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1、精选优质文档-倾情为你奉上写作丨冠军林远展议论文展示（另附13年冠军点评）2015-12-232015“外研社杯”全国英语写作大赛议论文赛题Can being positive backfire？Optimism provides a multitude of benefits across many facets of life. Researchers have linked looking on the bright side to everything from improved pain tolerance to increased longevity. Theres nodenyi
2、ng the incredible power an optimistic outlook can have on our health, relationships, and performance. But like much in life, it is possible to have too much of a good thing. There are some cases when an overly optimistic outlook can do more harm than good.Suppose there is an online discussion forum
3、on the topic “Can being positive backfire?” Write a post to the forum, clearly stating your opinion and supporting your ideas with specific reasons and examples. You should write about 800 words.冬至福袋亲爱的U粉儿，你对英语写作有什么困惑？欢迎在文末评论区留言，小U会连线本届写作大赛冠军林远展同学为你解答留言从速！林远展2015“外研社杯”全国英语写作大赛冠军选手解题思路拿到题目之后，我足足看了三遍题
4、目中的文本信息。其中，提到了两点：一是being positive；二是being overly positive。我自己的想法就是折中。然后，开头明确提出自己的观点再以一个详例子和三个短例子对所持观点进行适当佐证。接着回到文本信息中的overly positive，对其提出反对和批评，并选取一个例子进行佐证，证明为什么要反对overly positive。最后是对整体的总结，明确表达自己对题目 “Can being positive backfire？”的看法。冠军议论文赏析注：文章为从系统摘出的原生作品，目的是为了展现出选手三个小时内的写作风貌，可能存在部分拼写错误，仅供学习分享使用。Em
5、otions are miscellaneous, such as optimism and pessimisism; merriment and sorrow; excitement and despondency;. Human beings are inherently emotional and emotions do play a significant role in our actions and attitudes. We may encounter some personal tragedies or sufferings, but the actions and attit
6、udes we take might differ. For example, being moderately positive means that we can keep a sanguine outlook on our experience; means that we can transmute the negative feelings into a positive attitude towards our frustration; means that we can look the unpleasant matters in a positive light and tac
7、kle them with great resilience. Personally, I espouse bing a moderately positive individual.Hellen Keller, who was blind and deaf, became a celebrated writers with unflagging belief in herself and unyielding willpower. In front of Hellen Keller, there lied two options: either live live to its fulles
8、t or wither away like the autumn leaves. Instead of capitulating to the sheer darkness and silence, she harbored prodigious fortitude to vanquish the personal trageies and sufferings. Under the assistance of her teacher Anne, she learnt Braille and writing. After reading a sea of books, Hellen Kelle
9、r soaked up all the quintessence and wisdom of other writers and attempted to write her own. The spirit of never being pessimistic sustained her in the most darkest hours of her life and she rose like a shinging star in the firmament of writing. Her teacher also held a positive belief in Hellen so s
10、he resolved to help Hellen face life positively.There are innumerable other examplars of being moderately positive. Thomas Edison, by dint of a postive mindset and unwavering pursuit, invented the most endurable and suitable material to make the incandescent bulb which marked the inauguration of the
11、 electrical era. Madame Curie, by virtue of a optimistic attitude and steadfast tenacity, extracted an infinitesimal amount of radium from tons of impure materials after three-year-and-nine-month experiment and advocated to use radioisotope to cure cancerwhich rendered humanity a powerful weapon to
12、fight against the fatal disease. Hua Luogeng, a renowned Chineses methematician, metamorphosed into a math master by holding a positive outlook and unswerving doggedness.Its not hard to find the common denominator of the brilliant and reverent giants: a positive outlook towards the sufferings and fa
13、ilures.Being moderately positive will arm us with an effective weapon to repel the enemies of negative feelings that will hold us back and become a stumbling block on the way ahead. It will bolster up our belief and confidence in the face of the mishaps and torments and we will possess a more optimi
14、stic perspective to the life tragedies. Being moderately positive is like a beacon light of hope which will illuminate our way ahead and resembles a lighthouse which show us the path when we are disoriented. Then all the darkness will fade away and crumble into dust. Being moderately positive is the
15、 inner force which propels you froward in the teeth of setback and hurdles. We will ooze confidence and persistence no matter how tough the situation is.Nevertheless, we are supposed to put the positive mindset in perspective, which means we need to understand it in the appropriate and right way. He
