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1、英语四级考试作文精彩点评(2)英语四级考试作文精彩点评(2)例4.（11分段）Women are playing an increasingly important part in society today. More and more women go to work to earn money instead of keeping the house or looking after the children. Women have entered many fields of society including scientific field. As we know, many wo
2、men sports teams have won the worlds champions such as Chinese womens Volleyball Team.With the changes in their social role, womens position in the family has been improved as well. Husbands are not the masters of wives in many places. Husbands and wives are equal now. They join together to overcome
3、 difficulties and share happiness.In spite of these changes, the liberation of women has not been completely realized. Also in some places. Women are considered being “thing” belong to men. They have little chance to find jobs. They dont get equal pay for equal job. This is a problem must be solved
4、not only by society but also by women themselves.东方教化点评：切题。表达思想清晰，文字连贯，用词比较精确，但有少量语言错误，如“Also in some places. Women are considered being “thing” belong to men”，应改为“Also in some places，women are considered being the “things”that belong to men”例5.（14分段）Women are playing an increasingly important part
5、in society today. In Many countries, more and more women are acting as workers, farmers, scientists and even leaders. We can say that almost all jobs which men can do are done perfectly by women. Women are no longer looked down upon by society.With the changes in their social role, womens position i
6、n the family has been improved as well. Husband and wife are now equal in the family. They cope with problems of daily life together, and share happiness with each ther. Also, you can hardly find out that in todays families, women are being busy with dinners, whereas men comfortably sitting in armch
7、airs, reading newspapers.In spite of these changes, the liberation of women has not been completely realized. In spite of these changes, the liberation of women has not been completely realized. A number of men still jealously guard their rights, and regard women as incapable creature. Few women are allowed to attend important international meetings dominated by men. Thats really the problems we should solve immediately.东方教化点评：切题。论证充分，有劝服力，论证手段丰富（举例、正反）表达思想清晰，语言流畅，词汇丰富，连贯性好。用词精确，仅有个别小错误。p.s. 由于一些例文错误较多，点评中只是列举了部分的典型错误，而且为了保持原文面貌，编辑没有做过多的改动，所以欢迎大家一起来挑错，有问题和小水一起探讨。