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1、Topic:write a concise passageTime:2:55 p.m.March 17,2002Purpose:1.explain why wordinesswordiness appears in writing usually.2.Make a wordy phrase,sentence and passage concise.3.Build up a concise passage.Aids:CAI,computer and POH.Procedures:In general:1.Pre-learning:give examples and ask students to
2、 discusshow wordinesswordiness happens.2.Presentation:summary what students express and inducethem to think how to correct wordy sentences.3.Practice:direct students to correct wordy phrases,sentences,and passages and organize certain rules bythemselves.4.Consolidation:write a concise passage accord
3、ing to thegiven requirements(Picture story).5.Homework:1)Correct some other passages.2)surf website about English Writing.In detail:Step I.Pre-learning.Give two different versions of passages and ask students to compare:The two passages:Passage one:Tom is four years old and he is energetic.One day a
4、 bike Tom is four years old and he is energetic.One day a bikewas give to him.The bike is new and it is a light blue color.was give to him.The bike is new and it is a light blue color.TomTomreceived the bike for his birthday.He struggled to ride his bike.Hereceived the bike for his birthday.He strug
5、gled to ride his bike.Hestruggled for two hours.However,he was unsuccessful in riding thestruggled for two hours.However,he was unsuccessful in riding thebike.bike.Passage two:Four-year-old Tom is energetic.One day,he got a lightFour-year-old Tom is energetic.One day,he got a lightblue bike for his
6、birthday.He struggled for two hours to ride it,but heblue bike for his birthday.He struggled for two hours to ride it,but hewas unsuccessful.was unsuccessful.The hint:passage one is too long with many redundant words,while thesecond is concise and clear.That is what should be achieved in writing.Ste
7、p II.Presentation.Show wordy phrases and sentences.Ask students to discuss howwordiness appears and find out the way to correct them.Sample one:The employeeThe employee with angerwith anger quarreled with his boss.quarreled with his boss.(angry)(angry)A girlA girl likes likes Chinese foodChinese foo
8、d better.better.(prefer)(prefer)There are manyThere are many People hunting animals for livingPeople hunting animals for livingin the mountain.(hunters)in the mountain.(hunters)In theIn the not too distant not too distant future,our dreams will come future,our dreams will cometrue.(near)true.(near)H
9、e gave up schoolHe gave up school on condition on conditionof the fact thatof the fact that it was it wasnecessary for him to support his family.(because)necessary for him to support his family.(because)Summary one:Change phrases into single words.Summary one:Change phrases into single words.Sample
10、two:The house,Sample two:The house,which was built newlywhich was built newly is near the sea.is near the sea.(The newly-built house)(The newly-built house)PeoplePeople who are interested in the jobwho are interested in the job must must send yoursend yourresume to our company before Friday.resume t
11、o our company before Friday.(People interested in the job)(People interested in the job)The way that is most efficient and convenientthat is most efficient and convenient.(the most efficient and convenient way)(the most efficient and convenient way)While he is waiting for the busWhile he is waiting
12、for the bus,he always recites,he always recitestexts.(While waiting for the bus or Waiting for)texts.(While waiting for the bus or Waiting for)Please put the moneyPlease put the money at a place where it is safeat a place where it is safe.(please put the money at a safe place)(please put the money a
13、t a safe place)summary two:change clauses in phrases.summary two:change clauses in phrases.Sample three:A letter was sent by Mrs.Smith.Sample three:A letter was sent by Mrs.Smith.(Mrs.Smith sent a letter)(Mrs.Smith sent a letter)Your luggage will beYour luggage will be checked by a custom official a
14、ndchecked by a custom official andthen a pass card will be given to you.then a pass card will be given to you.(A custom official will check your luggage and give you(A custom official will check your luggage and give youa pass card)a pass card)The production of the factory was affected greatly byThe
15、 production of the factory was affected greatly byso many inexperienced workers.so many inexperienced workers.(So many inexperienced workers affected the(So many inexperienced workers affected theproduction of the factory greatly.)production of the factory greatly.)Although Chinese is regularly used
16、 by students,a close andAlthough Chinese is regularly used by students,a close andcomplete study of the subject is seldom taken by plete study of the subject is seldom taken by them.(Although students regularly use Chinese,they seldom take a(Although students regularly use Chinese,they seldom take a
17、close and complete study of the subject.)close and complete study of the subject.)Summary three:change unnecessary passive into active voice.Summary three:change unnecessary passive into active voice.Sample four:The skirt is blue in color.(the skirt is blue)Sample four:The skirt is blue in color.(th
18、e skirt is blue)In the year of 1840 the war broke out.In the year of 1840 the war broke out.(The war broke our in 1840)(The war broke our in 1840)We plan to meet before sunrise very early in theWe plan to meet before sunrise very early in themorning.(We plan to meet before sunrise)morning.(We plan t
19、o meet before sunrise)I play basketball equally as well as my brother.I play basketball equally as well as my brother.(I play basketball as well as my brother.)(I play basketball as well as my brother.)summary four:avoid repetition.summary four:avoid repetition.Step III.PracticeStep III.PracticeCorr
20、ectCorrectwordy sentences and passage.wordy sentences and passage.1.There are many ways in which a student who is interested in meetingforeign students may come to know one.(Students interested in meeting foreign students may come to knowone in many ways.)2.There are many farmers in the area who are
21、 planning to attendThere are many farmers in the area who are planning to attendthe meeting which is fixed for next Friday.the meeting which is fixed for next Friday.(Many farmers in the area plan to attend the meeting fixed for nextFriday)3.To work as a accountant,an education in money planning is
22、required.(To work as a accountant,one requires to study money planning.)4.The subjects that are considered most important by students arethose that have been shown to be useful to them after graduation.(Students consider the subjects shown useful to them after graduationmost important.)5.The decisio
23、n that was reached by the committee was to put off thevote.(The committee reached the decisionto put off the vote.)(The committee decided to put off the vote)6.The animal trainer dove into the pool.The trainer was skilled andathletic.She was excited when she dove into the pool.She swam withtwo dolph
24、ins.The dolphins were babies.The dolphins were playful.The trainer swam with the dolphins for over an hour.When the trainerswam with the dolphins,she was happy.(The skilled,athletic animal trainer excitedly dove into the pool andhappily swam for over an hour with two playful baby dolphins.)Step IV.C
25、onsolidation.Ask students to write a passage as concise as possible and evaluate someexamples in class through POH.(Picture and story)Step V.Homework1.Give students more samples of wordiness to revise and improve.1)Before the travel agent was completely able to finishexplaining the various differenc
26、es among all of the many veryunique vacation packages his travel agency was offering,thecustomer changed her future plans.2)During that time period,many car buyers preferred cars thatwere pink in color and shiny in appearance.3)Our branch office currently employs five tellers.These tellersdo an exce
27、llent job Monday through Thursday but cannot keepup with the rush on Friday and Saturday.4)The blizzard contained strong winds and heavy snow.During thesnowstorm,the roof of the town library collapsed.The roof of the postoffice did the same.The blowing snow covered the county roads.Schools cancelled classes due to the white-out conditions.5)Locked away in the old chest,Richard was surprised by the antiquehats.2.Click websitehttphttp：www.englishonline.neiwww.englishonline.nei orhttphttp： formore information about writing if it is possible.