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1、2016江苏高考英语读写类作文讲评-课件(PPT讲稿)Learning aims:To learn how to sum up the main idea of a short passage;To learn how to polish up your own writings;To correct some mistakes from your own writings.读写任务型写作分为两部分：读写任务型写作分为两部分：第一部分第一部分要求用要求用约约30个词概括所给短文的要点个词概括所给短文的要点，文，文体主要以议论文，记叙文或说明文为主。体主要以议论文，记叙文或说明文为主。第二部分第
2、二部分以约以约120个词就短文某一主题谈论自己的个词就短文某一主题谈论自己的经历并发表看法经历并发表看法。此项旨在着重考查学生学习英语的综合能力，特别此项旨在着重考查学生学习英语的综合能力，特别是阅读写作以及思维的能力。第一部分要求学生能是阅读写作以及思维的能力。第一部分要求学生能读懂文章，在读懂的基础上概括文章要点，所以阅读懂文章，在读懂的基础上概括文章要点，所以阅读能力和概括能力要求较高。读能力和概括能力要求较高。写作要求分析Technique Guides概括概括叙事性叙事性(narrative)文章文章主要内容一般应包括主要内容一般应包括四个方面的内容：四个方面的内容：1.什么人？什么
3、人？(Who)2.发生什么事情？发生什么事情？(What happened)3.目的如何目的如何/原因是什么？原因是什么？(Why)4.结果如何结果如何/什么启示或教训？什么启示或教训？(Consequence/Inspiration/Lesson)You may begin like these:1.The passage/story is mainly about(talks about)+a story/phenomenon where/that+从句从句2.The writer tells/shows/states us that 3.As is shown in the passag
4、e,4.What the passage tells/shows/states us is that 故事性阅读材料，应该用故事性阅读材料，应该用最简练的语言最简练的语言来说明故来说明故事事讲述讲述了什么，还可以了什么，还可以讲述该故事给你的启示讲述该故事给你的启示(inspiration)或其中的一个道理或其中的一个道理(principle)。At least 36 people died in a fatal stampede during New Year celebrations in Shanghai on January 1st,2015.The tragedy happened
5、at a crowded square in Shanghais gleaming Bund area at around 11:35 p.m.Most of the injured were young people in their twenties,a majority of them women.There were also college students and children.They were sent to several hospitals for treatment,including Changzheng Hospital,the Shanghai No.1 Peo
6、ples Hospital,Ruijin Hospital and Huangpu District Central Hospital.Lack of awareness over safety risk behind public gatherings and loose control at the scene contributed to the tragedy.The disorder at the scene also exposed the deficiency in emergency exercise and safety education.A profound lesson
7、 should be learned from the incident.For those areas with high safety risks,the authorities should have special emergency response plans and make sufficient analysis and assessment,including the arrangement of police,volunteers and supporting measures.参考1At least 36 people died in a fatal stampede s
8、tmpid during New Year celebrations in Shanghai on January 1st,2015,caused by lack of awareness over safety risk and loose control at the scene.(35)（马苏云）参考2A tragedy in which at least 36 people died during New Year celebrations in Shanghai raised peoples awareness of the security of public places.And
9、 the author analyzed the causes of the tragedy.（33字）(杨天一)参考3What the passage shows us is a stampede which happened in Shanghais Bund area several days ago,including the reasons why it happened and the measures authorities should take.(29字)(suggested answer)Transitionalsentences connecting your exper
10、ienceActually,in real life,everyone can have an experience of Having read the passage,I think of After reading the passage,I am lost in thought,which reminds me of What a touching story,which reminds me of How to polish up your writingGeneralAdvancedgetfinishlikecareconsideruseimportantacquire/attai
11、n/obtainaccomplish/completeappreciate/be fond of/prefer concerntakeinto consideration/account make use of/take advantage ofbe of vital/great importanceExercise1sadShe felt lonely and d_.She was really u_ about the way her father treated her.happyShe was feeling more c_ than before.Sandy will be d_ t
12、o see you.Im absolutely _ that you are coming.badSmoking in public is a/an _ habit.The weather is _.I found this manner is extremely _.The food looks _,but it tasted OK.greatHe is an _ player to watch.Her dance was an _ performance.Their last concert was really _.The film was absolutely _.What a _ i
13、dea.This travel was a/an _ experience.veryShe looks _ beautiful this tonight.Conditions have improved _over the past few years.Raising money for the homeless has been _ difficult.Self-confidence is _ vital to success.GeneralAdvancedsadhappybadgreatverydepressed/upset/in low spiritscheerful/delighted
14、/thrilled/pleasedawful/unpleasant/horribleamazing/admirable/awesome/brilliant/excellent/enjoyable/fantasticbadly/dramatically/especially/rather/pretty/perfectly/awfully/amazinglyIts important to obey the public regulations.Only if we do that,can we live in a peaceful,safe and beautiful society.(姜佳怡)
15、Some people like visiting some places which have lots of visitors.(蔡宜静)(prefer)Its of vital importance to obey the public regulations.Only if we perform them,can we live in a peaceful,safe and comfortable society.Some people prefer to visit some crowded interest of places rather than stay at home fo
16、r holiday.Exercise 2 Try to polish up the two sentences各各种种从从句句非非谓谓语语倒倒装装句句型型with复复合合结结构构强强调调句句型型省省略略句句型型祈祈使使句句型型虚虚拟拟语语气气优句鉴赏The more actions we take for public rules,the more advantages we will achieve from the society.In my opinion,if everyone who took part in the New Year celebrations had behaved
