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1、读后续写四维度探究读后续写四维度探究开篇评分标准要求续写内容与所给短文融洽度高，内容、评分标准要求续写内容与所给短文融洽度高，内容、语法结构和词汇丰富、准确性高，也就是续写内容要语法结构和词汇丰富、准确性高，也就是续写内容要与原文尽量做到与原文尽量做到内容、结构和语言的协同内容、结构和语言的协同。读后续写评分标准维度序号评价项目立意1紧扣主题，弘扬正能量2结尾合理、自然、故事完整逻辑3逻辑清晰，合理顺承上文4与所提供的的段首句衔接合理内容5适当的有效对话6烘托主题的场景描写7增色的修辞手法8人物描写外貌描写9心理描写10动作描写语言11时态正确12词汇准确、丰富、地道13有多种高级句式14有效
2、使用语句间连接成分15拼写、大小写、标点无误16150词左右17书写干净、整洁、美观评分标准详细版0101抓住基本要素，理清故事脉络目录0202分析人物性格，明晰情节发展0303赏析文本语言，习得文本表达0404整体总结分析，确定续写方向与框架抓住基本要素，理清故事脉络01首先，解读阅读文本，关注文本的文体和文体特征，按照原文内容、情节发展续写文章，促进内容和情节的协同。故事故事情节情节图图（记叙文）（记叙文）通过分析主题，明确文章主题，续写不能偏离主题201320132012201220112011地点时间事情的起因事情的经过人物事情的结果时间线索空间线索厘清记叙文的六要素AWiseDeer
3、&ACowardlyTiger2020年10月高三联考读后续写(见附录)WhoWhere Task I:Read for plotsMother deer and her fawns(幼鹿);a tiger;a jackal(胡狼)in the tigers caveMother deer was trying to lead her fawns out of the tigers cave when she saw the tiger coming back.What happenedto scare the tiger away by pretending to be a fierce a
4、nimal waiting to kill it for food.Mother deer the tigerWhile escaping,the tiger came across a jackal,who suggested they go back to the cave to find out the truth.The tiger didnt believe in the JackalWhat happenedJackal suggested knotting their tails together and walking towards the cave together.the
5、 tigerthe jackalWhat happened next?Para.1Thedeersawthejackalandthetigercomingtogether.Para.2Thetigerwasshockedtohearthisandhewassurenowthejackalcheatedhim.whoMotherdeerandherfawns（幼鹿）;atiger;ajackal(胡狼)whenwhenthemotherdeerwastryingtoleadheryoungonesoutofthecave.whereinthetigerscavekeyverbsleadoutof
6、;raisedhervoiceandshouted;eat;runaway;walkelementsfrightened;cave;capture;agooddinner;Adangerousanimal;fiercerorstronger;knotourtailssummaryofthestoryOnedaywhenmotherdeerwastryingtoleadheryoungonesoutofthecaveshesawthetigercomingtowardsit.Stayingcalm,shethoughtofaplantoscarethetigeraway.Whileescapin
7、g,thetigercameacrossajackalwhosuggestedtheygobacktofindoutthetruth.Inordertoconvincethetiger,thejackaltiedtheirtailsinaknotandthenwenttowardsthecavetogether.分析人物性格，明晰情节发展02研读文本，分析文中人物的性格继而推断情节的发展。研读文本，分析文中人物的性格继而推断情节的发展。对人物性格的掌握有助于续写中对人物准确、生动的描写。对人物性格的掌握有助于续写中对人物准确、生动的描写。从人物的动作、言语中和他人的评价中来分析人物的性格特点。
8、从人物的动作、言语中和他人的评价中来分析人物的性格特点。It was dangerous to go out of the cave now.She thought of a plan.The tiger heard these words and became frightenedtiger began to run away from there as fast as possible.The cunning jackal was now sure the tiger was a coward.”“But the tiger said,I do not want to take a cha
9、nce.You may run away.I will be left alone to die.So,I will not come with you.010302根据原文描述，分析人物性格Motherdeerthetigerjackal很聪明和勇敢胆小怕事狡猾，同时从老虎的言语中可知老虎不信任胡狼the tigerclever/smart/intelligent,brave,staycalmindangercowardly,timidMother deer the jackalcunning(狡猾的)，notreliableintheeyesofthetigerHow frightened
10、 would the deer feel when seeing the tiger and the jackal coming?Would the tiger have a peaceful talk with the fierce animal since he was afraid to be eaten by him?Was he easily fooled?If he heard he would be eaten,would he believe it and get scared?赏析文本语言，习得文本表达03“内容要创造，语言要模仿，创造与模仿要紧密结合。内容要创造，语言要模仿
11、，创造与模仿要紧密结合。(王初明王初明)挖掘文本语言表达风格，模仿原文语言写句子。使续写部分的挖掘文本语言表达风格，模仿原文语言写句子。使续写部分的语言风格与原文的风格相一致，以促进语言协同。语言风格与原文的风格相一致，以促进语言协同。Thedeerraisedhervoiceandshouted,“Mydeeryoungchildrendonotweep.Ishallcapture(捕捉捕捉)atigerforyoutoeat.Youcanhaveagooddinner.”模仿并续写：模仿并续写：Sheshoutedtowardsherchildrenstandinginsidethecav
12、e，“Mydearchildren,Irequestedmyfriend,thecleverjackal,tocaptureatigerforus.”语言表达语言表达风格风格 故事叙述风格，含一些对话；语言简洁，简单句居多。故事叙述风格，含一些对话；语言简洁，简单句居多。主要时态主要时态和语态和语态一般过去时；主动语态一般过去时；主动语态主要句式主要句式摘记摘记 Thedeerwasfrightenedbecause.(原因因状语从句)Fortunately,thetigerwasnot.(adv,+句子)Thedeerwastryingto.whensheheard.(时间状语从句）Thec
13、unningjackalwasnowsurethetigerwas.(宾语从句）分类分类整整理并理并积累积累材料材料、摘抄摘抄好好词好词好句句各类各类描写描写动作：Theyoungoneswanderedhappilyhereandthere.The deer The deer was trying to leadwas trying to lead her young ones out of the her young ones out of the cavecavewhen she when she heardheard a loud roar.a loud roar.The tiger
14、began to The tiger began to run awayrun away from there from there as fast as as fast as possiblepossible.语言：语言：“My friend,a powerful and fierce animal is in my My friend,a powerful and fierce animal is in my cave.Theyoung ones are crying for a tiger to eat.The young ones are crying for a tiger to e
15、at.The mother is promising to capture a tiger for them.So,I am mother is promising to capture a tiger for them.So,I am running away.running away.”“Dont be afraid.No animal is fiercer or stronger than“Dont be afraid.No animal is fiercer or stronger than a tiger.a tiger.Let us go together to find out.