16、re the positive mindset is a moderately positive one, not overly optimistic. Anything that is too much will backfire. The last emperor of Shang Dynasty was being too sanguine and optimistic and believed that his kingdom was impregnable and was never to be toppled by others. Thus he sank into the deb
17、auched and promiscuous lifestyle, listened to the malign suggestions of his diabolical officers and precluded any good suggestions from being sent to him. The decadence and depravity eventually led to his downfall and his power was nullified and compromised. This renders us a good lesson that we sha
18、ll never become overly optimistic about our lives, works, conditions and circumstances because undue and inordinate optimism led to the complacent and smug mentality. It is always counterproductive.Individuals should always strive for the better selves rather than rest and wallow in self-contentment
19、 when the achievements are made. That is why being overly optimistic should be deprecated and criticized.So, what we need to do is to differentiate the positive mind from the overly-optimistic one, for there is a blurry line between these two. Our capacity to distinguish between them must be acuqire
20、d by constant failures and attempts. Always being moderately positive is not an easy task and trying to keep it is even much harder. Sometimes we will become disheartened and lose all the hope; sometimes we will enjoy the exhilaration of being successful and then get obsessed with the current achiev
21、ements. Through failures, we can have a much clearer interpretation of being moderately postive. And this is a long process that should be covered step by step and brick by brick.Can being positive backfaire? I cannot answer in the affirmative. But add moderately to the sentence: Can being moderatel
22、y positive backfire? My answer is definitely NO.往届选手点评牛云凤 天津外国语大学研究生2013“外研社杯”全国英语写作大赛冠军2015联合国学术影响力写作大赛获奖者Unipus微信U主播对于议论文来说，审题永远都是重中之重。而其实审题也是最具趣味性的，品味题目的引导性，琢磨关键词带来的启发。这篇议论文的题目恰恰就是这种非常吸引人的类型。读到疑问句的标题“Can being positive backfire?”让人耳目一新。通常提到乐观主义，大家想到的可能都是其种种好处。题目材料第一段也顺着读者的思路写出了乐观使人长寿、助人成功等等。但笔锋一转
23、，材料第一段最后两句给出了这篇文章的关键：乐极可能生悲。关键词是“Overly optimistic outlook”。分析到这里可能对于许多同学来说，这道题的谜已经解了。乐观是好的，但乐到极端则会有害。因此推断只有适度乐观才是解决办法，就如白马非马。材料第二段则为硬性的要求：字数限制，陈述观点并提供支持的材料、理由或实例。从内容上说，作者的这篇文章内容详实，论据有力。第一段虽并没有开门见山，而是谈论了人性情多变，乐观有其独特的好处。但第一段结尾给出了明确的论点：Personally, I espouse being a moderately positive individual.这里如果观
24、察仔细的话就能发现作者的高明之处在于对题目的回应。作者作出了回应并没有逃避冲突，但绝不是盲目的回应是或否，而是有条件的回应。“moderately” 这个副词的出现体现了作者审题的功力。立论之后就要提供论据来支持论点。作者分别选取了海伦凯勒和居里夫人作为主要的正面实例。接下来的过渡段非常巧妙的总结了她们成功的众多因素中的“公分母”是乐观的态度。并进一步引出证实了适度的乐观确实对人大有裨益。而接下来笔锋一转到了驳论的阶段，过度乐观有怎样的害处呢？作者举了商纣王荒淫无度、贪图享乐最终家破国亡的例子给人以警示，也充分证明了过度乐观的害处。那我们究竟该如何做呢？作者在倒数第二段提议我们应在成功和挫折中
25、学会调适、适度乐观。文章最后一段意味深长，回应论点，整篇文章显示了作者严密的逻辑和辩证的思维。语言运用也是该文章一大亮点。词汇丰富，运用自如。比如：prodigious fortitude, unswerving doggedness, mishaps and torments和setbacks and hurdles 等短语充分体现了作者高端词汇运用的娴熟。而像Braille, radioisotope和the incandescent bulb等不常用的技术型的词汇体现了作者词汇量之大。除此之外，作者句式运用灵活多变，长短句交叉结合非常老练。作者还尤其擅长使用修辞，文章中大量使用排比，对偶
26、和比喻等修辞手法，都体现了作者深厚的语言功底。从结构来看，整个谋篇布局一气呵成。开头给出论点。主体明晰，立论有据，驳论有力。结论明确，首尾呼应。三大部分之间的过度和衔接也非常自然。组织顺序合理，再一次提醒大家提纲的重要性。不得不承认，这是一篇难得的好议论文，各方面都可圈可点，尤其是作者既有男选手擅长的缜密的逻辑，又有优美精确的语言实在难得。当然，看到各闪光点的同时也要注意到细节的不完美。比如，作者有多处拼写错误，冠词使用不当等。但瑕不掩瑜，短短三个小时的时间，好文章倚马可待，相信作者完成这样一篇美文落笔划上句点时应该是幸福得让人羡慕吧。写作大赛冠军林远展决赛记叙文展示2015-12-22201
27、5“外研社杯”全国英语写作大赛记叙文赛题Read the beginning of the story below and complete the story in 600-800 words.An Unexpected GuestRiya was terrified when she heard the news on television that an alien spaceship had landed in her city. As a precaution, her father closed all the doors and windows.Though everyone w
28、as asleep, Riya could not sleep a wink. The thought of aliens in her city kept her mind racing. It was almost midnight when she heard the door bell ring.By now she was really scared. She ran towards the door but her father instructed her to go back to bed. She pretended to go towards her room, but h
29、id behind the sofa and watched her father open the door.冬至福袋亲爱的U粉儿，你对英语写作有什么困惑？欢迎在文末评论区留言，小U会连线本届写作大赛冠军林远展同学为你解答留言从速！林远展2015“外研社杯”全国英语写作大赛冠军When her father opened the door, a human-like alien was standing outside the house, looking weary and exhausted in the faint light radiated from the house. Her
30、father stepped back to the house instinctively. Please dont be afraid. My name is Carson and I come from another planet outside of the solar system, Carson replied with a unusual voice, similar to the alien-like voice heared on the television. We are not your enemies and wont do any harm to human be
