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1、新材料作文新材料作文-概括指导概括指导How to write a summary of narration Learning aim: To further master the methods and skills of writing summaries of narrative passages Difficult point: How to write an exact summary without leaving out key points学生习作常见错误：学生习作常见错误：概括内容要点不完整概括内容要点不完整使用太多细节内容而不是用概括的语言使用太多细节内容而不是用概括的语言
2、过多引用原文词句过多引用原文词句词数过多词数过多用第一人称而不是第三人称转述用第一人称而不是第三人称转述时态错误时态错误 Last Sunday I went fishing. After setting up my fishing rod with bait, I sat down on the bank of the lake. But two hours later, I didnt catch any fish. I got very angry and began to pack up my stuff, preparing to go back home. Just then, I
3、 saw an old man sitting near me. To my surprise, his basket was full of fish, so I went over to him, wanting to know why. “Excuse me, but how long have you sat here?” I asked. “About four hours,” he answered. “Four hours?” I couldnt believe my ears. “Yes. Its very important to be patient,” the old m
4、an said. “Dont consider fishing a tiring sport. Just enjoy it.” Suddenly, I understood what he said. I must learn to be patient. Then I sat there and waited for fish patiently. I felt a fish touch the bait, but I didnt move and waited for the right moment to reel it in. At last, I caught it. This ma
5、de me very happy. In the following six hours, I caught over 10 fish. On my way home, I thought what had happened on the bank. I gradually realized that the secret of success was patience. 学生习作常见错误学生习作常见错误1: The passage tells us that last Sunday a man went fishing but he didnt catch any fish in two h
6、ours. At this time he saw an old man sitting near him. The man asked the man how to catch fishes. The old man said that you should be patient.使用太多细节，使用太多细节，语言不够概括语言不够概括概括内容要点：概括内容要点： 精，准，全精，准，全学生习作常见错误学生习作常见错误2: The story mainly tells us that the writer was fishing and didnt catch any fish. When he
7、prepared to go back home,he found an old man sitting there and his basket was full of fish. In the end, he caught many fish.引用原文词句引用原文词句不得直接引用原不得直接引用原文的句子文的句子学生习作常见错误学生习作常见错误3: The story mainly tells us that the writer was fishing but made no achievements and prepared to go back home. While an old m
8、an whose basket was full of fish told him that fish is very important to be patient . The author learned to be patient. At last, the author caught fish and realized the secret of success was patience. (共60词)词数过多词数过多词数词数:约约30词（小词（小于于20词或大于词或大于40词，扣词，扣2分）分）学生习作常见错误学生习作常见错误4: The writer tells us that h
9、e went fishing but didnt catch any fish after waiting 2 hours. Then an old man sitting near me told me his secret of fishing was patience. Finally the writer succeeded.人称用错，应该人称用错，应该用第三人称用第三人称一般以第三人称一般以第三人称来表述来表述 学生习作常见错误学生习作常见错误5: The passage mainly tells us that the writer didnt catch any fish bec
10、ause of his impatience. He become happy when he understand the patience is the key to success.时态错误时态错误与原文时态一致与原文时态一致(1)概括内容要点要：精，准，全概括内容要点要：精，准，全 写概括时应满足的5个条件(4) 一般以第三人称来表述一般以第三人称来表述 (2)不得直接引用原文的句子（同义词组替换不得直接引用原文的句子（同义词组替换法；正话反说法；语态变换；简单句变复法；正话反说法；语态变换；简单句变复合句合句）(3)词数词数:约约30词（小于词（小于20词或大于词或大于40词，扣词，
11、扣2分）分）(5)与原文时态一致（正文和结尾除外）与原文时态一致（正文和结尾除外）记叙文概括的方法-串联要素法第一步：先通读全文，找出几个要素第一步：先通读全文，找出几个要素 who 谁 what 何事 when 何时 where 何地 why 原因 as a result/consequence/finally 结果 .,which led to第二步：用第二步：用自己的话自己的话串联起来串联起来 万能公式：The passage mainly tells us that sb. (who) did sth. (at someplace at sometime ) because of /
12、as a result of /due to , which led to finally/eventually开头套用句式：The story/passage is aboutThe writer/author tells us about.The story/passage mainly tells us thatThe passage describes . Last Sunday I went fishing. After setting up my fishing rod with bait, I sat down on the bank of the lake. But two h
13、ours later, I didnt catch any fish. I got very angry and began to pack up my stuff, preparing to go back home. Just then, I saw an old man sitting near me. To my surprise, his basket was full of fish, so I went over to him, wanting to know why. “Excuse me, but how long have you sat here?” I asked. “
14、About four hours,” he answered. “Four hours?” I couldnt believe my ears. “Yes. Its very important to be patient,” the old man said. “Dont consider fishing a tiring sport. Just enjoy it.” Suddenly, I understood what he said. I must learn to be patient. Then I sat there and waited for fish patiently.
