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1、(II)How to make your writing more beautifulComparisonStep 1 On hearing a terrible noise,Tom,a seven-year-old boy,who was watching TV in the living room,rushed out immediately,only to find it was a daydream.Tom is a boy.He is seven years old.He was watching TV in the living room when he heard a terri
2、ble noise.He rushed out immediately.He found it was just a daydream.句式单调句式单调 结构松散结构松散 断断续续断断续续 吞吞吐吐吞吞吐吐 句式灵活句式灵活 结构紧凑结构紧凑 上下连贯上下连贯 一气呵成一气呵成 Our monitor is a girl.She is responsible for her work and takes good care of her classmates.She studies very hard.She is good at all the subjects.Her maths is e
3、specially good.She likes sports.she is a key member of our volleyball team.She has set a good example to us.行文松散行文松散 不连贯不连贯 Our monitor is a girl,who is responsible for her work and takes good care of her classmates.She studies so hard that She is good at all the subjects,especially her maths.Whats
4、more,She likes sports.she is a key member of our volleyball team.In a word,She has set a good example to us.行文连贯行文连贯 表达流畅表达流畅What characteristics do you think well-written essays share?Summary英语英语高分高分书面表达的特点：书面表达的特点：1.准确性（不跑题，要点全，表达准确）准确性（不跑题，要点全，表达准确）2.条理性（合理布局文章结构，层次清楚）条理性（合理布局文章结构，层次清楚）3.简洁多样性（语言
5、简洁，句式多样）简洁多样性（语言简洁，句式多样）4.流畅性（行文连贯）流畅性（行文连贯）5.美观性（书写规范整洁）美观性（书写规范整洁）4.流畅性（行文连贯）流畅性（行文连贯）3.简洁多样性（语言简洁，句式多样）简洁多样性（语言简洁，句式多样）PracticeStep 2Section 1 Try to make the following sentencesmore advanced.1.The teacher speaks very fast.I cant follow her.The teacher speaks so fast that I cant followSo fast doe
6、s the teacher speak that I cant 2.Exercise can build up our body.It can also reduce diseases.Exercise can not only build up but also reduceNot only can exercise build up but it can also reduce3.Scrooge was very rich,but he was unhappy.Although Scrooge was very rich,he was unhappy.Rich as/though Scro
7、oge was,he was unhappy.Despite the fact that Scrooge was rich,heInspite of/Despite his richness,Scrooge was Scrooge was very rich;he was unhappy,though.5.A terrible earthquake hit Wenchuan.It caused enormous economic losses and countless deaths.A Wenchuan,which causedAWenchuan,causing enormous econo
8、mic losses and killing countless people.AWenchuan,causinglosses and with countless people killed.AWenchuan.As a consequence,countless people got killed and many more became homeless.4.The Chinese athletes won so many gold medals.It excited us all.The Chinesemedals,which exited us all.What excited us
9、 all is thatThat the Chineseexcited us all.To our excitement,the Chinese athletes wonThe Chinese athletes won so many gold medals that it exited us all.6.We can develop our society without worrying about polluting the environment only in this way.Only in this way can we developwithoutOnly by taking
10、regular exercise can we keep fit.Only if we takecan we7.My mother was very busy.I had to help her.My mother was very busy,so I hadAs my mother was very busy,I had toMother being very busy,I had to 8.As soon as I got home,I wrote down what I had seen and heard.The moment/minute/instant I got home,IIm
11、mediately/Directly/Instantly I got home,IUpon/On getting home,I9.I didnt get her letter.I had to write again.I didnt get her letter,so I hadBecause/As I didnt,I had toNot having got,I had to10.I saw an old lady.She lay on the ground.I went over to help her._an old lady _on the ground,ISeeinglyingAs
12、time goes on,we have learned more and more._time _on,we have.Withgoing 温馨提示温馨提示（1）老用简单句老用简单句 表达不高级表达不高级老用复合句老用复合句 费力不流畅费力不流畅怎样来提升怎样来提升 长短相结合长短相结合长句是红花长句是红花 短句是绿叶短句是绿叶红花配绿叶红花配绿叶 定能得高分定能得高分在追求高级表达的同时在追求高级表达的同时,务必注意语言的务必注意语言的得体性得体性,即所用句式及内容要与该文体相吻合。即所用句式及内容要与该文体相吻合。June 13th,2003 Friday Fine With the d
13、evelopment of society,peoples living conditions are improving a lot.As a result,an increasing number of people own private cars.On my way to school this morning,I witnessed a traffic accident:a car hit an old man 温馨提示温馨提示（2）Section 2 Choose proper transitional expressions to complete the following t
