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1、高考英语学习提升课堂：记叙文读后续写 例析精讲第二节（满分25分）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇 完整的短文。“Go back, Mom!” repeated my six-year-old daughter, June. We had just left the nearby supermarket. When I was wondering whether I had forgotten something, June added, Someone needs our help!”As I looked back from the drivers seat,
2、 I saw a homeless man. It was such a cold day, but he wore few clothes. Touched by Junefs kindness, I crazily looked for some cash （现金）, quickly realizing I didnt have any.have some cash, Mom! June replied. She opened her little wallet and pulled out a five-dollar bill. Oh, good. Ill pay you back wh
3、en we get home/1 I said. zzNo, Mom/ she replied, zzl want to help him. I dont want you to pay me back. I want to give him my money/I was so proud of June. I looked at my four-year-old daughter, Scarlett, hoping shed also give some money to show kindness. Knowing my expectation, she said, “But I only
4、 have one dollar. I want to buy ice-cream. I havent eaten one for weeks. More importantly, why should we be kind to the homeless? Would they be kind to others? I doubt it! Not wanting to force her to give away her money, I gave up. I hoped someday shed naturally change.As we drove back, I then kept
5、quiet. When we got near the homeless man, I called out, Excuse me, sir! He walked towards our car and answered, Z/Yes, maam? Here you go, sir,1 June handed him her money through the window. zzThank you/ he said, touched. We shared a smile.As we decided to drive away, we were drawn to a young woman t
6、en meters away. She was trying hard to push her shopping cart （购物推车）to her car. Unluckily, her cart suddenly fell onto the ground. All of the things she had bought were thrown out and onto the ground. She looked so sad.注意：1 .续写词数应为150左右；2 .请按如下格式作答。Just then, the homeless man rushed towards the woma
7、n.Mom, I wanted to give my money to him/ she said, looking up at me.I记叙文读后续写体材分析解读：1 .记叙文通常会涉及到以下几个方面:5W+1H,即：who, when, where, what, why, howoWho:确定用第几人称叙述，确定“入戏”人物，以 及分别扮演何种角色；When:确定文章的主体时态；Where:确定故事发生地点，计划环境词汇；What:信息点，通 过这些信息点，确定续写内容；Why:通过逻辑，确定故事发展的可能性；How:确定故事发展的 每个阶段。2 .记叙文写作通常涉及到两条主线：事情的发展
8、；情感或心理活动的变化。II材料解读1 .文本内容分析所给材料讲述了作者和两个女儿开车离开商场时,6岁的大女儿发 现一个无家可归的人，决定用自己的钱帮助他，但4岁的小女儿不愿意，原因 之一是她不太相信无家可归的人也会对他人示以善意。后来他们又遇到了 一个因购物车倒地而需要帮助的女士。根据续写第一、二段首句可知，那 个无家可归的人立刻冲向了那个女士，之后作者的小女儿态度转变,也愿意 用自己的钱帮助那个无家可归的人了。2 .文本行文逻辑分析根据已知文本可知面对无家可归的人作者的大女儿给予帮助，而小 女儿则不愿及其原因。对此作者不强迫，希望小女儿能自然地改变。这时 他们看到：一位年轻女士购物车翻倒在
9、地，满满一购物车东西全部洒落在 地，从作者对她的动作和神情描写可以看出女士需要帮助。根据续写第一段首句及第二段首句可知，那个无家可归的人立刻 冲向了那个女士，而作者的小女儿态度也发生了转变，也是从这一点我们 可以知道是无家可归的人帮助了那个女士。他帮助那个女士的过程和作者 的小女儿对此是如何反应的应该是续写第一段的内容。根据续写第二段首句可知，作者的小女儿也愿意用自己的钱帮助那个无家可归的人了。小女儿和他的互动以及他们的心情应该是本段的内容。III引导学生分析思考1 .对所给材料中的关键点的分析思考作者六岁的女儿决定并把自己的钱给了那位无家可归的人，作者对 此是感到自豪的。而她四岁的女儿则对b
10、eing kind to the homeless产生了 质疑，作者对此也有自己的做法，她没有强迫四岁的孩子把自己的钱给那 位无家可归之人，她希望有一天她能自己发生改变。思考：Is the man kind? Did the girl change? When did she change? How did she change?文中提到的年轻女士吃力的推着购物车，并且不幸的是 购物车翻到导致所购之物都撒在了地上。，思、考： Why did the author mention this event?2 .对文本材料衔接处的分析思考Did the woman need help badly?
11、Who gave her a hand?Why did the homeless man rushed towards the woman? What does the author want to tell the readers by using the word “rush” ?Why did the 4-year-old girl say Mom, I want to give my money to him” ? What caused the 4-year-old girl to change her attitude?3 .对续写部分的分析思考Just then, the hom
12、eless man rushed towards the woman.思考：What did he do next? How did the 4-year-old girl react to the man s behavior? “Mom, I wanted to give my money to him,v she said, looking at me.思考：How did the author react （反应）to this? Then, what did the mom and the daughters do? How did the man react? And what a
13、bout the young woman? How did the 4-year-old girl feel after giving the money to the man?What about the others?IV讨论总结要求学生分组对以上所进行的思考进行讨论总结，他们可以各抒己见, 列出续写内容。V完成续写任务要求学生根据所讨论的结果完成续写。1. Create plots and make an outline, write key words.2. Choose proper sentence patterns.3. Choose proper linking words.4. Polish the work.VI评价1 .学生互评2 .个别作品利用展台展出全班共评VII读后续写的几点建议1 .认真分析文本，包括文本体裁、文本结构、文本细节信息、人物语 言行为心理活动等。2 .根据文本信息设置问题，这样就可以考虑到更多的细节信息。3 .列提纲（关键词、短语、句式，衔接手段），打草稿。4 .润色（使用高级地道的表达）。5 .避免因非智力因素比如书写、大小写、标点符号而丢分。6 .多积累，多练习。