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1、热点01书面表达之常态化防疫（教师版）（建议用时：30分钟）命题趋势中考书面表达题贴近学生实际生活，紧密联系热点话题，写作话题真实从而让考生有话 可写。书面表达情景实用性程度高，上海试题都符合同学们的认知水平和日常生活经历，题 目设计关注学生成长，注意培养其良好的道德品质和健全的人格。今年疫情反复，尤其近期， 全国多点爆发，疫情防控尤为重要，常态化防疫无疑是今年的火爆热点之一。满分技巧写作思路培养中考英语写作评分标准:作文评价基本要求内容（8分） 内容切题、充实、不写废话；意思连贯，表达清楚、准确、完整语法（8分）语言基本正确；用语规范、无或少见语法错误；拼写、大小写和标点正确结构（4分）词汇
2、和句式句型运用恰当自如；文中有值得肯定的好句型和表达形式（每次考试可能按照对扣分情况做微调，但总体8+8+4原则不变）实际评分标准：l.Globalscoring 整体评分:很多老师其实不是每个部分分项评分，很多情况下，阅读完第一句第二句在脑海里给出 一个大致的该学生的起评点，12+, 15+, 10+,所以首句很重要，首句以及后面的一句会对 该起评点多少有一定作用。2 .字数问题：80-90最佳，105以上啰嗦影响评分，60字以下直接扣内容分3-4分。中考写作要把握 “止损”原则，不要一味地多写。首先中考试卷部分大致格子加上利用空隙最大程度只能完成 115字左右，从来也没有老师因为你多写而给
3、你额外分数，在完成写作后，多写只能增加 “失误”“错误”的可能性。3 .要点问题：根据要求如果以下要点仅供参考，不包括不会直接扣分，不要受到要点干扰。但实际情 况中，不包括任何一条得高分非常少。所谓Guided Writing提示，是给学生扩展思路的。【答案】例文How to protect ourselves from the virusAs we all know, COVID-19 has influenced us a lot. Although the virus has many variations, there are some ways to avoid catching i
4、t.First, we should remember to wear masks in public. We should also not go to crowded places. Remember the more people there are, the greater risk you will have. Second, we should wash our hands and open windows to let fresh air in. Whats more, we should get vaccinated. Last but not least, we should
5、 eat more vegetables and do plenty of exercise.Although the virus is serious, we shouldnt be afraid of it. We need to take action to fight against it.【详解】题干解读：该题目属于记叙文写作。写作时注意一定要紧紧围绕“怎样保护自己远离病毒”这一主 题展开叙述。内容主要包括谈论远离病毒的建议和方法，如在公众场所佩戴口罩，不到人多的地方；勤 洗手、开窗通风；积极接种疫苗等方面，另外这里还要补充自己的建议。内容要积极向上，条理要清 晰。写作指导：本文写作
6、应该使用第一人称。时态应根据情境运用一般现在时和一般将来时。可以根据要求 分三部分叙述。第一部分开门见山，引出新冠疫情之下要做好防护；第二部分分述疫情防护的建议，要 具体，有简单的理由；第三部分总结全文，表达感受，感情升华。七.自古以来，“团结就是力量”一直是华夏民族战胜困难的精神力量。在刚刚过去的4月份，虽上海 疫情形势严峻，但全国各地积极援沪，从各方面共同助力上海渡过难关。请结合下图，以“Unity is Strength”为题，写一篇英文短文，向外国友人介绍我们是如何发扬“一方有难，八方支持”的精神对抗疫 情。要求：(1)不能出现真实的个人身份信息； (2)词数110左右。参考词汇：CO
7、VID-19 pandemic新冠疫情，nucleic acid testing核酸检测Unity is Strength【答案】例文：Unity is StrengthUnity plays an important role in the hearts of Chinese people. It can help us face any problems we meet.In April, Shanghai was fighting the COVID-19 pandemic, but people from other places in China all gave a helping
8、 hand. Zhejiang Province sent many groups of volunteers to Shanghai. They tried to support the local doctors and nurses to do the nucleic acid testings day and night. Shangdong Province also sent a large number of vegetables and meat to Shanghai and the volunteers even helped to give away the food t
9、o make sure local people have enough food. Cars of masks and medicine were sent to Shanghai immediately so that everyone could wear a mask and get the medicine in time.With the help of people all around China, we believe we have enough strength to beat COVID-19.【详解】1 .题干解读：该题目属于记叙文写作。写作时注意一定要紧紧围绕“团结
10、就是力量”这一主题展开 叙述。内容是要通过4月份全国各地支援上海抗疫的事例来体现“一方有难，八方支援”的精神。内容要积 极向上，条理要清晰。2.写作指导：本文写作时态应根据情境运用一般现在时和一般过去时。可以根据要求分三部分叙述。第一 部分开门见山，提出要阐明的主题“团结就是力量”；第二部分根据要求展开叙述全国各地援沪的事例，要 具体；第三段总结全文，表达感受，感情升华，再次阐明团结的重要性。八.最近全国不少地区疫情严重，当地政府倡导全民每日核酸，大家积极抗疫。但社会上还存在对 防疫志愿者态度恶劣的现象，如果你就读的学校学生会打算面向全校同学写一封倡议书，呼吁大家尊重 他们。请你根据以下要点帮