17、 well,the tragedy would not have happened.So it is obvious that everyone must have the awareness over safety risk,especially when in public places.巧用副词不让句子裸奔Obviously,most of people lack the consciousness of public safety.Surprisingly,the fatal stampede led to 36 deaths and dozens of injuries.Defini
18、tely,we should put our security in the first place.Personally,a series of prevention measures must be taken to guarantee public order.有没有副词效果确实不一样！I believe thatI suggest thatI hope thatI support thatI _ believe thatI _suggest thatI _hope thatI _support thatfirmlystronglysincerelyfully/completely/en
19、tirely/absolutely（1）Summarize incomplete idea（2）Misuse/misunderstand original passage（3）Too many mistakes made in sentence structures（4）Express opinions too early（5）Apply the suggestions from original passage（6）Too simple sentences本次作文中存在的问题：There are 36 young people dead in Shanghais gleaming Bund
20、area when they celebrated for the coming new year.(19字)(张周杰)A fatal stampede which happened during New Year celebrations in Shanghai made us pay attention to safety risk behind public gatherings.(21字)(王丽娟)学生习作改错（1）Summarize incomplete idea（2）Misuse/misunderstand original passage（3）Too many mistakes
21、made in sentence structures（4）Express opinions too early（5）Apply the suggestions from original passage（6）Too simple sentences本次作文中存在的问题：学生习作改错People will not follow public rules because of lacking of awareness over safety risk behind public gatherings and loose control at the scene contributed to th
22、e tragedy.(黄陈侃)As far as I am concerned,its everyones duty to obey and protect the public gatherings.(李佳鑫)order学生习作改错Second,people should expose the deficiency in emergency exercise and safety education.(施佳佳)In an emergency exercise,people will be in a panic.So when we are in an emergency exercise,w
23、e ought to keep calm.(杜天琴)strengthen（1）Summarize incomplete idea（2）Misuse/misunderstand original passage（3）Too many mistakes made in sentence structures（4）Express opinions too early（5）Apply the suggestions from original passage（6）Too simple sentences本次作文中存在的问题：学生习作改错During New Year celebrations in S
24、hanghai,because young people are lack of awareness over safety risk behind public gatherings resulting a fatal stampede happened,where 36 people died and many people injured.(蔡佳丽)If it is necessary for him to go to the places,what he always does is that finding an open place and staying there.(杨天一)o
25、f,were(to)findstay学生习作改错We always wait for a moment,then will we go on it.(徐菁玲)I think not only followed by travelers,but also the authorities should have special emergency response plans and make sufficient analysis and assessment.(陈嘉敏)We would rather wait in line than push our waythrough the crowd
26、.I think not only should travelers follow the public order,but also the authorities（1）Summarize incomplete idea（2）Misuse/misunderstand original passage（3）Too many mistakes made in sentence structures（4）Express opinions too early（5）Apply the suggestions from original passage（6）Too simple sentences本次作
27、文中存在的问题：学生习作改错There is a fatal stampede during New Year celebrations in Shanghai.From this incident,we should improve our safety awareness and the authorities are supposed to make special emergency response plans.（1）Summarize incomplete idea（2）Misuse/misunderstand original passage（3）Too many mistake
28、s made in sentence structures（4）Express opinions too early（5）Apply the suggestions from original passage（6）Too simple sentences本次作文中存在的问题：学生习作改错To avoid such tragedy happening again,the authorities should have special emergency response plans and make sufficient analysis and assessment.(王丽娟)（1）Summa
29、rize incomplete idea（2）Misuse/misunderstand original passage（3）Too many mistakes made in sentence structures（4）Express opinions too early（5）Apply the suggestions from original passage（6）Too simple sentences本次作文中存在的问题：学生习作改错In public,I follow the traffic lights.I dont play on the street.(黄嘉楠)In my op
30、inion,if we want to live in a safe environment,we will be careful.(徐菁玲)My friend likes shopping.When she goes out,she always follow social rates.(姜佩文)we cant be too careful.orderIn public placesOther mistakesSpelling mistakes：mess 写成mass recognition 写成recognization calm写成clammisuse personal pronouns
31、：protect us from写成protect our if we are faced with写成if our are faced withlook around her写成look around sheConfuse part of speech：bad写成badly kind 写成kindness safety写成safeUse a sentence or phrase repeatedly：有同学把observe public rules and regulations先后使用了四遍。Usually the beginning of a summary is:1.The passa
32、ge mainly discusses that2.We can know from the passage that3.As far as the author is concerned,4.In the passage,the author mainly stressed that议论性议论性(argumentative)的阅读短文，则要尽的阅读短文，则要尽可能客观简要地转述阅读材料的观点，而非可能客观简要地转述阅读材料的观点，而非描述细节。描述细节。说明性说明性(illustrative)短文短文,你就必须用概括的文字你就必须用概括的文字来说明某种现象。来说明某种现象。You may begin like these:1.It is stated in the article that2.According to the passage,we can know that 3.In the passage,the author states that 4.The passage points out thatHomework背诵概括主题的解题技巧；背诵概括主题的解题技巧；完成讲义上概括完成讲义上概括main idea专练；专练；订正自己的作文，并上交。订正自己的作文，并上交。谢谢观赏谢谢观赏