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1、学年周六测试一写作 Still waters run deep.流静水深流静水深,人静心深人静心深 Where there is life,there is hope。有生命必有希望。有生命必有希望语语 言言 7-8具有很好的具有很好的语言运用能力；语法和句子结构准确性高，语言运用能力；语法和句子结构准确性高，词汇方词汇方面使用较好，只有少许错误。面使用较好，只有少许错误。5-6具有具有较较好的好的语语言运用能力；言运用能力；语语法和句子法和句子结结构准确性构准确性较较好，好，有一有一些些语语法法结结构或构或词汇词汇方面的方面的错误错误，但不影响理解。，但不影响理解。3-4语语言运用能力一般；
2、言运用能力一般；语语法和句子法和句子结结构基本准确构基本准确，语语法法结结构或构或词词汇汇方面的方面的错误错误不影响理解。不影响理解。1-2语语言运用能力言运用能力较较差；差；语语法和句子法和句子结结构基本不构基本不够够准确，准确，语语法法结结构构或或词汇词汇方面的方面的错误较错误较多，而且影响了多，而且影响了对对句子意句子意义义的理解。的理解。0语言运用能力很差；语法、句子结构、词汇错误很多，句子意语言运用能力很差；语法、句子结构、词汇错误很多，句子意义无法理解。义无法理解。备注备注每多或少写一个句子，扣每多或少写一个句子，扣1分。分。内内 容容5包括了包括了所有信息内容所有信息内容。3-4
3、包括了基本信息内容。包括了基本信息内容。1-2包括了小部分信息内容。包括了小部分信息内容。连连 贯贯2内容内容连贯连贯，而且，而且结结构构紧紧凑凑。1.5内容内容连贯连贯性比性比较较好，而且好，而且结结构比构比较紧较紧凑。凑。1内容内容连贯连贯性性较较差，而且差，而且结结构不构不够紧够紧凑。凑。备注备注文不对题，给文不对题，给0分。分。评分标准：评分标准：基础写作步骤回顾：基础写作步骤回顾：1.审题审题：体裁、人称、时态：体裁、人称、时态(说明文；第三人称；介绍活动情况主要用说明文；第三人称；介绍活动情况主要用一般现在时一般现在时)2.断句断句:按逻辑意思合理断句按逻辑意思合理断句3.关键词关
4、键词:拟出每句的关键词拟出每句的关键词（可在试卷上做下记号）（可在试卷上做下记号）4.连词成句连词成句(注意恰当使用各种复合句、注意恰当使用各种复合句、with复合结复合结构、构、非谓语动词等）非谓语动词等）5.连句成篇连句成篇(注意运用适当的过渡性语言进行连接注意运用适当的过渡性语言进行连接)6.自成一段自成一段,不用题目，不要分段不用题目，不要分段 The Student Union of No 1 Middle School did a survey about the connection between sunshine sports and study among 2032 stu
5、dents from Senior 1 to Senior 3 from January 14th to 18th in 2013.According to the survey,most students held the view that it was necessary for students to work hard and rest.And 60&of the students thought that sunshine sports are beneficial to improve study efficiency.Whats more,42%of the students
6、believed that it should arrange at least one hour every day to do sports while some students thought sports couldnt take up much time for study.Moreover,the survey had shown that many senior 3 students seldom attend sports because of the heavy load in study.(林柱林柱)调查时间：调查时间：2013年年1月月14日日-18日日调查机构：学校学
7、生会调查机构：学校学生会调查对象：第一中学高一至高三共调查对象：第一中学高一至高三共2032个学生个学生调查内容：阳光体育与学习的关系调查内容：阳光体育与学习的关系调查数据与结果人数百分比观点93%学生应该劳逸结合60%阳光体育有助于提高学习效率42%每天应至少安排1小时的体育锻炼33%不应该让阳光体育消耗大量的学习时间调查的其他情况：很多高三的学生平时都因课业繁重而较少参与体育锻炼。本次基础性写作存在的主要问题本次基础性写作存在的主要问题:1.没掌握这种类型作文的固定句式没掌握这种类型作文的固定句式2.信息处理不当信息处理不当:1)第一句没处理好：第一句没处理好：the Student Un
8、ion of No.1 Middle School did a survey among 2,032 students from Grade One to Grade Three on the relationship between sunshine sports and studies.2)信息组合凌乱无序。信息组合凌乱无序。3.表达的错误表达的错误:存在的表达问题：存在的表达问题：*There is a survey with students who add up to 2,032 on the issue that relationship between The student o
9、rganization of the first middle school had done a survey on January14th to 18th.93%student think that we should combineand.2032 students come from senior one to senior three took part in this activity.As the survey shows that 93%student hold the opinion that we should*whats more,there are 42%of the
10、students think that have the PE lesson for at least an hour every day.*There is a survey with students who add up to 2,032 on the issue that relationship between There is a survey among 2,032 students referring to/about the relationship between sunshine sports and studies.The student organization of
11、 the first middle school had done a survey on January14th to 18th.The Student Union of No.1 Middle School did a survey from January 14th to 18th.(between January 14th and 18th)93%student think that we should combineand.93%of the students think that we should combineand.2032 students come from senior
12、 one to senior three took part in this activity.2032 students coming from senior one to senior three were surveyed.As the survey shows that 93%student hold the opinion that we should As the survey shows,93%of the students hold the opinion that we should*whats more,there are 42%of the students think