11、助学生会完成这封倡议书内容。要点如下：原因：1 .防疫志愿者放弃休息时间；2不顾危险、不求回报；建议：1 .做核酸时主动出示健康码； 要求：1 .词数80个左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数；2,内容必须包括要点，可适当发挥，使短文完整、语言流畅；3,可自由发挥一到两点自己的建议。参考词汇：a nucleic acid test （核酸检测），health code （健康码）Dear friends,Dear friends,Were writing this letter to call on everyone to show respect to the healthvolunteers.T
12、he Student Union【答案】例文Dear friends,Im writing this letter to call on everyone to show respect to the health volunteers. Because they give up their rest time to help us. And they keep order regardless of danger. Besides, they ask fbr nothing, just hoping to control the spread of the virus.So I hope e
13、veryone can respect them. First, we should follow the orders of volunteers, not complain about the trouble caused by the virus. Second, we should wear masks not only to protect ourselves but also to keep volunteers away from danger. Third, take the initiative to show the health code when making nucl
14、eic acid. Last, we shouldnt go to crowded places but stay indoors as much as possible.I really hope that the health volunteers can be respected by us.The Student Union【详解】1.题干解读：题目要求针对防疫期间，人们对防疫志愿者的态度恶劣这一现象写一封倡议书， 呼吁大家尊重他们；要求包含所有提示内容，并适当发挥。2 .写作指导：本文应以一般现在时，第一人称口吻来行文。此作文可采用3段落格式，第一段：阐述尊 重防疫志愿者的原因；第二
15、段：提出如何尊重他们的建议；第三段：再次呼吁大家尊重防疫志愿者。保 证语句通顺，条理清晰。无单词和语法错误。4 .特殊案例：白卷0分，与本文无任何关系的作文6分为最高分。5 .总体印象分是一把双刃剑。不能为了写总体印象分，用所谓难词，结果发生语法错误，扣语言分，还要扣总体印象 分。何为总体印象分？就是有气势，有腔调，适合中学老师口味，不能高于他们的认知标 准。10 年前 When I was five, I listened to radio.11 年前 Try to do sth. stop doing现在的形势 I am a boy who is keen on musicDo all t
16、he possible means to do sth.Certainly, I will.For the reason that.Only by .can we .I am deeply convinced thatTake up painting12 一模二模考试写作满分情况比较少，一般一模二模会比中考真题批分相对严格。 评卷流程：电脑阅卷2人一组，组长台上监控。两人分值不能相差太大4分（仅供参考），超过额定分值退 回重新批改（仅供参考）。阅卷速度其实阅卷者每天有一定的阅卷量，真正停留在每个考生的阅卷时间其实还是有限的，但 一定是充足的。教师每天在完成大量阅卷工作后，也会有一定的审美疲劳，
17、所以首句一定要出彩。（供 参考）教师实际阅卷重点：1、2、3、4、5、首句：首句出错，印象非常糟糕连接词/逻辑末句内容/例子模版使用/套题常态化防疫一.根据要求完成大作文，词数：80-100词。当前，“防疫”进入常态化，请围绕从我做起，共同抗疫”这个主题，为学校宣传栏的“英语天地”写一封倡议书。提示：1.非必要不离葫；勤洗手；戴口罩(masks)；保持安全社交距高(a safe social distance)； 2 .不聚集；不去人群密集的地方；要求：1.要求语言连贯，语法准确，层次清晰，书写规范。3 .文章必须包括所给提示内容，并可适度发挥。4 .文章的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。【答
18、案】例文：Ladies and gentlemen,Im Li Hua. Recently many people from all over the world lost their lives because of the COVID-19. The fight against the COVID-19 will last for a long time. In order to keep safe and healthy, I will give you some advice.Staying at home is the best way. You can keep in touch
19、with your family and friends by video chat instead of getting together or having parties. When you go out, remember to wear masks. Try to use your mobile phones to pay while shopping. After you get home, wash your hands immediately. Youd better not go to the crowded places or go abroad. If you have
20、to, remember to keep a social distance.Im sure we will win the fight against the COVID-19 if we work together.【详解】1 .题十解读：题目要求根据提示要点，写一份共同抗议的倡议书，提出一些建议，可以适当的 发挥，写作时要运用正确的英语表达，要选用恰当的词汇和短语。2.写作指导：写作时要紧扣主题，本文应该用第二人称来介绍内容；时态采用一般现在时，提出建议可 以多用情态动词；在介绍内容时，力求语言准确，内容完整，保证行文连贯，条理清晰。二.一场波及全球的疫情，让人们深深懂得了生命的价值。作
