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1、From“read”to“view”长沙市弘益高级中学长沙市弘益高级中学:瞿献锋瞿献锋读后续写专项研讨读后续写专项研讨Continuation Writing历届真题历届真题读后续写读后续写卷别体裁话题主题语境场景微场景2023全国新高考I卷记叙文在老师鼓励下参加比赛并获奖人与自我个人成长超越自我1月浙江卷记叙文蜂鸟与我情未了人与自然爱护动物关爱自然界小动物2022全国新高考I卷记叙文身残志坚男孩的赛跑人与自我个人成长超越自我6月浙江卷记叙文在社区派发食物给无家可归的人人与社会助人帮助弱势群体1月浙江卷记叙文我和傲娇学霸的合作人与自我个人成长与人合作2021全国新高考I卷记叙文母亲节的礼物人与
2、自我家庭生活感恩亲情，勇于担当6月浙江卷记叙文暑假打工薪水人与自我家庭生活感恩亲情，勇于担当1月浙江卷记叙文万圣节南瓜趣事人与自我家庭生活家庭趣事2020全国新高考I卷记叙文帮助贫困家庭脱困（卖爆米花）人与社会助人帮助弱势群体7月浙江卷记叙文与北极熊对抗脱险人与自然脱险遇野兽脱险1月浙江卷记叙文抚慰伤心的狗狗人与自然爱护动物关爱宠物20186月浙江卷记叙文度假骑马迷路人与自然脱险迷路脱险20176月浙江卷记叙文骑行遇狼人与自然脱险遇野兽脱险11月浙江卷记叙文健忘妈妈的趣事人与自我家庭生活家庭趣事201610月浙江卷记叙文夫妻吵架出走森林中迷路人与自然脱险迷路脱险三大主题语境：三大主题语境：人与
3、自我（人与自我（7 7次）：次）：3 3个人成长个人成长+4+4家庭生活家庭生活人与自然（人与自然（6 6次）：次）：2 2爱护动物爱护动物+4+4脱险脱险人与社会（人与社会（2 2次）：次）：2 2帮助他人帮助他人知知课标要求课标要求目录目录懂懂评分标准评分标准析析课堂案例课堂案例探探教学策略教学策略明明写作方法写作方法Part 1Part 1：知：知课标要求课标要求高考高考“指挥棒指挥棒”课标课标课标：课标：1.1.坚持立德树人根本任务坚持立德树人根本任务;2.2.德智体美劳全面发展德智体美劳全面发展;3.3.融入中华优秀传统文化融入中华优秀传统文化;4.4.促进学科素养发展促进学科素养发
4、展;5.5.培养家国情怀、国际视野、跨文化培养家国情怀、国际视野、跨文化和沟通能力。和沟通能力。研读语篇研读语篇(what,why,how).学习理解学习理解应用实践应用实践读后续写的过程就是读后续写的过程就是研读所给语篇研读所给语篇、创造新语篇创造新语篇的过程。的过程。Part 2Part 2：懂懂评分标准评分标准 读后续写是一种新型的写作形式，它将阅读和写作结合，考查英语学科核心素养。一篇优秀的续写作文不仅要准确地叙述一个故事，还要使叙述的故事出彩。这要求写作者具备扎实的语言功底，同时能灵活、准确地使用各种文学性的表达手法。通常，读后续写题型会提供一段350词以内的语言材料，以记叙文为主，
5、故事情节有曲折、有起伏，故事线索的逻辑性比较强。考生需依据该材料内容和所给段落开头语进行续写（150词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。在新课标全国I卷读后续写真题的题干中，要求和分析如下图：读后续写评分原则解读后续写评分原则解读读高考作文分档标准及解读高考作文分档标准及解读分数档分数档新高考全国卷评分标准新高考全国卷评分标准评分标准解读评分标准解读第五档第五档（21-2521-25分）分）创造了丰富、合理的内容，富有逻辑性，续写完整，与原文情境融洽度高。使用了多样并且恰当的词汇和语法结构，可能有个别小错，但完全不影响理解。有效地使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构清
6、晰，前后呼应，意义连贯。内容充实，逻辑通顺且符合生活内容充实，逻辑通顺且符合生活常识；续写内容与原文关联紧密，常识；续写内容与原文关联紧密，构成了完整的故事构成了完整的故事。使用了表达准确的、丰富且合理变化的语法结构及词汇；所使用的表达有些许错误，并不是因为写作者的能力问题或基础较差；错误不影响理解文意。续写内容与段首句、续写内容与段首句、段与段之间进行了有效的衔接；段与段之间进行了有效的衔接；合理地使用了连接成分，极大地合理地使用了连接成分，极大地增强了语言的连贯性和篇章的紧增强了语言的连贯性和篇章的紧凑性。凑性。重内容重内容重语言重语言重语篇重语篇分数档分数档新高考全国卷评分标准新高考全国
7、卷评分标准评分标准解读评分标准解读第四档第四档（16-2016-20分）分）创造了比较丰富、合理的内容，比较有逻辑性，续写比较完整，与原文情境融洽度较高。使用了比较多样并且恰当的词汇和语法结构，可能有些许错误，但不影响理解。比较有效地使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯。内容较为丰富，逻辑线比较清晰且符合生活常识；续写内容较为合理且与原文关联较为紧密，构成了比较完整的故事。所使用的语法结构和词汇虽然缺乏较高的丰富性和多样性，但大部分都正确，个别错误不影响理解文意。基本有效地使用了连接成分，使文章不是很松散，篇章具有一定的紧凑性。分数档分数档新高考全国卷评分标准新高考全国卷评分标
8、准评分标准解读评分标准解读第三档第三档（11-1511-15分）分）创造了基本合理的内容，有一定的逻辑性，续写基本完整，与原文情境相关。使用了简单的词汇和语法结构，有一些错误或不恰当之处，但基本不影响理解。基本有效地使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构基本清晰，意义基本连贯。内容缺乏生动性，逻辑线存在但不明显；续写内容基本合理且与原文相关，可以构成一个比较完整的故事。较为合理地使用了基本的词汇和语法，但表达方式较为单一，存在一定的错误，对理解可能造成影响。不是所有的连接成分都具备，只是使用了必备的连接成分和过渡语，使文章不是很松散，篇章具有一定的紧凑性。分数档分数档新高考全国卷评分标准新高考全国卷评