15、I felt a fish touch the bait, but I didnt move and waited for the right moment to reel it in. At last, I caught it. This made me very happy. In the following six hours, I caught over 10 fish. On my way home, I thought what had happened on the bank. I gradually realized that the secret of success was
16、 patience. had no patience第一步：请找出这篇短文的几个要素：第一步：请找出这篇短文的几个要素： who 谁 _ _ what 何事 _ _ when 何时 where 何地 why 原因 _ _ as a result 结果 _I (the writer)didnt catch any fishan old manhis basket was full of fishgot very angryIts very important to be patientlearn to be patient; caught it. 第二步：用第二步：用自己的话自己的话串联起来串联
17、起来 万能公式：sb. (who) did sth. (at some place at some time ) because of / as a result of /due to , which led to /finally/eventually The writercaught a lot of fishafter becoming patientwho had no patience at firstbecause of being influenced by an old manhim realizing patience is the key to successOne pos
18、sible versionThe passage mainly tells us that the writer who had no patience at first caught a lot of fish after becoming patient because of being influenced by an old man. Finally , he realized patience is the key to success. had intended to give upintended to have given upGroup Work 阅读下面的短文，然后以约30
19、个词概括这篇短文的主要内容。 Hi, I am Mike. I just went through my first year of college. The toughest part on me at first was the general adjustment. I went to a very small high school where my mom was a teacher and she did practically everything for me. But at the college I need to know some basic life skills,
20、such as balancing a check-book, laundry, and the things you have to be able to handle that I never thought of in the high school! It was really tough for me at first and I got badly homesick. Once that first semester was over and I got used to the college life, I love itgood facilities, helpful inst
21、ructors, and a good library. The students Union organizes various parties every week. I also go to cinemas and concerts, and often spend Saturday nights in pubs and clubs. One thing I think is important is to get yourself active in things. I was on dance team in college and met a ton of people that
22、wayit was so much easier to make friends when you had a common ground.第一步：请找出这篇短文的几个要素：第一步：请找出这篇短文的几个要素： who 谁 _ when 何时 _ what _ _ _ where 何地 why 原因 _ as a result 结果 _第二步：用第二步：用自己的话自己的话串联起来串联起来(根据万能公式根据万能公式) 万能公式：The passage mainly tells us that sb. (who) did sth. (at someplace at sometime ) becaus
23、e of / as a result of /due to , which led to finally/eventuallyPresentation & EvaluationGroup Work 阅读下面的短文，然后以约30个词概括这篇短文的主要内容。 Hi, I am Mike. I just went through my first year of college. The toughest part on me at first was the general adjustment. I went to a very small high school where my mom wa
24、s a teacher and she did practically everything for me. But at the college I need to know some basic life skills, such as balancing a check-book, laundry, and the things you have to be able to handle that I never thought of in the high school! It was really tough for me at first and I got badly homes
25、ick. Once that first semester was over and I got used to the college life, I love itgood facilities, helpful instructors, and a good library. The students Union organizes various parties every week. I also go to cinemas and concerts, and often spend Saturday nights in pubs and clubs. One thing I thi
26、nk is important is to get yourself active in things. I was on dance team in college and met a ton of people that wayit was so much easier to make friends when you had a common ground.One possible version: Group work 1 范文：The passage mainly tells us that Mike, (who had difficulty in adjusting to the
27、first-year college life) got accustomed to it one semester later because of the colurful activities and enjoyed himself.sbdid sth.whenbecause ofIndividual Work Good morning, ladies and gentlemen. This is Li Hua from Senior Three. Im here today to share with you a good lesson from an overseas Chinese