21、为中学生，我们更应该懂得珍爱我们 年轻的生命。请你根据下面的提示，以“Treasure Our Lives”为题，用英语写一篇有关如何珍爱生命的短 文。要点：1 遵守交通规则，注意食品安全，防止意外溺水。2 .交友谨慎，不沉迷于手机及游戏，提高安全意识。3 .倡议：拥有快乐、充实、健康的生活方式要求：1 .短文应包括所有要点，可适当发挥，不要逐句翻译；2 .语言表达准确，条理清晰，书写工整，句式规范；3 .词数80左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数；参考词汇：drown溺水V.Treasure Our LivesEach person only lives once, so we must tre
22、asure our lives. What should we do?【答案】例文Treasure Our LivesEach person only lives once, so we must treasure our lives. What should we do?First of all, we should eat healthy and safe food instead of fast food or junk food every day. When we go out, we must obey the traffic rules. If we want to go swi
23、mming, we are supposed to go somewhere safe so that we can avoid drowning. And we should follow the school rules, dont run in the hallways and be careful when we do sports.Besides, we must be careful in choosing our friends and keep away from dangerous people. We shouldnt play phones or computer gam
24、es fbr a long time. Whats more, we cant go to Net Bar or chat with strangers online and we shouldnt stay out too long especially at night.Life is valuable, we should take it seriously. Wed better live a happy, colorful and healthy life. Then we will study better and make our dreams come true.【详解】总体分
25、析匚题材：本文是一篇说明文； 时态：时态为“一般现在时”；匚提示：写作要点已给出，根据下面的提示，以“Treasure Our Lives”为题，用英语写一篇有关如何珍爱生 命的短文。写作步骤第一步，开头已给出，点名我们要珍惜我们的生命；第二步，具体阐述我们应该怎么做；第三步，总结，表明自己对生命的看法。亮点词汇 first of all 首先 instead of 而不是 be supposed to应该做某事keep away from 远离 come true 实现高分句型If we want to go swimming, we are supposed to go somewhere
26、 safe so that we can avoid drowning. (if 弓 I 导 的条件状语从句；s。that引导的目的状语从句)三.自新冠病毒(C0VID-19)在全世界传播蔓延以来，健康成了一个重耍的话题。请你以“How to keep healthy”为题写一篇短文，说说你的看法和建议。要点：(1)我们应该多吃水果和蔬菜；(2)我们应该锻炼身体，保证睡眠；(3)出门必须戴口罩(mask),回家勤洗手。要求：(1)参考要点内容，可适当发挥不抗辩(2)语句通顺，意思连贯，书写工整；(3)文章不得出现任何真实信息(姓名、校名和地名等)；(4)词数：不少于80词(开头已给出，但不计入
27、总词数)。How to keep healthyAs we all know, health is the most important thing in our lives, especially with the COVID-19 spreading.【答案】例文How to keep healthyAs we all know, health is the most important thing in our lives, especially with the COVID-19 spreading.First of all, we should eat more fruits and
28、 vegetables to ensure a balanced nutrition. Only in this way can we improve our physical strength.Secondly, we should take more exercise and do more exercise. Commit to at least three hours of exercise a week. At the same time, you should pay attention to sleep, sleep a full 8 hours a day.Finally, i
29、t is necessary to wear masks when we go out and wash our hands frequently.I hope we all stay healthy and safe.【详解】总体分析 题材：本文是一篇材料写作； 时态：时态为“一般现在时”；匚提示：根据所给提示完成写作，不能遗漏信息，以“How to keep healthy”为题介绍如何在疫情的情况下 保持健康，添加适当细节，使文章内容更加丰富。写作步骤第一步，点题说明文章主题是介绍如何保持健康；第二步，按照题目所给内容介绍保持健康的方法；第三步，提出自己的希望，希望所有人都保持健康和安全
30、。亮点词汇 at least 至少At the same time 同时pay attention to 注意高分句型Finally, it is necessary to wear masks when we go out and wash our hands frequently, （it 作形式主语， 动词不 定式作真正的主语，由when引导的时间状语从句）Commit to at least three hours of exercise a week.（祈使句）Only in this way can we improve our physical strength.（侄力装句）四.