13、that have the PE lesson for at least an hour every day.whats more,42%of the students think that students should take exercise for at least an hour every day.there are 42%of the students thinking that信息排列顺序：信息排列顺序：1.调查时间：调查时间：2013年年1月月14日日-18日日调查机构：学校学生会调查机构：学校学生会调查对象：第一中学高一至高三共调查对象：第一中学高一至高三共2032个学生
14、个学生调查内容：阳光体育与学习的关系调查内容：阳光体育与学习的关系2.93%（的）学生（认为）应该劳逸结合（而）（的）学生（认为）应该劳逸结合（而）60%（的觉得）阳光体育有助于提高学习效率（的觉得）阳光体育有助于提高学习效率3.42%每天应至少安排每天应至少安排1小时的体育锻炼小时的体育锻炼4.33%不应该让阳光体育消耗大量的学习时不应该让阳光体育消耗大量的学习时间间5.很多高三的学生平时都因课业繁重而较少参很多高三的学生平时都因课业繁重而较少参与体育锻炼。与体育锻炼。1.调查时间：调查时间：2013年年1月月14日日-18日日调查机构：学校学生会调查机构：学校学生会调查对象：第一中学高一至
15、高三共调查对象：第一中学高一至高三共2032个学生个学生调查内容：阳光体育与学习的关系调查内容：阳光体育与学习的关系From January 14th to 18th in 2013,the Student Union of No.1Middle School did a survey among 2,032 students from Grade One to Grade Three.The survey referred to the relationship between sunshine sports and studies.From January 14th to 18th in
16、2013,the Student Union of No.1Middle School did a survey on the relationship between sunshine sports and studies among 2,032 students from Grade One to Grade Three.2.93%（的）学生（认为）应该劳逸结合（而）（的）学生（认为）应该劳逸结合（而）60%（的觉得）阳光体育（的觉得）阳光体育有助于有助于提高学习效率提高学习效率As the data shows,93%of the students thought that they s
17、hould keep a proper balance between sunshine sports and their studies,while 60%of them believed sunshine sports could increase/improve the efficiency of their learning.while 60%of them believed sunshine sports made it possible for students to increase/improve the efficiency of their learning.3.42%每天
18、应至少安排每天应至少安排1小时的体育锻炼小时的体育锻炼42%of the students are in favor of the idea that we should spend at least 1 hour a day in doing sports/doing physical exercise.think students are supposed to do some sports for no less than one hour and According to 42%of the students,at least 1 hour of physical exercise f
19、or sunshine sports should be planned each day.安排安排1小时的体育锻炼：小时的体育锻炼：arrange plan one hour for physical exercise4.33%:不应该让阳光体育消耗大量的学习时间不应该让阳光体育消耗大量的学习时间But 33%students pointed out that we should not spend too much time on doing sunshine sports,which should be used to study.hold the view that sunshine
20、sports may take up most of our time which are supposed to be spent on study.A third of the students argued that sunshine sports should not cost plenty of their study time.5.很多高三的学生平时都因课业繁重而较少参与体育很多高三的学生平时都因课业繁重而较少参与体育锻炼。锻炼。Many students of Grade Three had little time to do physical exercise due to t
21、heir heavy burden of studies.Many students of Grade Three were so busy with their study that they had little time to do physical exercise.消耗大量的学习时间：消耗大量的学习时间：cost plenty of study time;take up too much of their study time From January 14th to 18th in 2013,the Student Union of No.1 Middle School did a
22、 survey among 2,032 students from Grade One to Grade Three.The survey referred to the relationship between sunshine sports and studies.As the data shows,93%of the students thought that they should keep a proper balance between sunshine sports and their studies,while 60%of them believed sunshine spor
23、ts could increase the efficiency of their learning.According to 42%of the students,at least 1 hour of physical exercise for sunshine sports should be planned each day.However,a third of the students argued that sunshine sports should not cost plenty of their study time,and many students of Grade Thr
24、ee had little time to do physical exercise due to their heavy burden of studies.(范文范文)调查报告的写作指导调查报告的写作指导调查报告调查报告(时态时态):用一般现在时用一般现在时 或或 一般过去时。一般过去时。调查报告的写作层次：调查报告的写作层次：1）调查时间、调查机构、对象、内容、范围）调查时间、调查机构、对象、内容、范围2）调查结果）调查结果3）调查的其他情况（或结论）调查的其他情况（或结论 看法看法评论）评论）第第1句句第第2-4句句第第5句句A survey was carried out done