9、分标准评分标准解读评分标准解读第二档第二档（6-106-10分）分）内容或逻辑上有一些重大问题，续写不够完整，与原文情境有一定程度脱节。所使用的词汇有限，语法结构单调，错误较多，影响理解。未能有效地使用语句间衔接手段，全文结构不够清晰，意义不够连贯。内容和逻辑存在较为严重的不合理性；续写内容完整性不佳，续写方向与原文关联度较浅。没有丰富的表达和变化，其中一些词汇和语法的错误及不准确性，影响了写作任务的完成，不能够清楚地表达作者想要表达的内容。基本没有连接成分，文段的呈现是简单的句子罗列，影响了文章结构的清晰性。分数档分数档新高考全国卷评分标准新高考全国卷评分标准评分标准解读评分标准解读第一档第
10、一档（1-51-5分）分）内容或逻辑上有较多重大问题，或有部分内容抄自原文，续写不完整，与原文情境基本脱节。所使用的词汇非常有限，语法结构单调，错误很多，严重影响理解。几乎没有使用语句间衔接手段，全文结构不清晰，意义不连贯。内容和逻辑存在严重的不合理性，或者直接摘抄原文的句子；续写内容不完整，续写方向与原文无关。只是使用了非常基本且单调的语法结构和词汇表达，表达的错误使读者不知所云。没有连接成分，文段只是句子的堆砌，支离破碎。0分分所写内容太少或无法看清以致无法评判；所写内容全部抄自原文或与题目要求完全不相关。未作答。空白卷；续写内容不成句子；书写太差影响识别；内容全部抄自原文；所写内容与题目
11、无关。The Meredith family lived in a small community.As the economy was in decline,some people in the town had lost their jobs.Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet.People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.Mrs.Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman.She spent a
12、 great deal of time visiting the poor.She knew they had problems,and they needed all kinds of help.When she had time,she would bring food and medicine to them.One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before.There was a man sick in bed,his wife,who took care of him and
13、 could not go out to work,and their little boy.The little boy his name was Bernard had interested her very much.“I wish you could see him,”she said to her own children,John,Harry,and Clara.“He is such a help to his mother.He wants very much to earn some money,but I dont see what he can do.”After the
14、ir mother left the room,the children sat thinking about Bernard.“I wish we could help him to earn money,”said Clara.“His family is suffering so much.”“So do I,”said Harry.“We really should do something to assist them.”For some moments,John said nothing,but,suddenly,he sprang to his feet and cried,“I
15、 have a great idea!I have a solution that we can all help accomplish(完成).”The other children also jumped up all attention.When John had an idea,it was sure to be a good one.“Ill tell you what we can do,”said John.“You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us?Well,we can make popcorn(爆米花),and put
16、 it into paper bags,and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡上的相应位置作答。When Mrs.Meredith heard of Johns idea,she thought it was a good one,too.With everything ready,Bernard started out on his new business.2020年年7月新高考全国卷读后续写真题为例月新高考全国卷读后续写真题为例 示例示例（第五档评分）：
17、第五档评分）：When Mrs.Meredith heard of Johns idea,she thought it was a good one,too.A plan was made,and work was allocated within minutes.While Mrs.Meredith sought out the largest pan in her possession,the children went to find Bernard and told him the idea.The little boy was so thankful that he was lost