28、 student living in Germany. It is a true story. After years of hard work, this Chinese student graduated with amazing academic achievements. Everyone thought he was going to get a good job easily and have a bright future. But to his disappointment, he was not even allowed the chance for an interview
29、! The third time he was turned down, he couldnt help telephoning the company to ask why they didnt want him. The answer was simple, We dont hire dishonest people in Germany. What was wrong you might wonder? The truth is, shortly after he arrived in Germany, this clever student found that it was easy
30、 to skip buying subway tickets. So, to save money, he often went without a ticket. As a result, he had been caught without a ticket in the subway three times. From this story, we learn that we may get short-term benefits by dishonest means, but the truth will come out sooner or later and the cost is
31、 high. So remember, honesty is the best policy. Thats all for my speech. Thank you! Presentation & EvaluationIndividual Work Good morning, ladies and gentlemen. This is Li Hua from Senior Three. Im here today to share with you a good lesson from an overseas Chinese student living in Germany. It is a
32、 true story. After years of hard work, this Chinese student graduated with amazing academic achievements. Everyone thought he was going to get a good job easily and have a bright future. But to his disappointment, he was not even allowed the chance for an interview! The third time he was turned down
33、, he couldnt help telephoning the company to ask why they didnt want him. The answer was simple, We dont hire dishonest people in Germany. What was wrong you might wonder? The truth is, shortly after he arrived in Germany, this clever student found that it was easy to skip buying subway tickets. So,
34、 to save money, he often went without a ticket. As a result, he had been caught without a ticket in the subway three times. From this story, we learn that we may get short-term benefits by dishonest means, but the truth will come out sooner or later and the cost is high. So remember, honesty is the
35、best policy. Thats all for my speech. Thank you! 用用自己的话自己的话串联起来串联起来(根据万能公式根据万能公式) One possible version:_ tells us that _ _didnt _ on purpose when _, which led to _due to _.The passage mainly an excellent Chinese student buy the subway tickets studying in Germanyhim not being able to find a jobhis di
36、shonestyReview the steps of writing a summary第一步：先通读全文，找出几个要素第一步：先通读全文，找出几个要素 who 谁 what 什么 when 何时 where 何地 why 原因 as a result/consequence/finally 结果 .,which leads to 第二步：用第二步：用自己的话自己的话串联起来串联起来 万能公式：The passage mainly tells us that sb. (who) did sth. (at someplace at sometime ) because of / as a re
37、sult of /due to , which led to finally/eventuallyHomework阅读下面的短文，然后以约30个词概括这篇短文的主要内容。 Once upon a time some tiny frogs held a competition. The first to reach the top of a very high tower would be the winner .A big crowd gathered around the tower to see the race and cheer them on. The race began .No
38、one in the crowd really believed that any of the tiny frogs would reach the top of tower .They will never make it to the top ,someone said. One by one ,the tiny frogs began to collapse. The crowd kept shouting, Its too difficult !No frog will make it ! More tiny frogs got tired and gave up ,but one
39、continued climbing ,higher and higher .This one wouldnt give up . In the end ,he was the only one left .The only one to get to the top .The other frogs naturally wanted to know : How did the frog make it ? One frog stepped forward to ask the winner .It turned out .that the winner was deaf. He had wo
40、n because he was able to keep his own mind .He couldnt hear criticism ;neither could he hear praise .There is a lesson for us all in the little frogs story. Dont let others hold you back on your way to your goal.One possible version The passage mainly tells us that only one frog tried his best to got to the top of a high tower and won the race because of his deafness, which led to him sticking to his own goals.Thank you!Thank you!