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1、读后续写原材料：Paulgrabbed hisbat and glove, and raced out of the door towards theSteves. Summer vacation just began. The boys planned to play baseball every day, so they could make the team in the following semester.Paulwas waiting outside forSteve. What are you doing? Wheres your stuff?Steveasked, liftin
2、g his bat onto his shoulder.Paulshook his head, I have tocleanMr.Thompsons garage before I can go. With his broken arm, he cant do it himself. My mom always volunteers me tohelptheThompsons. She thinks theyre kind of old and cant afford to hire a cleaner.To get the work done earlier,Steveoffered to
3、help. The boys went down the block to theThompsons and got started. They found acoupleof brooms. Before they swept, they put boxes scattered around the garage floor on shelves. AsPaulput a big box on ashelf, it fell off and with it fell an envelope. He picked it up. It wasnt sealed, so he opened it.
4、 Out of his surprise, there were several one hundred dollar bills inside.Youve got to see this. He pulled out the bills and showedSteve, It just fell down when the box fell. Theres got to be several hundred dollars here.Paullooked pastSteveto thegaragedoor and continued, Nobodys here. If we take som
5、e, I bet no one will ever know. Before his voice died away,Paulhad already drawn out one bill and stuffed it into his pocket.Stevefrowned and shook his head. Are you crazy? Thatsstealing.Paulignored him and protested, Well, I do a lot of chores for them and dont getpaid. Its not really stealing. Its
6、 kind of payment for my hard work. And one hundred will do for a bat and glove inIgos Sports Store. With this,Paulput the rest money back.Stevewas about to grab the money fromPauls pocket when they heard a voice, Hello, boys. Come in for a chocolate cake!Imade one for you.Paragraph 1：At the sight of
7、 Mr.Thompson,PaulandStevefroze in shock.Paragraph 2：When they were about to leave, Mr.ThompsonhandedPaula brand new bat and glove.已知线索：Steve邀约Paul外出打棒球Paul答应妈妈帮Thompson先生打扫车库Steve提议一同干活然后再去玩打扫时有信封掉落孩子们发现大量现金Paul想据为己有Steve极力打消Paul的想法。可续写线索：Paul 与Steve之间会有争吵？Thompson夫妇会发现他们的行为吗？Thompson拿来蛋糕后两位孩子会有怎样的思
8、考？设置问题链：Para.1: Q1: How did the two boys react?Q2:What did Mr. Thompson say?Q3:Whatwas Pauls inner thought when he was having the cake?Q4:How long did they finish the task?Para.2: Q1: How did Paul take the bat and the glove?Q2:Why did Mr. Thompson give Paul the gift?Q3:What did Paul decide to do whe
9、n receiving the gift?Q4:What lesson did Paul learn from this experience?参考范文“Boys, I baked a chocolate cake,” Mr. Thompson walked into the garage. Catching sight of Mrs Thompson, the two froze with fear and followed his step with racing hearts. A few minutes later, they were served with large slices
10、 of cake. Delicious as the cake was, they didnt have any appetite. Mr. Thompson seemed to notice something was wrong, “Boys, do you like the cake?” Paul nodded with his eyes dropping to avoid any eye contact with Mr. Thompson and growing guilt crept into his heart.When they were about to leave, Mr.
11、Thompson handed Paul a brand-new bat and glove. Paul looked at them, his face blushing with shame. “Th . thanks so much.” Voice trembling, Paul then bravely poured out everything about the envelope and apologized for his behavior. Mr. Thompson, instead of boiling with anger, patted him on the back a
12、nd said gently: “Oh, thank you for helping me find the envelope. I totally forgot where I had put it.” In that split moment, it dawned on him that what really matters is simply honesty and kindness.分析：1.Catching sight of Mrs Thompson, the two froze with fear and followed his step with racing hearts.
13、Ving+句子+with复合结构， 写出了两个小孩的害怕。2.Delicious as the cake was, they didnt have any appetite.As的倒装写出了小孩有心事的表现。3.Paul looked at them, his face blushing with shame.句子+独立主格结构写出了Paul的羞愧。4.In that split moment, it dawned on him that what really matters is simply honesty and kindness.It dawned on sb. that.和 wha
14、t matters is .句型来升华主题. 下水作文：Paragraph 1:Boys，I baked a chocolate cake，Mr. Thompson walked into the garage.Quickly thrusting the money into his pocket, Paul nudged Steve with his ankle, signaling him not to say anything about the money. Steves face flushed red and he was yelling in his heart, “when d
15、id Paul become so dishonest and selfish?” However, at no time would he betray his best friend. Both boys quickly regained their composure and forced a response, “thank you so much, Mr. Thompson, we could hardly wait to sample your yummy chocolate cake!” Then, they followed Mr. Thompson into the kitc
16、hen and munched on the cake with a wandering mind. Paragraph 2:When they were about to leave, Mr.Thompson handed Paul a brand-new bat and glove. “I hope this can win you a ticket to the freshman team!” Mr. Thompson said sincerely. Face burning red, never had Paul anticipated this unexpected gift, es
17、pecially with Mr. Thompsons money envelop bulging up in his pocket. Taking over the bat and glove from Mr. Thompson, Paul reached into his pocket and handed him the envelop back, “we found this in your garage.” Expression changing from surprise to question and finally to approval, Mr. Thompson sang
18、high praise for Paul and Stevens noble deed. Cracking the brightest smile he had ever had,Steve knew his honest and decent friend Paul had made a successful comeback.分析：1.Quickly thrusting the money into his pocket, Paul nudged Steve with his ankle, signaling him not to say anything about the money.
19、thrust, nudge, signal三个动词和非谓语的配合，让整个画面感很足。2.Both boys quickly regained their composure and forced a response, “thank you so much, Mr. Thompson, we could hardly wait to sample your yummy chocolate cake!”gainonescomposure高级短语的使用and force动词的使用，使得文章更加高大上。3.they followed Mr. Thompson into the kitchen and
20、 munched on the cake with a wandering mind.这里with a wondering mind 的使用写出了小孩有心思。4.Expression changing from surprise to question and finally to approval, Mr. Thompson sang high praise for Paul and Stevens noble deed.From .to. to.写出了Thompson先生的表现三变化，同时sing high praise for.短语的使用也给文章增彩不少。5.Cracking the b
21、rightest smile he had ever had,Steve knew his honest and decent friend Paul had made a successful comeback.Crack the bright smile. crack的使用写出小孩发自内心的笑。 下水作文“Boys, I baked a chocolate cake.”Mr. Thompson walked into the garage.Thrusting the money into his pocket, Paul quickly took the cake,and said “Th
22、ank you”, trying to act normally.Ashamed and nervous, Steve just had the cake, lowering his head all the time!After a simple and short conversation, Mr. Thompson was ready to go.There followed a couple of minutes when Paul was in a dilemma as to whether to hand in the money or keep it himself. Howev
23、er,an inner voice kept on telling him that he should take it as his payment. It was not long before the two boys finished cleaning the garage.When they were about to leave, Mr. Thompson handed Paul a brand-new bat and glove.Afraid to look into Mr. Thompsons eyes, Paul took the bat and glove,shame ob
24、viously displaying on his face.“ You are a good boy, thank you for helping me.” said Mr. Thompson sincerely.“Not.not at all.” stammered Paul as he couldnt took his eyes off the bat and gloves.Musteringuphis courage,hefinallytook out the money, told Mr. Thompson what he had done and asked for forgiving.“You arereallybrave to admit your mistake.”said Mr. Thompson as he patted Pauls shoulder.Letting outasigh of relief,Paul realized thathonesty mattered most.学科网（北京）股份有限公司