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1、高中英语作文书面表达专题复习讲义高考英语作文模拟仿真练习01（含分析+点评+升格）题目分析从题目看来，写作的要求需要从以下两个层面来展开阐述：1.分析两种阅读方式各有的优势；2.为Lora的提供合理的建议。学生习作Dear Lora,Its my pleasure to hear from you and answer your question. There is no doubt that I will try my best to give you a satisfactory answer. Lets come to get a deeper understanding!With th
2、e development of science and technology, we meet some issues about the books of classic literature and the remake movies, which should we choose? As far as I am concerned, classic literature is better for those who has strong reading skills, while the remake movies will be more suitable for anyone w
3、ho is interested in the original books. As is known to us all, watching movies is popular among us students, it also give us a new approach to understand the original. However, every coin has tow sides. Some details may be deleted for the sake of viewing effect. If you are going to get an objective
4、view, authors feeling and the charm of the charaters, you cant miss the original work!Do you think your problem is soled by reading through my answer? If you still confused about it, I am delighted to discuss this further with you. YoursLi Hua要点评析Dear Lora,Its my pleasure to hear from you and answer
5、 your question. There is no doubt that I will try my best to give you a satisfactory answer. Lets come to get a deeper understanding!评析：先表达收到来信的心情是一种礼仪，值得第一个赞。后面表达乐意给对方满意的答复并提出进一步深讨，无疑是给对方一颗定心丸，再赞一个。有那么一点点的不足之处，就是从句子的表达上来看有点飘，如能够点明来信者需要帮助的困惑之处会更佳。With the development of science and technology, we me
6、et some issues about the books of classic literature and the remake movies, which should we choose?（评析：作为段落总起，分析问题存在的原因，导出选择困难症的根源，这点是比较有现实意义的，必须赞。但这是两个分句，缺少连接词，建议修改。）As far as I am concerned, classic literature is better for those who has strong reading skills, while the remake movies will be more
7、suitable for anyone who is interested in the original books. （评析：分析了两种阅读形式适合的读者对象，这一点能够帮助对方分析自身的具体需求，很走心！）As is known to us all, watching movies is popular among us students, it also give us a new approach to understand the original. However, every coin has tow sides. Some details may be deleted for
8、 the sake of viewing effect.（评析：可以看出在努力运用好句，特别是every coin has two sides 很有说服力。不足之处是从连贯性上有种难以说出来的青涩感，请思考能否通过运用状语辅助，使用一个句子表达完整呢？另外，watching., it also.是两个分句，少了连词。） If you are going to get an objective view, authors feeling and the charm of the charaters, you cant miss the original work!（评析：本句起到总结的作用，让对
9、方清楚两者间你更支持阅读原著，算是给问题一个最终的交代，符合逻辑，棒！）Do you think your problem is soled by readingthrough my answer?(评析：从语言表达上来看，符合中文的表达习惯和思维，从英文表达角度看缺少点利落感。) If you still confused about it, I am delighted to discuss this further with you.（评析：这个结局给人一种欢迎打扰之感，很有人情味，很有温暖，不错！建议是句式如果选择亲和力强一些就完美了。 YoursLi Hua整体评析1.各段落结构的安
10、排合理，整体结构符合大众的视角美感。2.全文的阐述目的明确，脉络清晰，逻辑合理。3.内容能紧扣写作要求，既能抓两面的分析，又能表达个人的具体建议，整体上比较连贯。4.存在少许词汇拼写错误，不过也属正常现象。5.建议斟酌如何才能让语言表达更简练更委婉。习作修改Dear Lora,Its my pleasure to read your letter asking the advantages of the two reading approaches. Now, I would like to tell about my views and offer some advice to you.In
11、 our daily life, many people have met the same confusion as you about which one to choose, reading the classic literature or watching movies. Actually, every coin has two sides. Classic literature is better for those who need to improve their reading skills and study the knowledge of literature, but
12、 it will take much more time than watching movies. While the remaking movies will be more suitable for anyone who is just interested in the story. Thus, if you prefer to getting more knowledge of literature or improving your reading skills, its a good idea for you to read the classic literature! If you just like the story, choose the movie.Finally, it would be my great honor if my suggestions are helpful to you. And if there is anything else that I could do for you, please contact me at any time. YoursLi Hua学科网（北京）股份有限公司