25、made among(+调查对象调查对象)on about(+调查内容调查内容)+调查时间调查时间.According to the result,The results shows that.(分析调查数据和分析调查数据和结果结果)(是否需要得出结论或评论视写作要求而定是否需要得出结论或评论视写作要求而定)基础写作基础写作07年广东英语高考基础写作分析年广东英语高考基础写作分析（1）题目：基础写作(共1小题，满分15分)上周，我们以“谁是你的偶像”为题，在2600名学生中进行了一次调查(survey)。以下是调查数据：A survey was carried out among 2,600
26、students on“Who Is Your Idol”last week.Last week,we did a survey among 2,600 students on“Who Is Your Idol”.调查报告的写作句式调查报告的写作句式:开头开头:*Recently a surveyed has been made on+调查内容调查内容 among+调查对象调查对象*Last week,we did/made/carry out a survey on+调调查内容查内容 among+调查对象调查对象*Recently a survey has been done among 1
27、,054 students on whether to read e-books or printed books.*We did a survey among 368 middle school students on how they spent their Spring Festival.*Last Saturday,I made a survey on the after-school coaching institutions of our city.说明调查结果说明调查结果:*We can see from the survey that*As the survey shows,*
28、As is shown on the survey,*According to the survey,*From the results,we can see that1）30%of the students like/prefer/are fond of/take interest in for the reason thatwhile 25%choosebecause.2）one third of those interviewed/surveyed said they are against/are opposed to/dont agree with.for the reason th
29、at.while 25%said theybecause3）Only 5%of them make no comment/show no opinion/dont express their opinion for the reason that.A majority of The rest of 表达调查结果的句型表达调查结果的句型Note:如何表达图表中的数据如何表达图表中的数据有有百分之百分之的人的人.1）40%of+the+N.代词代词+谓语谓语+其它内容其它内容 主语主语+谓语谓语.,with a percentage of 40%.Those who.take up 40%.2）A
30、nother 30%of 3）The rest .4）The majority of.(80%)+谓语谓语.Very few.(only 5%)+谓语谓语任务型写作任务型写作 My name is Logan Koshenka and I would like to share my story with you.I am just an average teenager like you.I live in an average home,go to school and get good grades.one thing is common with most teens-we need
31、money,and many of us do a part-time job to get it.However,should we get a job and make about$7.50 an hour or use all the valuable time working?As for me,I prefer to make money through jobs l like.For the past few years,I have been finding many different ways to make cash.Through trial and error,I ha
32、ve learned a lot of lessons.Over the past year,I had three iphone app ideas.They all failed.I bought a great many promising products which turned out to be bad-selling.I made four different websites that nobody visited.I knew that I would eventually get it.All I wanted was another source of income.N
33、ow my money comes from running the website“Teen Cash Flow”and mobile marketing.Today I think its safe to say that I am successful.As a student at 17 years old,I make anywhere from$1,000 to$4,000 per month.The number is growing.I am proud of myself.1）你读完故事后的感受）你读完故事后的感受2）举例谈谈你自己或朋友每次挣钱的经历）举例谈谈你自己或朋友每
34、次挣钱的经历3）你认为是否应该提倡中学生挣钱并列举理）你认为是否应该提倡中学生挣钱并列举理由由读写任务：中学生挣钱读写任务：中学生挣钱para 1:概括概括who:Logan Koshenka,an average teenager(17-year-old)what:prefer to make money through jobs I like,find many different ways to make cash,but all failed,was successful,the number is growing.The passage is about a 17-year-old
35、student named Logan Koshenka.He liked to make money on his own and met with one failure after another,but finally he became successful and gained a handsome income.(范文范文)Logan Koshenka,an average teenager,is in favor of doing a part-time time job to earn money.After failing to make cash in many diff
36、erent ways,he finally succeeded by running a website and he is proud of himself.(高眺高眺)Logan Koshenla,an average teenager,made a great success on making cash from running the website and mobile marketing.Although he had gone through a lot of failure,he never gave up,which led to his success.(杜婉杜婉)1）你
37、读完故事后的感受）你读完故事后的感受(篇幅不用太长篇幅不用太长,通常通常2-3句话句话,结构可以是结构可以是:总体感受总体感受解释说明解释说明)句式句式:*I am shocked to find that*After reading the passage,I am lost in thought.*It is a pity that.*when reading the story,my tears rolled down.*I am deeply moved by the story.1）你读完故事后的感受）你读完故事后的感受(篇幅不用太长篇幅不用太长,通常通常2-3句话句话,结构可以是结
