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1、2023年普通高等学校招生全国统一考试（新课标II卷）英语学科第四部分 写作（共两节，满分40分）第一节（满分15分）假定你是李华，外教Ryan准备将学生随机分为两人一组，让大家课后练习口语，你认为这样分组存在问 题。请你给外教写一封邮件，内容包括；1 .说明问题；2 .提出建议。注意：1 .写作词数应为80个左右：2 .请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Dear Ryan,Im Li Hua from Class 3.Yours sincerely,Li Hua第一部分：写作考核重点要求考生根据提示进行书面表达。考生应能：(1)清楚、连贯地传递信息，表达意思；(2 )有效运用所学语言知识。
2、(摘自2019年全国新课标高考英语考试大纲)近几年的高考试题还是围绕校园生活，学生的学习生活的相关话题居多。第二部分：试题分析新高考以来，作文的写作多以应用文居多。今年的考题更加注重彰显个性，要求考生有一定的分析问题和 解决问题的能力，有个人的观点，能够运用现有的知识，灵活的处理生活中和学习中的一些问题。从中看出 高考是考察学生综合能力，每一年的考题都有相似之处，更加有互补的趋势，更加全方位的考察学生的能力, 如果单纯的刷旧题就不会有思维的突破和能力的创新。重点围绕1.说明问题；2.提出建议,要求考生能够思考发现问题：针对外教准备将学生随机分为两人一组, 让大家课后练习口语一事,感到有问题，要
3、求说明第一，问题是什么，第二，问题会带来哪些影响，第三如 何解决问题。以及解决后会有哪些好处。第三部分：扩展句子第一段： 自我介绍(已经给出)开门见山提出问题：得知外教Ryan准备将学生随机分为两人一组，让大家课后练习口语，觉得这样 做是为了提升我们的口语，这样做很好。但是，我认为这样分组存在问题。比如：列举可能的问题:(1)方法上有问题：随机的话可能会大家不熟，不便于交流。(2)内容上有问题：课后练习口语，大家没有话题，形式也单一，如果有其他的方式来提升口语就好了。(3)第二段：两人一组可以增加到多人一组， 可以给出共同的话题，内容上加以缩小，方便各个组之间的交流。 随机分配可以变成自动组成
4、小组。 两人练习口语可以变成出一个英文小节目，来实现英语运用的目的。第三段： 希望建议得到采纳，希望外教征求一下其他同学的意见，集思广益。表示对提高口语充满期待。注意：(1)考虑到只能80个字写完，要把内容精简一下。(2)精简的核心就是你认为这样分组存在问题。Possible Version 1Dear Ryan,Im Li Hua firom Class 3. Your good iotention, with the purpose of promoting students oral English, to divide us students into groups with 2 in
5、 each one at 】andom is highly appreciated. However, I do think there exists some potential problems, so Id like to make my points and offer some advice as a reference.First, let us choose partner by ourselves so that we can share more familiar topics. The group member cae be limited within 6. Beside
6、s, you can also divide us by ou】spoken English level, that is , to mix top students with slow ones to help those in need.I sincerely hope the advice given above will bv of some help for you to arrange a successful and fruitful activity among us, thiough which, I am expecting to get promoted in my En
7、glish communion.Yours sincerely.Li Hua第二节（满分25分）47.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest. I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language.