31、ings.Riyas father still did not trust him. Our planet is being attacked by another planet dwellers and they are much more powerful than we are. Our home is almost devastated by their ruthless assault. Thousands of us are uprooted and cannot find an asylum nearby. And Earth is the most pleasant place
32、 to go, which is not far from our home compared to other inhabitable planets in the boundless universe. I lose contact with my fellows and thats why I am here all alone, Carson said genuinely without any trying.Riyas father gained courage to greet Carson and shook hands with him. I really empathize
33、with your tribulation, her father said, quite careful with his words. Can I just stay the night in your sofa because I am utterly out of strength after the trip, Carson implored. Riyas father was a person with a heart of gold who usually dont know how to refuse others. Ok, just one night. Tomorrow y
34、ou are leaving, her father said. He ushered Carson in the house and gave a cashmere blanket to Carson. Thanky you very much, Sir. I owe you a lot, Carson said full of emotion.Carson lied down on the sofa and began to soothe the tiredness from his muscle. Riya, who huddled behind the sofa, crept from
35、 the sofa and wanted to have a close look at Carson beacause the darkness of the night prevented her from seeing him clearly. She found he was nothing different from the homon sapiens, which gave her a great deal of courage to greet Carson.Hello, Carson, she said in an intentionally muffled voice be
36、cause she did not want to wake her father up. Carson was startled by the sudden meterializetion of such a tiny little girl but he regained his composure in an instant. Hello, Carson replied. My name is Riya, she whispered. Hi, Riya, thank you so much for letting me stay here, Carson said with gratit
37、ude. No, you are welcome, she replied. Out of her curiosity, she could not subdue the urge to learn more about this unexpected guest from another planet.I always think there is no other planet where living creatures inhabit, she said. Thats not true. There are thousands of other planets in the enorm
38、ous univers that are suitable for living and teeming with great wonders like Earth, Carson replied with an air of intelligence. Really? Riya gasped. Yes, of course, Carson said.In my planet, the trees are sky-reaching; flowers never wither; seasons never change; cars can fly in the sky; our building
39、s can migrate on their own; everything is computerized in our lives, Carson said. Wow, thats wonderful. I can only watch such a scene in the scientific films and I always yearn to visit such a place personally, she siad with excitement and mirth. But almost everything is ravaged by our foes who are
40、relentless in their barbaric invasion. And all the charm and beauty perished in their remorseless attack. Its not an easy job to restore and rebulid our home, Carson replied in melancholy.Im so sorry to hear that but you can stay here so that I can hear more interesting things that I do not know, sh
41、e said in a serious tone. I will persuade my father to let you stay and you dont need to fret about it. You are the angel and I really appreciate that, Carson replied, tears brimming up in his eyes. And Riya found that aliens also had personal feelings, which was quite different from the scenes in t
42、he film in which aliens are heartless and devoild of any emotions.Good night, Carson, I think you need a good rest, she uttered in the low voice and tiptoed back to her bedroom.The sunshine slanted through the windows and the whole family was awaken. Riya jumped up from her bed and got dressed swift
43、ly, storming out of her room just to say good morning to Carson. When she rushed to the living room, Carson was gone, with the blanket foled in square and a brief note on the top it. Riya was completely reluctant to accept that. The tears streamed down her unwashed cheeks.The note read: Dear Sir and
44、 Riya, you are very kind to me and I will never forget your hospitability. At 3:00 am, I recieved my fellows message that our leader is shceming to fight back and all of us should march with each other to repel our foes away from our mother planet. As a member of the big family, I should bear the ob
45、iligation to safeguard my planet when it is in peril and jeopardy. Sorry for my leaving without advance notification. But I promise I will come back to repay all the warmth I have received here. And Riya, I will talk about the mysteries residing in the universe with you. Best regards!Riya simmered down, clutching the note in her hand. She could not forget Carson although they only had a several-minute talk. Time marched on and three years later, there was a familiar ring on the door in the midnight.This time, Riya opened it.专心-专注-专业