31、岁月静好，不过是有人替你负重前行。面对新冠病毒疫情，没有人能够置身事外。在我们为“逆 行者”点赞的同时,我们也要做好自己的分内事并承担一些责任。请以“Live a safe and colourful life”为 题，写一篇英语短文，内容必须包括以下要点。如何自我保护1 .在家时：保持室内卫生，2 .在外：戴口罩，如何度过空闲时间1 .发展兴趣爱好（至少两种及其好处）2 .当志愿者（计划做的事）注意：1、文中不能出现真实的地名、校名、人名等信息；2、词数在80-100之间，已给出的文字不计入总词数。Live a safe and colourful lifeSince COVID-19 br
32、oke out again, many people have to stay at home in their free time to protect themselves as well as others. As a result, I also need to plan my life well to make it safe and colourful.【答案】例文Live a safe and colourful lifeSince COVID-19 broke out again, many people have to stay at home in their free t
33、ime to protect themselves as well as others. As a result, I also need to plan my life well to make it safe and colourful.To protect ourselves, we should seldom go out. When we have to go out, we must wear face masks. When we stay at home, we must keep the room clean and tidy.Besides, we should do wh
34、at is interesting and meaningful to make our life colorful. First, we should know how to spend our spare time. So we should learn some new skills. For example, we can learn how to take photos or learn a new language. Maybe it is challenging at first. But it will benefit us a lot. Second, we should k
35、now something about art and enjoy different art forms. Last but not the least, we should often do some sports. Because health is the most important to all of us.I hope everybody can have a safe and colorful life and enjoy every day.【详解】1.题干解读：该题目属于记叙文写作，在写作时应承接短文开头；内容是根据所给的材料，以 “Live a safe and colo
36、urful life”为题，写一篇英语短文，介绍一下在疫情期间，你是如何自我保护和度过空 闲时间的。2.写作指导：本文应该用第一人称来叙述作文内容；时态采用一般现在时为主；第一段承接短文开头；其 次介绍如何自我保护；第三是介绍如何度过空闲时间；最后是祝愿。行文确保语句通顺，无单词语法错 误。五.生在中国是幸运的，生活在中国是幸福的。新冠肺炎就像一个没有硝烟的考验，彰显了我们祖 国的伟大，我们党的卓越，我们中华民族的众志成城！作为一名中学生，面对新冠，你是如何做的？请 以，Tm the little guard of heal th”为题，并根据要点和要求，用英语写一篇短文。要点：你对新型冠状病
37、毒(Novel coronavirus)的认识；(2)你如何预防新冠；(3)是否有信心战胜病毒。要求：(1)文中不要出现所在学校的校名和师生姓名；(2)词数100左右。Im the little guard of health【答案】例文：Fm the little guard of healthBecause of Novel coronavirus, we Chinese have had a special time. The Novel coronavirus is not terrible, the key is how we deal with it. Nobody wants t
38、o get the disease, but how should we prevent it and protect ourselves? Here are my suggestions.First, we should wear a mask if we have to go out. Dont go to crowded places. Second, we should wash our hands with running water or soap slowly and carefully. And remember to open the windows regularly to
39、 keep our room clean. Besides, cover our nose and mouth when sneezing. If we dont feel well, go to see a coctor. Most important of all, we should form a good habit. Go to bed early and get up on time. Be sure to have enough sleep, and take more exercise!I strongly believe we can keep healthy if we f
40、ollow the suggestions.【详解】1.题干解读:本题要求以Im the little guard of health”为题,围绕提示要点写一篇100词左右的 短文，内容包括：对新冠的认识、预防新冠的方法和是否有信心战胜新冠。2.写作指导：本文主要以第一和第三人称进行写作，时态主要采用一般现在时；写作内容应围绕提示要 点进行展开，要点2的写作可使用连接词（如First、Besides等）来使文章层次清晰；写作完成后应确保 文章内容齐全，行文流畅，语言符合规范和英文表达习惯。六.一场突如其来的新冠病毒疫情，打破了所有人的生活节奏。尽管病毒多次变异（variation）,无论 是德
41、尔塔还是奥密克戎，我们的应对方法都万变不离其宗严格做好个人防护。请以“How to protect ourselves from the virus （病毒）”为题写一篇文章。要点提示：1 .在公众场所佩戴口罩，不到人多的地方；2.勤洗手、开窗通风；3.积极接种疫苗；4 要求：1.写作要点齐全，并做适当发挥；2.词数：80词左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）。参考词汇：mask 口罩get vaccinated接种疫苗How to protect ourselves from the virusAs we all know, COVID-19 has influenced us a lot. Although the virus has many variations, there are some ways to avoid catching it.