18、 for words.Soon the Meredith household was filled with laughter.The aroma spread out for miles.Neighbors popped their heads out of their windows in search of its source.When the work was done,Bernard carefully sealed the paper bags and gathered them in a basket.With everything ready,Bernard started
19、out on his new business.The shy boy hesitated upon reaching the first door,but the Meredith kids encouraged him with a“go for it”gesture.After a short gentle knock,the door opened and a friendly face emerged.The neighbor asked if she could buy a bag of the tempting snack.As they went down the street
20、,more doors opened.Even the less privileged households offered to make fair trades with their extra food.The basket grew heavier with coins,foods,and other necessities,while Bernards steps became lighter with joy and relief.内容方面，续写部分充分联系了原文中的时代和社会背景，创造性地设计了邻居们以物易物，帮助Bernard一家渡过难关的情节；同时，将笔墨集中于对主要人物Be
21、rnard的描写，通过描写他的动作与心理，侧面烘托Meredith一家以及邻居们的善良。语言方面，使用了表达准确、丰富而合理变化的语法结构及词汇，清晰传达文意，如描写邻居的动作时，续写第一段使用了“popped their heads out of their windows”，从第三方视角出发描写邻居们闻到爆米花香气后的反应，而续写第二段使用了“the door opened and a friendly face emerged”，从Bernard的视角出发，描述友好的邻居购买爆米花时的情形。语篇方面，续写部分与段首句紧密连接，两段续写内容连贯；在内容衔接方面，不仅用到了人称照应和衔接标志
22、，而且通过感官描写进行前后呼应，如aroma与popcorn呼应，laughter与前文中的出场人物呼应等。本文将高级表达融入其中，描写更具层次感，同时情节编排兼具合理性与创新性，不失为一篇高分佳作。评分理由评分理由习习作作探探究究？重内容？重内容？重语言？重语言？重语篇？重语篇？Part 3Part 3：析析课堂案例课堂案例2023年新高考全国年新高考全国卷英语卷英语读后续写读后续写Part 4Part 4：探探教学策略教学策略1.1.充分利用教材做好续写充分利用教材做好续写语言输入语言输入译林版必修第三册第二单译林版必修第三册第二单元：元：Natural disasters三联动三联动+非
23、谓语非谓语+定语从句定语从句2.2.充分利用教材做好充分利用教材做好微续写探究微续写探究 Case1Case1译林版必修第一册第二译林版必修第一册第二单元：单元：Lets talk teens Case2Case2?适度改编微续写适度改编微续写3.3.借助历届高考借助历届高考真题真题做做续写专项指导续写专项指导真题真题3 3度：度：可信度可信度 规范度规范度 迁移度迁移度专项分类专项分类：分主题分主题 分话题分话题 分技巧分技巧But.But.庞大的资料收集庞大的资料收集和整理及授课准备？和整理及授课准备？课标课标优质的参考书优质的参考书+?以此书为例开以此书为例开结合教材做话题拓展结合教材做
24、话题拓展可结合教材中自可结合教材中自然灾害话题拓展然灾害话题拓展真题汇总真题汇总随手可用随手可用仿真模拟仿真模拟拓宽视野拓宽视野（2021 新高考卷）My life as a tax-paying employed person began in middle school,when,for three whole days,I worked in a baking factory.My best friend Betsys father was a manager at Hough Bakeries,which,at Easter time,41 little bunny(兔子)cakes
25、for all its 42 throughout Cleveland.It happened that the plant downtown needed eight kids for 43 help during our spring break,for which I hadno 44 beyond listening to my favorite records.Id 45 minimum wage.Id see how a factory 46 .My parents thought all of this was a grand idea and called Betsys dad
26、 with their 47 .Our 48 in the factory were simple:Place cakes on a moving belt.Attach icing(糖霜)ears.Apply icing eyes and nose.49 bunny from the belt.This was 50 than itsounds.51 a bit and the cakes pile up.As I told my parents at dinner that first night,it was all a little more high-pressure than Id