14、wo passages.Practice 1 _,some students cheat in examinations at school.As students,we often take examinations,2_ sometimes we have too many examinations which are too difficult for us.3_,some of us are lazy and dont work hard at their lessons.4_ when taking examinations,they sometimes cheat in order
15、 to get better result to please their parents and teachers.5_ ,it is wrong to cheat in examinations 6_it breaks the rules of schools.We students should be honest and try to get good results by studying hard instead of cheating in examinations.7_ ，we should improve our study methods and get well prep
16、ared for examinations.butOn the othe handSoIn my opinionbecauseIn additionAs is known to all I will spend this summer holiday in the countryside.Modern and convenient as the city is,therere still some problems,1_ air pollution,crowdedness and noise.2_,I can enjoy a comfortable and quiet life in the
17、countryside,where the air is fresh and the water is clean.I can go boating,fishing,and swimming in the lake.3_,I can also climb the hills.All this will be interesting and good for my health.4_,I can learn more about nature.1.A.for example B.for instance C.such as 2.A.Therefore B.In this way C.As you
18、 know3.A.Whats more B.Whats worse C.On the contrary4.A.In my opinion B.More importantly C.To be honestCCAB 常用常用过渡语过渡语分类分类*开头语开头语 1.As is known to all,2.It is known to all that 3.As you know，4.nowadays,recently,at present,currently 5.with the development of Summary 常用过渡语分类常用过渡语分类*总结语总结语 1.all in all/
19、in a word/to sum up 2.in brief/in short 3.in my opinion/as far as Im concerned 4 常用过渡语分类常用过渡语分类*转折语转折语 1.however,2.on the contrary 3.to ones surprise regret disappointment joy/delight 常用常用过渡语过渡语分类分类*表递进表递进 1.besides/whats more/moreover/furthermore/in addition 2.whats worse/worse still/to make things
20、 worse 3.what surprised me most is that 4.more importantly 常用过渡语分类常用过渡语分类*表因果表因果 1.as a result(of)2.as a consequence(of)3.thanks to 4.due to.5.高考书面表达高考书面表达第五档第五档评分标准评分标准 分数：分数：21-25 分分 要求：要求：完全完成了试题规定的任务完全完成了试题规定的任务 *覆盖所有内容要点覆盖所有内容要点 *应用了较多的语法结构和词汇应用了较多的语法结构和词汇 *语法结构或词汇有些许错误，但为尽量使用较复语法结构或词汇有些许错误，但为尽
21、量使用较复 杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言应用杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言应用 能力能力 *有效的使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构有效的使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构 紧凑紧凑 完全达到了预期的写作目的完全达到了预期的写作目的 高考书面表达高考书面表达第四档第四档评分标准评分标准 分数：分数：16-20 分分 要求：要求：完全完成了试题规定的任务完全完成了试题规定的任务 *虽漏掉虽漏掉1-2个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容 *应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求 *语法结构或词汇应用基本准确，有些许错误主要语法
22、结构或词汇应用基本准确，有些许错误主要 因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致 *利用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文结构紧凑利用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文结构紧凑 达到了预期的写作目的达到了预期的写作目的第三档第三档 分数：分数：11-15 分分第二档第二档 分数：分数：6-10 分分第一档第一档 分数：分数：1-5分分Remember：Rome isnt built in a day.The more you read，accumulate and practise，the better your writing will be！Wish everyone progre
23、ss in writing!北京市有大量的出租车司机，他们每天北京市有大量的出租车司机，他们每天全心全意为乘客服务，对北京市的交通起着全心全意为乘客服务，对北京市的交通起着重要作用。他们起早贪黑，赚钱养家糊口。重要作用。他们起早贪黑，赚钱养家糊口。有一次我不小心把手机忘在了车上，但当我有一次我不小心把手机忘在了车上，但当我与司机联系上之后，他立即开车将手机送给与司机联系上之后，他立即开车将手机送给了我，我真感动不已。了我，我真感动不已。段落练笔段落练笔 There are a large number of taxi drivers in Beijing，serving passengers
24、heart and soul and playing a very important role in the traffic of Beijing.In order to make some money to support their families,they work from dawn till night.One day I got off a taxi in a hurry with my cellphone left in it.On hearning what had happened,the driver drove to my home as fast as possib
25、le and gave it to me.Seeing my cellphone again,I was too excited to say a word段落练笔段落练笔Remember：Rome isnt built in a day.The more you read，accumulate and practise，the better your writing will be！Wish everyone progress in writing!避生就熟，进行避生就熟，进行“曲线曲线”表达表达巧用思维拐弯法。当表达某一意思有困难时，巧用常用词语或自己熟悉的词语来进行表达，可达到同样效果，又可避免出错。在表达过程中，应选用自己熟悉的和有把握的词汇及句型，千万不能自己去创造或生搬硬套汉语式的句子。如果遇到确实难以回避的内容，一时又想不起确切的表达法，那就要“拐弯抹角”地去表达，尽量找同义或近义的词语或句型来代替，英语有句谚语：“All roads lead to Rome.”这样既可节约时 间又可避免犯大的错误。