16、”Let us go together to find out.”心理：Thedeerwasfrightened.环境：There was a thick forest on the sides of a There was a thick forest on the sides of a mountain.Many kinds of animals lived in the forest.mountain.Many kinds of animals lived in the forest.Therewerebonesofdeadanimalsalloverthecave.修辞修辞手法手法拟人
17、手法拟人手法(把动物当作人来描写，像人一样说话、行动；赋予有生把动物当作人来描写，像人一样说话、行动；赋予有生命的动物以人的禀性，使之像人一样有思想、有感情。命的动物以人的禀性，使之像人一样有思想、有感情。)整体总结分析，确定续写方向与框架04续写不是随心所欲、任意的发挥，而是研读文本后根据所提供的两段段首的内容进行创造续写。人物性格和情节创设要与原文相吻合。段首对续写起到一定的导向和限制作用。段首对续写起到一定的导向和限制作用。第一段续写内容第一段续写内容可可以根据以根据已知情节和第二段段首句已知情节和第二段段首句推断第一段可能的情节发展。推断第一段可能的情节发展。同时第一段的段尾又要和第二
18、段段首紧密衔接。同时第一段的段尾又要和第二段段首紧密衔接。para1:Thedeersawthejackalandthetigercomingtogether.para2:2:Thetigerwasshockedtohearthisandhewassurenowthejackalcheatedhim.1.Whatdidthedeersaythatshockedthetigerandconvincedhimthathewascheatedbythejackal?1.Howdidthetigerfeelandwhatwouldhedo?2.Whatthejackaldidtothetigerjus
19、tnow?2.Whatwouldhappentothetiger,thejackalandthedeerintheend?3.Howwouldthejackalcheatthetigerbydoingso?3.Whatthemesorideasdoesthearticlewanttoconvey？根据所给材料和两段段首内容，发散思维提出疑问，最后通过识别和分析每种故事续写的合理性，依据自己的价值倾向最终确定续写的结尾。故事结尾不仅要使文章结局合理，而且要故事结尾不仅要使文章结局合理，而且要渲染、升渲染、升华主题。最后，文末以华主题。最后，文末以“Presence of mind and int
20、elligence can save one from dangerous situations.”升升华主题。华主题。此外，此外，根据生活常识、社会经验和背景知识，根据生活常识、社会经验和背景知识，合理地丰富故事情节和写作细节。合理地丰富故事情节和写作细节。阅读文学原著，培养语感和文学修养积累记叙文、故事方面的词汇、句型和语段重视细节描写，以动作描写、语言描写和心理描写为主以恰当的外貌描写和环境描写为辅备考具体做法There was a thick forest on the sides of a mountain.Many kinds of animals lived in the for
21、est.A deer was eating grass and leaves with her two young ones.The young ones wandered happily here and there.The deer followed her fawns(幼鹿)into a cave.The deer was frightened because it was a tigers cave.There were bones of dead animals all over the cave.Fortunately,the tiger was not inside the ca
22、ve at the time.The deer was trying to lead her young ones out of the cave when she heard a loud roar.She saw the tiger at a distance coming towards the cave.It was dangerous to go out of the cave now.She thought of a plan.The deer raised her voice and shouted,“My deer young children do not weep.I sh
23、all capture(捕捉)a tiger for you to eat.You can have a good dinner.”附录原文 The tiger heard these words and became frightened.He thought,“Whose is that strange voice from the cave?A dangerous animal is staying inside to capture me.I shall run away to escape death.”The tiger began to run away from there a
24、s fast as possible.A jackal(胡狼)saw the running tiger.“Why are you running in great fear?”the jackal asked.The tiger said,“My friend,a powerful and fierce animal is in my cave.The young ones are crying for a tiger to eat.The mother is promising to capture a tiger for them.So,I am running away.”The cu
25、nning jackal was now sure the tiger was a coward(懦夫).It said,“Dont be afraid.No animal is fiercer or stronger than a tiger Let us go together to find out.”But the tiger said,“I do not want to take a chance.You may run away.I will be left alone to die.So,I will not come with you.”The jackal said,“Trust me.Let us knot(打结)our tails together.Then I will not be able to leave you.”The tiger agreed unwillingly to this proposal.So the jackal tied their tails in a knot.Now they walked towards the cave together.谢谢