27、 52 .Dad 53 .The son of a grocer,hed spent the summers of his childhood 54 food in Benardsville,New Jersey.This was the sort of work that made you 55 the dollars you earned and respect those who did the work,he told me.？升华：升华：借借“我我”父亲之口父亲之口，解释劳动，解释劳动的意义，引导重视劳动。的意义，引导重视劳动。完形巧变续写？完形巧变续写？4.4.灵活改编习题练情节设
28、计灵活改编习题练情节设计Para 2:Luckily,we found Texs hat in my locker.It was lying inside out there.I gave out a sigh of relief.Thank god!Its here.”But,“It wasnt the hat but all efforts you spent practicing over the past month.I was lost in deep thought.Its true.Luck is a combination of being prepared and belie
29、ving in yourself!Luck may come to you,but you have to be ready for it!升华：升华：借借Maria之口之口，成功的关键不在帽子，成功的关键不在帽子，在于努力付出。在于努力付出。5.5.借助考题提专项技能借助考题提专项技能6.6.多模态拓展阅读拓宽续写整体视野多模态拓展阅读拓宽续写整体视野以以Little Women为例，为例，用用WPS探究整本书阅读探究整本书阅读之词汇语料库的构建与读之词汇语料库的构建与读后续写的迁移运用思考后续写的迁移运用思考1.“Oh dear,”Jo stammered.（结巴地说）2.“.Ill be
30、 good,”she begged.（恳求地说）3.“If she goes,I wont!”Jo shouted.（大声地说）4.Amy screamed,“Youll be sorry for this,Jo March.”（尖叫地说）5.“Youve got it!”Jo yelled at Amy.（吼叫地说）6.“Is she safe?”Jo whispered to her mother.（低声地说）7.“Ive done my best!”she announced.（宣告地说）How to express the meaning of“say”in different way
31、s.Words:Words:6.She blushed and gave his hand a thankful squeeze.7.“He seems grim,but hes got kind eyes,”Jo said to the room.8.It was a sad sight to see her face changed,her once busy hands so weak,and her beautiful hair tangled on the pillow.9.The days seemed dark,sad and lonely.熠熠生辉的形容词熠熠生辉的形容词1.A
32、s they laughed together,a cheery voice said,“Glad to find you so happy,my girls.”2.“Thank you,”a rough voice said.3.She blushed and saw that his eyes were even kinder than in the portrait.But his gruff voice said,“So youre not afraid of me?”4.“I knew youd hurt your feet in those silly shoes,”Jo said
33、.5.Amy shouted,“Youll never see your silly old book again!I burned it.”Phrases:1.Hannah had a Christmas dinner ready that was a sight to see.（难得一见的场面；奇观；值得一看的风景）2.On Christmas Day,the weather was mild and Hannah“felt in her bones”it would be a wonderful day.（确信；凭直觉知道）3.Jo never went back to work for
34、 Aunt March,who took quite a liking to Amy.（非常喜欢）4.Nothing will come of it.（由引起，是的结果）The three years that passed brought few changes to the quiet family.Fill in the blanks with proper verbs.(1)The feathery snowflakes in the night air.鹅毛般的雪花在夜空中飞舞。(2)The mist him up.薄雾把他包围起来。(3)The icy wind started _