38、构可以是:总体感受总体感受解释说明解释说明)After reading this passage,I think Koshenka is such an outstanding teenager that he makes money through jobs he likes,though he has come across failures and difficulties.I admire both him and his independence(婉霓婉霓)After reading the story,I am greatly touched by Logan.As a stude
39、nt,its hard to be economically independent but he made it by never giving up and trying over and over again.(范文范文)2）举例谈谈你自己或朋友一次挣钱的经历）举例谈谈你自己或朋友一次挣钱的经历 As an average teenager,I also had a part-time job experience.Last summer vacation,with seeing my parents hardship in supporting our family,I decided
40、 to go to a toy factory so as to share their economic burden.Therefore,I got up so early that I could have more time to work,but the weather was too hot and the work was too boring to let me stand.Every time when I wanted to give up,I would tell myself that my parents is harder than me,so I insisted
41、 at last.(曼琪曼琪)2）举例谈谈你自己或朋友一次挣钱的经历）举例谈谈你自己或朋友一次挣钱的经历The story reminds me of my experience of earning money myself.It was a time when I was on a summer vacation.Being bored,I decided to find a job to make some money.So I worked in a factory.After that,I had to struggle for getting up earlier so that
42、I could go to work on time.Whats more,I nearly did the same things day by day and felt exhausted when a day ended.Despite the hard work,I got what I deserved a month later.It was not until then that I realized how difficult it was to make money.(林柱林柱)3）你认为是否应该提倡中学生挣钱并列举理由）你认为是否应该提倡中学生挣钱并列举理由应该挣钱应该挣钱
43、:I am in favor of students making money./I am for students making money.I agree with students making money.理由理由:.buy what we want and release our parents economic burden.improve living skills so that we are likely to find a good job.have a chance to learn how to communicate with others gain more kno
44、wledge and broaden our horizons 3）你认为是否应该提倡中学生挣钱并列举理由）你认为是否应该提倡中学生挣钱并列举理由不应该挣钱不应该挣钱:I dont agree with students making money./I am against students making money.I am opposed to studentsmaking money.I oppose students making money.理由理由:students first and most important task is to learn for knowledge ca
45、n benefit us much more than money.make money in different ways will waste much time for study.2）举例谈谈你自己或朋友每次挣钱的经历）举例谈谈你自己或朋友每次挣钱的经历 (范文范文)This reminds me of my experience of making money.Last summer holiday,my neighbour was about to have a one-month trip and wanted to hire someone to look after her
46、dog.I took the job.And I not only earned some“pocket money”,but also had a good time with my neighbours dog.That was the first sum of money I had ever made.(范文范文)The passage is about a 17-year-old student named Logan Koshenka.He liked to make money on his own and met with one failure after another,b
47、ut finally he became successful and gained a handsome income.After reading the story,I am greatly touched by Logan.As a student,its hard to be economically independent but he made it by never giving up and trying over and over again.This reminds me of my experience of making money.Last summer holida
48、y,my neighbour was about to have a one-month trip and wanted to hire someone to look after her dog.I took the job.And I not only earned some“pocket money”,but also had a good time with my neighbours dog.That was the first sum of money I had ever made.In fact,I do not agree with students making money.I do believe that students first and most important task is to learn.Without learning,one will not find a good job,let alone maintain a happy life.So students should focus much on learning rather than on making money,for knowledge can benefit us much more than money.