8、Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail? His reply:
9、Because I love your stories. If youre willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this. Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.I chose Paul Revered horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith （银匠）in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to
10、warn people that British soldiers were coining. My story would come straight from the horses mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny; and unlikely to be anyone elses choice.What did the horse think, as he sped through the night? Did he get tired? Have doubts? Did he want to quit? I sympathized immedi
11、ately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revered horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them.When 1 handed in the essay to my
12、 teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said, “Great. Now, write it again. I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didnt win, I wouldnt care.注意：1 .续写词数应为150个左右；2 .请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。A few weeks later
13、, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.I went to my teachers office after the award presentation.第一部分：读后续写要点读后续写需要注重文章的六要素，推敲细节，结合所给的段落主题句进行情节推进、主旨的展开。定情 节，定人物（主要人物、次要人物），定主题，定句式，定对话等。作为高考新题型，难度在于挖掘人物特点，刻画人物形象，突出核心价值观，树立正确的价值观。综合 考察学生分析问题，解决问题的能力，结合精确的语言表达，全面考察学生的语言能力，思维能力和创新能 力。第二部
14、分：试题分析读后写所给的句子体现了时间为顺序，第一段是描写比赛中和比赛结果。第二段是描写比赛后我和老师 的交流。人物：我和老师，事件：比赛地点：老师办公室时间：第一段 A few weeks later （几周后），第二段 after the award presentation.（在颁奖典礼后）A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the mews.I went to my teacher9 office after the award presentation.第三部分：段落划分：（找关键词）When
15、 I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest, I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my pap
16、er on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.第一段讲了作者和老师的主要矛盾：作为孩子的我，自尊心强，来自巴西，英语很难，老师劝我参加写 作比赛，老师还曾经取笑我蹩脚的英语。这是我拒绝参赛的原因。So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail? His reply: Because I love yo
17、ur stories. If youre willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this. Encouraged by his words. I agreed to give it a try.第二段讲我在老师的鼓励下决定试一下。I chose Paul Revered horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith （银匠）in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to
18、 warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horses mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny, and unlikely to be anyone elses choice.第三段讲我决定用一匹老马的视角来完成我的比赛。是一个与众不同的选择。志在必得的样子。What did the horse think, as sped through the night? Did he get tired? Have doubts? Di
19、d he want to quit? I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revered horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I cheeked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half-dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few o
20、f them.第四段讲我的写作构思，遇到困难，想要放弃。但是老马的精神激励了我。我做了好多举措来订正写作 的错误，比如求人订正自己的文章，到图书馆查阅资料等作出种种努力完善自己的写作。When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud and said, Great. Now, write it again. I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given
21、 way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didnt win. I wouldnt care.第五段讲的老师让我一遍又一遍的写作，打磨，我已经不在乎胜负了，只是想把文章写好这种执着 给了我很大的快乐，得奖与否不重要了。最终我上交了文章。总结：文章塑造了一个不怕吃苦的我，从不爱写作到乐于一遍遍修改，很执着，也很聪明，可以选择从 马的视角来表达想法。文章还塑造了一个性格开朗阳光的老师，有智慧，有温度，巧妙的用循循善诱的方式帮助了我从抗拒写 作到最后不断修改不断改进，是一个幽默，有智慧，有爱心的老师。第四部分：开始构思情节，升华主题A few weeks late
22、r, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the mews.读后续写注意段落衔接：当我快要遗忘的时候，消息传来了。写作的题眼在消息，在于意外。根据下一段的after the award presentation.（颁奖后）来推测，我是获得奖品，成功了。这一段从news往下延伸,消息的内容是获奖了。我的得奖的心理描写。 几天后（以时间为线索），我去参加颁奖晚会，（场面描写），获奖感言，揭示我为什么获奖归 结为自己坚持不懈的修改,这一切离不开老师的帮助恍然大悟，都是老师的指点，甚至是激将法。 得到提升，心理描写（感恩，愧疚），为下文去见老师埋下
23、伏笔。I went to my teacher9 office after the award presentation. 衔接：推测老师的反应。老师的语言描写，师生的心理对话描写，行动描写等进行场面描写。 塑造一个幽默，低调，有智慧的老师，突出主旨：坚韧不拔，百折不挠，贵在坚持就一定能成功。 离开办公室，走向光明的门口，我得到了力量，走向美好的未来。Possible Version:A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the mews. I relayed to me that I got the f
24、irst prize and invited me to the award ceremony the following day. This was an agreeable surprise. I had thought I did not care, but I did. Curiosity impulsed me to step on the stage of the ceremony, with applause exploding around, I was awarded the best writing award fo】my special perspective of an
25、 old horse, which was neve】 been used before, due to my funny description and wild imagination, yes, I did it finally! But without him, my social studies teacher, I couldnt have make it. I must find him and thank him in peison.I went to my teacher office after the award presentation. Walking straigh
26、t to him, I spied him reaching out a hand in welcome. Seeing the prize in my hand, he said, “ I know you can!” His face glowed when I gave him the prize as a gift. The office was brimful of blissfbl giggles and whispers, with an air of gaiety spieading everywhere. But how did you know I can? What if
27、 I failed? He held my a门ns and pointed out of the window to the sky and said, “ Look at the sky, it belongs to you, you can fly as long as you strive foi it.” A warm beam of sunshine took my eyes forward, I knew, it was a new start to a bright future.总结：这次的高考试题将师生情，坚持奋斗突出德育，在题目的构思上煞费苦心，还是很有深度和教育意义的。 希望同学们通过高考试题能够把高考的英语写作在形式上，比如用词，语法等方面上升一个层次，在做人做 事上也要有相应的提升。祝大家不断进取!