35、 _,stinging my face.冰冷的风开始呼啸，刺痛我的脸。danceddancedswallowedswallowedhowlinghowlingSentences：迁移续写迁移续写运用：运用：3.She crept downstairs as quiet as she could,put on her hat and jacket,and snuck out a back window.（三连动表达）1.Amy threw a fit saying she would not go to Aunt March.（词块+非谓语）2.Jo stormed out of the roo
36、m.（气场动词画面感）整本书整本书/课外课外阅读语料库阅读语料库(WPS)(WPS)WordsSentencesPhrases读后续写中读后续写中语料迁移、语料迁移、句子仿写、句子仿写、故事内容、故事内容、情节设计、情节设计、Part 5Part 5：明明写作方法写作方法1.From“read”to“view”1.From“read”to“view”2.123452.12345原则原则3.3.倒立逆推法倒立逆推法 When my daughters reached the third and fourth grades,I occasionally allowed them to walk t
37、o and from school alone if the weather permitted.One warm spring day,a little dog followed them home after school.It had short legs and long lovely ears,with a fawn-colored coat.It was the cutest dog I had ever seen and the girls begged me to keep it.The dog was barely twelve weeks old.It had no col
38、lar or identifying marks of any sort,so I didnt know what to do.I thought about running an advertisement in the local papers lost-and-found section but I really didnt want to.It would break the kids hearts if someone showed up.To soothe my conscience,I told myself its owners should come looking for
39、it if they really loved it.By the end of the week,the dog was part of our family.It was very intelligent and good with the girls.Despite the excuses I had come up with,I found myself checking the lost-and-found section in the local paper.One day the following week,a particular advertisement jumped o
40、ut at me and my heart pounded with fear for what I read.Someone was begging for the return of a lost dog in the neighborhood of our grade school.They sounded desperate.My hand shook.I couldnt bring myself to pick up the phone.Instead,I pretended I hadnt seen the advertisement.I quickly put the paper
41、 away in the drawer and continued with my dusting.I never said a word about it to the kids or my husband.By now we had named the dog.It looked like a Molly,so that was what we called it.It followed the girls everywhere they went.When they went outside,it was one step behind them.When they did housew
42、ork,it was there to lend a hand.There was only one problem with this otherwise perfect picture:my conscience was bothering me.I knew in my heart I had to call that number and see if our Molly was the dog they were desperately seeking.It would be the most difficult thing Id ever done.Para.1:With mixe
43、d feelings,I finally picked up the phone.Para.2:Opening the door,I saw a woman with a little girl sitting in a small wheelchair.Summary:From“read”to“view”,let continuation writing be a romantic and enjoyable journey!使用声明使用声明所有内容，仅用于老师教学内部使用，所有内容，仅用于老师教学内部使用，禁止以任何组织或个人名义进行转载或者商用，禁止以任何组织或个人名义进行转载或者商用，侵权追究相关责任。侵权追究相关责任。感谢您的聆听