised their handsraised their handsjumped to his feetjumped to his feetheld his head in his handsheld his head in his handslost sight oflost sight ofreached into his pocketreached into his pocket优优点点英英语语谢谢 谢谢 观观 看看