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1、精选学习资料 - - - - - - - - - 162 Some famous athletes and entertainers earn millions of dollars every year. Do you think these people deserve such high salaries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. Nowadays, the annual incomes of many sports stars and film stars come to millions o
2、f dollars. Some people claim that their salaries are too high. Yet, in my opinion, such salaries are well deserved. They work hard to 名师归纳总结 - - - - - - -第 1 页,共 14 页精选学习资料 - - - - - - - - - become famous, provide entertainment for us, and win honors for their countries. 50 First, famous athletes an
3、d entertainers make painstaking efforts to achieve fame. Fame is a wonderful thing to have, but it seldom appears overnight. Famous people have worked hard for years to achieve their fame today and they have to continue to their good work to maintain it. For their hard work, 名师归纳总结 sports and entert
4、aining stars 第 2 页,共 14 页- - - - - - -精选学习资料 - - - - - - - - - deserve to be generously rewarded. Unfortunately, people tend to focus on the huge amounts of money made by them. They rarely appreciate the efforts that athletes and entertainers have to make in order to achieve the fame they have today
5、. For example, in order to win the first place in a 100-metre dash, an athlete has to cover hundreds of miles during training. Famous stars deserve their high salaries because they have worked hard. 129 名师归纳总结 - - - - - - -第 3 页,共 14 页精选学习资料 - - - - - - - - - Second, sports and entertaining stars pr
6、ovide us with good entertainment. On weekends, many of us attend a football match that includes Beckham, see a movie that stars Julia Roberts, or go to a concert that features Celine Dion. These people help us make good use of our free time by entertaining us. As a result, we feel inspired as well a
7、s relaxed. In other words, we feel energetic again after attending the events. We even 名师归纳总结 - - - - - - -第 4 页,共 14 页精选学习资料 - - - - - - - - - feel that we have more to enjoy in life and have new aspirations. For such reasons, these people are worth their high salaries. 98 Third, athletes and enter
8、tainers win honors for their countries. For example, after four years hard work, many athletes win gold medals at the Olympics Games. They are able to make millions of dollars a year after the games. Such high salaries 名师归纳总结 are justified, because these 第 5 页,共 14 页- - - - - - -精选学习资料 - - - - - - -
9、 - - athletes have won honors for their countries in the most competitive arena and have made their people proud, something few people can even dream of. This is true for entertainers as well. Many actors and actresses receive high salaries after they have won Oscars or prizes at Cannes Film Festiva
10、l. These people also deserve high salaries, because they have made a name in films for their country and have made their country better known by 名师归纳总结 - - - - - - -第 6 页,共 14 页精选学习资料 - - - - - - - - - people elsewhere in the world. 125 All in all, famous athletes and entertainers merit their high s
11、alaries, for their hard work, entertainment they provide, and their contribution to their country. If I had a chance, I would be a famous star who can make millions of dollars a year. 43 475 分析 : 名师归纳总结 - - - - - - -第 7 页,共 14 页精选学习资料 - - - - - - - - - 观 点 文章扣题紧密,首段明确表绽开 态,主体段都有明确的主题句,主题句后都给出了恰当的例子和
12、说明；组 织 经典五段式,结构清楚,表结构 达了统一、递进和连贯；选词恰当,词汇多变；句型语 言 丰富,且有肯定复杂度,句运用 子长短交替第四段特别明显,长度合理共 475 词,27 句话,平均每句话个词；2.文章结构：名师归纳总结 - - - - - - -第 8 页,共 14 页精选学习资料 - - - - - - - - - 首段：使用了“ 漏斗鱼钩” ；第一 句介绍背景,其次话介绍别人观 点,过渡到题目话题,第三句话 说明作者观点,第四句话预示下 文内容；主体段：主题句 +例子和说明末段：连接词+ 复述本文主题+ 简明总结主要论点 + 作者的期望3.语言积存：31.精华词汇和短语名师归
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15、- - - - 为国win honors 争光 make their people proud contribution 努力 work hard make painstaking efforts 感到feel inspired as well as 兴奋 relaxed feel energetic have new aspirations 名师归纳总结 - - - - - - -第 12 页,共 14 页精选学习资料 - - - - - - - - - 32. 亮点句型：句型 1：On weekends, many of us attend a football match that in
16、cludes Beckham, see a movie that stars Julia Roberts, or go to a concert that features Celine Dion. 点评：留意平行结构的使用；这样有美感的句型写起来虽然很难,但是至少是努力的方向；文中类似的平行结构：They work hard to become famous, provide entertainment for us, and win honors for their countries. 名师归纳总结 - - - - - - -第 13 页,共 14 页精选学习资料 - - - - - - - - - 句型 2：Such high salaries are justified, because these athletes have won honors for their countries in the most competitive arena and have made their people proud, something few people can even dream of. 点评：主要是留意划线部分同位结构的使用；名师归纳总结 - - - - - - -第 14 页,共 14 页